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Old Mr. Oak Old Mr. Oak had bumps on his sides. In his tired arms, black birds did reside. He had seen all kinds come and go, watching the young become old and slow. The largest and king of mighty trees, for 100 years, he’d danced in the breeze. Children had used him to play at their games, and he laughed at snowstorms, ice and rains. Seasons came and time passed by. Many have stood under his watchful eye. Lovers carved their initials in a heart. Smiling, he knew he'd always be a part. Old Mr. Oak’s bones creaked when he swayed. Sometimes an arm or two would give way. One day the owner built a pool in his yard. Earth movers’ trauma hit Mr. Oak hard. In autumn his leaves turned but didn’t fall. They hung there brown for an expert to call. He said he was dying from shock and such. The shifting of his roots had been too much. Old Mr. Oak had to face his life’s end. To the last ounce of living this tree would defend. His limbs hit the ground and jarred Mother earth. Saws snarled as they grappled with his thick girth. He closed his eyes on the green garden world, and sighed as his life began to unfurl. That glowing fire of a room so warm, comes from old Mr. Oak, all the years long. 1/6/16

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Date: 10/20/2016 1:24:00 AM
Hi Janis, I loved where u took me on this journey. Wow. That was awesome, congratulations
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 10/20/2016 11:32:00 AM
Great contest. Thanks.
Date: 10/19/2016 10:51:00 PM
What a wonderful poem. Great personification with a smooth flow of emotions. Congrats, Janis.
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Date: 10/20/2016 11:33:00 AM
I appreciate your comments Afzal.
Date: 10/19/2016 3:49:00 PM
wow, you really did well with the challenge. Just wonderful work, Janis. a Huge SEVEN
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 10/19/2016 7:51:00 PM
Thanks for your comments.
Date: 10/16/2016 12:31:00 AM
Janis: This is an exceptional write. I shared it with my husband and he concurred, it is awesome, emotional, moving and I am going to favor it. I almost cried, each verse grew my empathy for the tree's plight. You get a WOW for bringing emotional feel to the life and death of a tree, plus a wonderfully poetic ending. Superb! I love it. THIS IS POETRY. Contest doesn't matter, this is a winner no matter what ... CayCay
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 10/16/2016 12:16:00 PM
Your comments have touched my heart very deeply. When the feelings of the reader have been moved, the poem has served its purpose, contest or not. You are right and your thoughts have given me great peace. Thanks and Blessings, Janis
Date: 10/14/2016 12:11:00 AM
Wonderful tribute. Splendidly put in rhyme and personification. Best of Luck in contest. Peace, Love and Joy.
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 10/14/2016 1:51:00 PM
Thanks, John. Feel free to come back and thanks for stopping by. Blessings, Janis.
Date: 10/13/2016 11:41:00 PM
Beautiful! glad to have read this!
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 10/14/2016 1:52:00 PM
hija, thanks so much for stopping by.
Date: 10/13/2016 11:37:00 PM
wonderful personification Janis:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/14/2016 1:52:00 PM
Thanks, Jan.
Date: 10/13/2016 10:40:00 PM
Charming, Janis! 7
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Date: 10/14/2016 1:53:00 PM
Thanks for the rating Kim. Blessings, Janis
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