Andrea Dietrich Poet Kimo

On a Sweltering Day

on a sweltering day, I watch the sky
as it tries to eke out tears. . . . 
but it simp ly   can    not

drenched in sweat, too stifled even to stir,
I see grey clouds gathering -
then suddenly explode!

sheets upon sheets of rain come pounding down -
freed, I stand smiling beneath. . . . 
as heaven weeps for joy

Written 7/15/11
For P.D's BEST RAIN POEM Contest

(This is a form called Kimo. Kin to haiku, 
each Kimo has three lines with count 10/7/6)

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Robin Davis April 5, 2014 at 12:38 PM Andrea I could feel the dryness and heat so clearly. Sending you some of our cold and rainy weather to relieve your sweltering. LOL Thank you for the nice comment on my Don't Criticize poem.

Harry Horsman September 21, 2012 at 7:29 AM having lived in Perth western Australia, and not seen a cloud for months on end, i can feel this poem, and the wonderful soul that created it......

Tahera Mannan July 18, 2011 at 9:28 PM This is awesome Andrea. Loved it. Many congrats for this win.

Wilma Neels July 18, 2011 at 12:30 PM Andrea congratulations on your win in Pd's contest ;) lfde Wilma

Elaine George July 18, 2011 at 10:09 AM Great Kimo, Andrea. Many congrats on your WIN. Lainie

Carol Sunshine Brown July 18, 2011 at 9:43 AM Congratulations Andrea on your win in the contest of P.D. "Rain". Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud July 17, 2011 at 10:54 PM hot offering so well laid, abdie.. whoot! sunny congrats on your special win :) huggs

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 17, 2011 at 3:46 PM this sure is one awesome write, Andrea--- how cool that you wrote a new one for this-- live how you took on the kimo here, and of how "heaven weeps for joy" can't help but feel it's that way sometimes :) super congrats on your win here :D hugs to you :D

Robert Johnson July 17, 2011 at 1:52 PM On a sweltering day I'm in AC. It's quite a lovely place to be. The ozone layer is fading fast. Just how did we cope in the past. A hundred and one in the shade. Mosquito's, the only ones that've got it made. With natures showers to feed their need. And our blood to satiate their greed.

Dr.Ram Mehta July 17, 2011 at 8:21 AM My congratulations on this win in the contest of P.D., Andrea

Michael J. Falotico July 17, 2011 at 7:22 AM This is such an amazing way to describe the rain.... Congrats and joy for you my dear Andrea....love Michael

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 17, 2011 at 7:18 AM Congrats Andrea on a fab four place win in PD's rain contest .. we have had nothing but sweltering days so appreciate this write sincerely luv... enjoy my friend.... super...duper...

Poet Destroyer A July 17, 2011 at 2:27 AM Andrea, Congratulations on your great Rain entry! Thank you for entering your awesome poem about my favorite refreshing gift of life. Also thanks for supporting my contest. Have yourself a great and wonderful night,..p.d

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 16, 2011 at 3:50 PM wow u sure have a way with words Andrea.. luv eke out tears luv.. good luck with this best rain poem.. my entry is Parallels from a bit back about rain and ...what else.. luv..oh.. am consumed with luv..haha..

Daver Austin July 16, 2011 at 1:50 PM Sounds like the mountains. Love this form. going to try it. LOve, daver

Jack Horne July 16, 2011 at 1:16 PM Yes, it feels wonderful when it finally manages to rain, doesn't it? Lovely imagery : )

Jslambert Mister Roboto July 16, 2011 at 9:27 AM It is hot here in the Dirty South too. Not near enough rain. Nice poem! I don't understand the meaning of the last two comments you left me. Maybe I am just slow! Take care. And thank you again for the help with your archives. We are off until AUG.8th.

James Fraser July 16, 2011 at 8:34 AM *sheets upon sheets of rain come pounding down* - come to Inverness, my home town. Where you'll find rain, nearly every single day, and stand with me, as her champagne on us sprays. Good luck in the contest Andrea :)

Phyllis Babcock July 16, 2011 at 7:25 AM The rain brings relief after the hot spell. I should try a Kimo one of these days. I missed Carolyn contest. She had one spot left and that night I did research and wrote it to post the next morning but it was taken off -so someone posted one. That evening a show was on about the rock formations around the world so I learned a ton. ha ha. love phyl

Judy Ball July 16, 2011 at 6:08 AM Excellent. Relief after a drought. Good Stuff. God Bless, JB

Joyce Johnson July 15, 2011 at 10:06 PM This would be a wonderful relief on a sweltering day. However we have been getting the rain without the heat here. Thanks for your comment on Illiterate Goose.She was probably looking for ha ha humor and that's not me. Thanks for getting it. Love, Joyce

Lee Ramage July 15, 2011 at 9:18 PM I liked your poem. Leee