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On Finding a Dead Deer In My Backyard

I saw them a few weeks ago. My wife called me, something urgent, so I left the computer and went to see what excited her. Three deer, 3 young deer meandering round our 1/4 acre backyard. They look thin she said, I agreed (not saying it was not a good sign with winter coming on). We enjoyed watching them through our plate glass door, their casual grace, that elegance of walk deer have when unafraid. They were special, even more than the occasional cardinal alighting in our yard like a breathing ruby with wings--I told her deer can only see what moves, so we stayed as still as possible, holding ourselves tight like a pair of insensate statues. Two of the white tailed beauties grazed daintily on the ground but the 3rd was drawn to our giant holly tree resplendent with myriad red berries like necklaces thrown capricious. I was concerned-- something alarming about a deer drawn like the proverbial moth-- safe, I wondered, for deer or tree? The triplets soon left us as casually as they had come and a week went by-- then one day a single deer came back. I say back because she went straight for the holly tree and I banged on the plate glass door and yelled as fierce as an old man can yell to scare off the now unwanted intruder, for something told me the tree would be death to the deer. She fled but next day came back again, again alone and again with eyes only for that tree, an Eve that could not say no to the forbidden fruit--or berries or leaves it appears. Again I chased her away and for a few days saw no return. Then one brisk morning our neighbor called-- he saw what we could not see in the deep green thickness of that holly tree: the doe lay sleeping under its canopy (so death always seems with animals, unlike a human corpse where something is gone), killed it seemed by the berries or leaves of the innocent tree. I called my township-- they said, put the carcass by the street and we'll send someone to pick it up. But I couldn't, or wouldn't not just because I walk with a cane and am old and unsure how such a moving would be done-- no, no, it was more-- when I saw the deer lying sheltered beneath the tree it loved, the tree it died for, it seemed a sacred place, consecrated-- I could not bring myself to violate nature's holy ground. Fortunately I have a neighbor who is not sentimental and he dragged the dead doe roughly to the curb and I knew, by its pungent unearthly smell of death, it was the only answer. [ Nature Contest, 5/8/21]

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Date: 12/11/2020 1:26:00 PM
Wow ~ awesome
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Date: 11/15/2020 11:03:00 AM
Such a beautifully written poem. Nature can be so indifferent. Death can seem sacred with no prayers spoken. It is the natural outcome but sometimes too soon. I have a new FAV poem in my Favorites, Thank you. Best regards, SuZ
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L. J. Carber
Date: 11/27/2020 7:44:00 AM
Thank you Suzanne, very much appreciated!
Date: 6/24/2020 2:42:00 AM
Such happenings here LJ have been pigeons killed and eaten by raptors on our front lawn as we humans retreated indoors during this covid lockdown.Stay creative especially with your always enjoyable narrative genre
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L. J. Carber
Date: 6/24/2020 10:06:00 AM
Thanks Brian--yes, our 1/4 acre backyard looks like a wildlife preserve! We've seen every animal from eagles to wild turkeys--just waiting for a black bear to show up--and this is 10 miles from Philadelphia!
Date: 6/7/2020 10:56:00 AM
A poignant story told with heart-felt feelings. Beautifully rendered! Best wishes.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 6/8/2020 12:25:00 PM
Thank you, your kind words are very much appreciated!
Date: 5/16/2020 11:36:00 AM
A story that catches the heart and mind with images that stay. Your spare and factual description belies any pretence at being ‘poetic’, and creates a gripping effect. Well written, Len.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/17/2020 5:36:00 PM
Thanks Geoff--I don't do much prose-poetry but this story needed a narrative; may you and yours walk with God in these fraught times and fear naught.
Date: 5/15/2020 4:23:00 PM
Superb writing L.J.! I was so moved by these words “ when I saw the deer lying sheltered beneath the tree it loved, the tree it died for, it seemed a sacred place, consecrated--I could not bring myself to violate nature's holy ground.” Congratulations on your win I would have placed at the top. Poignant and beautifully delivered! Blessings xxoo
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/15/2020 4:38:00 PM
Thank you Connie--if only you had been the judge! I'm proud of this poem--it actually makes me feel a bit sad, thinking of that young doe. And it has been published in 2 lit mags--which is better balm for my ego than any contest.
Date: 5/8/2020 9:47:00 PM
wow, so WELL crafted this is. I love your quality of telling this story. STraight to faves.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/9/2020 11:04:00 AM
Thank you Andrea--- I've very glad you liked it--and may you go with God in these fraught times....
Date: 5/5/2020 4:11:00 PM
They are so beautiful to watch as they roam--to have them in your yard was areal treat, L.J.--- until of course, the story takes a turn. Sad ending, but that is life.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/6/2020 9:12:00 AM
Yes, it was sad, Vijay--yet also so beautiful in a bittersweet way....

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