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On the Beach

The autumn sky is overcast.
The choppy sea is murky grey.
The flustered waves flop on the sand
where the two brothers are at play.

Their trousers rolled up to the knees
they tease the water with bare toes.
Each foot in turn sinks with a squelch
then up it comes and backward goes.

The boys have fun and run about.
The air is cool but they don’t care.
They do not miss the hidden sun;
Of sighing breeze are unaware.

Oh to be young and free of thoughts
that could lay heavy on the mind
and for a moment turn the clock
to distant years left far behind!


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Paul Callus ~ 28th October 2015
Contest: Oil Paintings 1-2-3
Sponsor: Eve Roper
Placed 1st

[Inspired by an Eve Roper painting.]
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 11/20/2015 9:54:00 AM
This creative piece is so deserving of first place Paul. Congratulations to you my friend!
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/21/2015 8:12:00 AM
Thank you, Connie! Lovely of you to stop by:) I wish you a lovely weekend. Regards // paul
Date: 11/19/2015 11:27:00 AM
Seemingly simple at first, line after line deliver such captivating imagery that a reader is transported to that place and time. The last stanza ending on a nostalgic note is perfect. Congrats on your awesome win, Paul, hugs!
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Date: 11/20/2015 9:18:00 AM
Your insightful comments and congrats are truly appreciated, Kim! Thank you for your sweet support:) Hugs // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 4:59:00 PM
Hello Paul!! I see from the comments below that Congratulations are in order for a Big Win!! And so -- "Congratulations"!! And a "7"!! This is a quite beautiful piece indeed Paul. I really like this one. ("On the Beach" just happens to be the title of short story that my wife Ingrid is working on now in "German," under the title: "Am Strand." We both plan to translate it later into English, and I plan to include it in my second book.) Just thought I would tell you about this! Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 11/20/2015 9:04:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by with encouraging feedback and with some news as well, Gary. Hope Ingrid will soon have her story finished, and you appear to be quite busy preparing another book! Best of luck in all your endeavours! Best regards // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 3:43:00 PM
I really enjoyed your quatrain and am learning from yourself and others..i think this form is one of the more difficult. Congratulations!...:), jill
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:53:00 PM
Thank you for the lovely feedback, Jill! Pleased that you enjoyed this quatrain; we all learn from one another:) ~ Regards // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 2:52:00 PM
What a beautiful sentiment this has, ....I too wish we could turn back the clock to the carefree days of childhood... (at least for those of us who were fortunate enough to have such cherished memories. :) Congrats to you Paul !
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Date: 11/18/2015 3:07:00 PM
Many thanks, Carrie; glad you can relate to my written words! Yes...there are some who want to forget their past, and not be reminded of it! ~ Regards:) // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 8:24:00 AM
Congrats on he win Paul
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:50:00 PM
Thank you, John. All the best. // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 7:59:00 AM
Paul, your well written words complimented the painting really good.Congratulations on your win it was well deserved:-)Alexis
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:45:00 PM
I appreciate your lovely comments, Alexis. Thank you for a warm visit:) // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 7:50:00 AM
Beautiful Paul! Congratulations.
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Date: 11/18/2015 2:25:00 PM
Thank you Richard; your winning poem is truly impressive. Regards // paul
Date: 11/18/2015 6:21:00 AM
Congrats Paul on top podium finish! hugs!~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:29:00 PM
Thank you Olive_eloi; as always your visit and congrats are appreciated:) Hugs // paul **** will be back to you ****
Date: 11/18/2015 3:28:00 AM
Another excellent work as usual, I feel like being a child again...congrats on this lovely work and win...hugs
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:28:00 PM
Yes, Kayode, we are often tempted to roll back the years! Thank you for reading and enjoying. All the best. // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 9:50:00 PM
Hi Paul, Congratulations, Have a nice day. SKAT
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Date: 11/18/2015 3:21:00 PM
Thank you Skat! Always appreciative of your visits:) Regards // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 9:40:00 PM
Thank you so very much for composing and submitting a poem in my contest, Paul, congratulations on your win!!! My husband and I truly enjoyed the poem. Hugs dear friend Eve
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 12:23:00 PM
It was my pleasure, Eve! That painting is lovely and inspiring. Thank you for placing me tops in your contest; also pleased that you shared my poem with your husband! ~ Regards & Hugs // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 9:37:00 PM
Love your interpretation of the paintings. Excellent win Paul.
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:18:00 PM
Glad that you found it to your liking, Michael. Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 7:59:00 PM
Well written, Paul. congratulations.
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 2:28:00 PM
Thank you Lin:) Best regards // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 7:56:00 PM
I love the outstanding imagery, dear Paul:) Congratulations on the well-deserved win!
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 3:20:00 PM
Thank you for the lovely comments, Elis, and the congrats! All the best. // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 7:18:00 PM
Congrats Paul on your well deserved win!!! -LU *smiles* xxx
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 2:41:00 PM
Thank you Laura; it's lovely to see you on the winners' list, too:) ~ Regards // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 6:46:00 PM
Congratulations Paul
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2015 2:22:00 PM
Thank you, Nayda; enjoyed your winning entry, too. // paul
Date: 11/17/2015 6:00:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) Hugs jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2015 6:21:00 PM
:-) :-) xx
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 6:19:00 PM
Thank you Jan! Pleased to have you next to me on the podium:) Hugs // paul
Date: 11/5/2015 6:03:00 PM
Absolutely riveting and beautiful. Your imagery is grand - the sinking toes part was perfect and so were many other lines - the nostalgic tug and relatability work. Yes, I make up words when I'm excited ... CayCay
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/6/2015 12:14:00 PM
Hi CayCay...your reaction to this poem is beyond expectations:) Thank you...I'm lost for words! Nostalgia also works for me...must be because time is fast going by! ~ Once again, thank you....regards // paul
Date: 11/3/2015 2:13:00 PM
This is excellent, Paul! A beautiful, reminiscent poem that evokes feelings of nostalgia and longing for worry-free times.
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/3/2015 2:27:00 PM
Thank you, Heather! Love your comments:) Children at play on the beach always manage to take me back in time when life seemed to be so much simpler than it is now! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 11/1/2015 2:54:00 PM
very well done, Paul. You really captured the picture!! Gosh, I hope to do this one soon!
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/1/2015 3:18:00 PM
Pictures are a good source of inspiration, Andrea. I hope that Eve will like this one. Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul
Date: 10/29/2015 6:37:00 PM
So creative and vivid, I love it! Good luck in the contest:)
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Paul Callus
Date: 10/30/2015 3:26:00 PM
Thank you, Elis; glad you enjoyed. ~ All the best. // paul
Date: 10/29/2015 4:45:00 AM
It is as always Paul, beautiful and sized attention. A very impressive write, good luck in the contest. Stay blessed.............A.M.
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Paul Callus
Date: 10/29/2015 11:18:00 AM
You never fail to come with complimentary words of encouragement, Afolabi! Thank you! Blessings...paul
Date: 10/29/2015 4:42:00 AM
You painted with your words Paul, I like how you ended this.... always good flow... ~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Paul Callus
Date: 10/29/2015 11:11:00 AM
Thank you Olive_eloi! I hope that I have done Eve's painting proud:) Just noticed your sm...will be back to you:) Hugs // paul
Date: 10/28/2015 11:43:00 PM
Subtle words n childhood memories.. such a sweet write Paul! Sure to do well in contest.. perfect seven.. good luck!
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Paul Callus
Date: 10/29/2015 11:07:00 AM
The lovely comments and the 7 rating go down well with this humble poet, Upma! Thank you!:) Regards // paul
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