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Old House

Old House Top of the hill's day Little old house kisses sun's rays Peak of the mountain puzzles Opens window by two hands Dances the dust shinning vibrant Lady's broom plays pleasant Cool wind shakes some leaves Enters, provides, breathe of heaven For life of house hillock.

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Sandra Haight

Date: 5/24/2016 8:28:00 PM

Nicely written, and enchanting imagery of the 'old house' Deepak. Congratulations on your nice win in the contest. Sandra

Deepak Chalise
Date: 5/25/2016 8:04:00 AM

Thank you very much, Sandra for kind words.

Eve Roper

Date: 5/23/2016 10:39:00 PM

Deepak, great haiku entry congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve

Deepak Chalise
Date: 5/24/2016 7:52:00 AM

Thank you very much for love,Eve.

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 5/23/2016 7:43:00 PM

Congratulations Deepak on the placement of the contest

Deepak Chalise
Date: 5/24/2016 7:54:00 AM

Thank you very much for your support on my poem,Nyada

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/11/2016 4:45:00 PM

Dust dancing in the sunlight and breeze two good visions..Thanks for the visit to my page..I enjoyed reading your work..Sara

Deepak Chalise
Date: 5/11/2016 5:13:00 PM

Thank you very much, Sara. The poem is composed a small hut at the top of the hill. Nepal is the mountainous country. She has thousands of peaks in hills and the first ray of the sun peeps in the morning ,scattering wonderful warm yellowish power, and blow of breeze provides spirit, and strength for the life.

Barry Stebbings

Date: 5/11/2016 4:12:00 PM

Very evocative, Deepak

Deepak Chalise
Date: 5/11/2016 4:25:00 PM

Thank you very much for the comment, Barry.

Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 5/11/2016 1:53:00 PM

quite enchanting.

Deepak Chalise
Date: 5/11/2016 4:26:00 PM

Thank you very much for appreciation, Lenny.