Home » Poems » Paul Callus » On Loch Ness

On Loch Ness

Moonlight falls upon the dormant land
Where peaceful calm reclines
Upon the shimmering lake
Ripples form and then reveal
A dark silhouette rising out of water.

-------------------------------------------
Contest: Out of Water
Sponsor: Sheri Fresonke Harper

mysterywaterverse

♡Like0

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Julia Ward

April 7, 2015 at 2:31 AM

Well done for your win in the "Out of Water" contest, Paul. Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus

April 7, 2015 at 4:25 AM

Thank you Julia. Your visit is appreciated. Hugs // paul

Mohan Chutani

April 5, 2015 at 5:15 AM

a legend behind Loch Ness. Nicely put. Congrats. Mohan

Paul Callus

April 5, 2015 at 8:11 AM

Thank you; I'm pleased that you like, Mohan. Your Triolets did very well! All the best. // paul

Eve Roper

April 4, 2015 at 8:39 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win and a 7. Have a wonderful Easter Sunday

Paul Callus

April 5, 2015 at 8:09 AM

Thank you Eve, on both counts! I wish you also a very Happy & Blessed Easter! // paul

Jan Allison

April 4, 2015 at 6:43 PM

wonderful imagery Paul - you captured 'loch ness' perfectly - have been teice but nessie was sleeping:-( am sorry I missed reading this one before:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

April 5, 2015 at 8:07 AM

No problem, Jan; as I always repeat, it's impossible to read everything:) I am pleased that you like it. Nessie seems to have very long sleeps! Hugs // paul

Sandra Haight

April 4, 2015 at 4:18 PM

Paul, congratulations on your nice win! I really like the way you went with this theme...outside the box! Love it! Sandra

Paul Callus

April 4, 2015 at 4:38 PM

Thank you Sandra...you are the first with congratulations:) and I like your comments. // Wishing you a Blessed & Happy Easter! // paul

James Fraser

March 29, 2015 at 4:26 PM

Just what is in there lurking so deep. Once the Media knows shall 'Loch Ness' keep. Maybe it's better if stays under the waves, to deter money media and it's disgusting crave. It's another part of Scotland that has that mysterious aura about it. The other for me is the 'Isle of Skye' I do hope your footsteps grace said island Paul. Kind regards always, James :) :)

James Fraser

March 30, 2015 at 1:22 PM

The monetary comment is a worry if found what people would do to make money out of it, and not purely from the mysterious aura you mention. All around the 'Great Glen' know and respect all whom travel to catch a glimpse of 'Nessie' - to see kids staring out at the expanse of 'Loch Ness' is a joy to behold. I was one of these kids. One day maybe I'll get to visit Malta, as it's played a part in my life. I can't speak for the IOM, but Skye, terrific place. Kind regards, James.....

Paul Callus

March 30, 2015 at 12:57 PM

Thank you for your rhyming reply, James. Nessie brings in a lot of money, whether it exists or not....that mysterious aura has a lot to do with it. My wife's g'parents come from the Isle of Skye and the Isle of Man. We plan to go and visit both islands...one day! All the best:) // paul

Sara Kendrick

February 27, 2015 at 9:08 AM

Ahh!! Cute one..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go ..Sara

Paul Callus

February 27, 2015 at 10:50 AM

Thank you Sara; I have seen a couple of good ones on this theme, too. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Harry Horsman

February 26, 2015 at 6:29 AM

The Monster reigns supreme, so does your poetry,

Paul Callus

February 26, 2015 at 8:53 AM

Thank you Harry! You are too kind my friend! All the best. // paul

M. L. Kiser

February 25, 2015 at 6:09 PM

I can see that silhouette arising from the silvery loch.

Paul Callus

February 26, 2015 at 8:55 AM

Don't get too near! It's mate might be lurking on the bank, somewhere! // paul

Cherl Dunn

February 24, 2015 at 6:02 PM

Dear Paul, Love your refreshing out of the water write My dear friend, great job on this the Loch Ness story, you've done well here my friend, cheri good luck in the contest I'll cross my fingers for you.

Paul Callus

February 26, 2015 at 8:58 AM

Thank you for visiting with encouraging words, Cherl! Nessie never disappoints. All the best:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

February 24, 2015 at 2:47 PM

i knew about Loch Ness when i did a collabpration with James... :) nice Paul.. //olive eloisa

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 3:50 PM

Yes, I know about that collaboration...and several others, too! I'm sure you'll jump at the chance of visiting Scotland one of these days:) hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

February 24, 2015 at 10:07 AM

I published my first book a little over a year ago. Kind of a late start at 52 but I am glad I went for it. The book started out at 75 pages and thanks to a mentor it grew to 320 pages. I didn't think I had that much to say *lol*.

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 12:05 PM

No, Richard....52 is not a late start. I wrote lots of poems when I was young and many were published in several anthologies, but today I wish that I had waited longer before publishing; age and experience are necessary for works to reach a certain standard. So I say you did well to wait! Congratulations on your book...320 pages is no joke!! If it's on sale online I would be pleased to have any relevant information so I can look it up. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

February 24, 2015 at 10:05 AM

What kind of books have you written Paul. Are they available as an ebook?

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 11:58 AM

Both books are in Maltese; one is a children's story called "Marina" which I wrote for my students; the other is called "Hal Safi" and it's the fruit of years of research...the history of the village where I live. I have 1 Amazon ebook in English, "Meander" (Dec 2014); several of the poems on it already appeared on Soup. Thank you for the interest. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

February 24, 2015 at 8:41 AM

Very cool Paul, congratulations! (Refering to the book being printed) that must be a great feeling of accomplishment.

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 9:46 AM

Thank you Richard. I've written a couple of books before, but this one is a translation of a true story that captured my attention about 40 years ago; took me all this time to finally translate and publish it. // paul

Poesy Relish

February 24, 2015 at 8:29 AM

A lovely Tanka... wish you luck in the contest.. nad

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 9:45 AM

Glad you like it, Nadiya. Thank you for stopping by and reading. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

February 23, 2015 at 8:36 AM

Loch ness's sister lives in our Lake Okanagan. Her name is Ogopogo!

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 8:23 AM

Yes, it's true about Ogopogo; I read about it when researching British Columbia, while translating into Maltese the book written by Sergei Kourdakov: "Forgive me, Natasha". [incidentally it's being printed this week.] // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

February 23, 2015 at 4:50 AM

A very befitting artful Tanka for the contest dear friend, Paul! Good luck!

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 8:26 AM

I'm pleased that you find it to your liking, Demi. All the best my friend. // paul

Arthur Vaso

February 22, 2015 at 9:26 PM

I Have to teach you how to make sure the body stays at the bottom of the lake!!! LOL ( kidding ) I agree with David, I love old legends and this poem does justice to the tale

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 8:18 AM

Thank you Arthur! I look forward to your witty banter:) ... and to the serious comments, too! // paul

David Meade

February 22, 2015 at 3:58 PM

I love these old legends . . . they never seem to die but have a life that captivates the imagination. Nicely done dear friend. 7

Paul Callus

February 24, 2015 at 8:13 AM

Thank you David. These legends will live on; it's the method of presentation that changes! Appreciate the high rating my friend. // paul

Nette Onclaud

February 22, 2015 at 11:51 AM

i can visualize the loch ness rising high like a tower... the tempo of subtle suspense is amazing,paul...great work.. huggs

Paul Callus

February 22, 2015 at 2:45 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Nette. Hope you had a lovely weekend. // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

February 22, 2015 at 8:32 AM

O beautiful poem ...this fabled monster..Love Paul// rajat

Paul Callus

February 22, 2015 at 2:44 PM

Glad you found my monster to your liking, Rajat. All the best. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

February 22, 2015 at 6:17 AM

- Beautiful lines in a beautiful poem, Paul - It won my heart! - Hope it will give you a first place in the contest - I wish you a great Sunday - of course a 7 !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

February 22, 2015 at 2:47 PM

Thank you Anne Lise! Love your comments and the high rating. Hope your Sunday has been a nice one, too. hugs /x/ paul

Julia Ward

February 22, 2015 at 4:39 AM

A shiver-producing last line due to the imagery you have created, Paul. I hope you win the contest. Hugs, Alicia, xx

Paul Callus

February 22, 2015 at 2:49 PM

Glad you enjoyed, Alicia...tried to create a suspenseful atmosphere...hope I managed it. Thank you for the lovely wishes.:) hugs // paul

Hija De La Luna

February 21, 2015 at 6:52 PM

Oh Paul, beauty, calm...Your words flow with grace...even the eerie element of the dark perfected it. So effective I could picture it clearly in my head. Made me think, at times there is something hidden in what we see as beautiful. But, I don't mind I would like to revel in the beauty that I see!

Paul Callus

February 22, 2015 at 2:51 PM

I love your insightful comments, Hija. Pleased you can revel in calm and beauty! All the best. // paul

On Loch Ness

Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment

Member Area

Soup Social

Member Poems

Member Poets

Famous Poems

Famous Poets

Poetry Resources