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Old Fogies: Part I

During the day
there's a deceptive lull
in the staid common parlor
when the home seems deadly dull

Stale air, disinfectant and potpourri
stirred only by the worried, hurried strides
of harried nurses down hectic halls
stuffy efficiency personified

In contrast to those, the steady repose
of regular residents
dressed up and posed
as odd antique mannequins
in fusty old clothes
like some bizarre storefront
window display

Obsolete, old folks
like aged birds perch
lean and lurch
awkward and angular
nodding and napping
half-waking, flapping
on various arm chairs

Others like basset hounds
lay the room 'round
eyes shut, drooping jowls
intermittent gentle growls
little subtle snores
comfy and carefree
bodies drowsily draped over
the sides of settees

Insensible to sound
and drooling a bit
sweetly sleeping all throughout
like innocent toddlers
with cookie-smeared faces
ingenuous and
all played out

Then eventually, nursing staff
bustles them awake
for activities, dinner
more medicines to take...
Then off to bed
as visitors leave
deluded and deceived
thinking that's all there is
pitiful old people, tragically perceived

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 9/22/2018 11:00:00 AM
I love how you described the old people; very creative and precise imagery.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 9/22/2018 7:22:00 PM
Thank you! I did have a lot of fun with the descriptions in this... ;)
Date: 9/20/2018 1:48:00 PM
Obsolete old folks, dressed up and posed as odd antique mannequins, like aged birds or basset hounds, eyes shut, drooping jowls, sleeping like innocent toddlers with cookie smeared faces. I am intrigued; it is like you live in a nursing home, and you know us!
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 9/20/2018 6:20:00 PM
I saw a lot of elderly people as a small child, as my grandmother used to regularly take me to visit the nearby nursing homes. (She always had a deep sympathy for people who grew old with no one to care for them). Then, as an adult, I was a live-in caregiver for some years... so when a friend described her work in nursing homes- I could picture it very vividly! ;)
Date: 9/20/2018 9:56:00 AM
Great first part to your story Rhona..
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 9/20/2018 6:22:00 PM
Thank you so much! ;)

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