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tree's change their attire shed all, oh! what a beauty~ dating memories Premier contest winner Brain strand Hi Ku contest 6th position

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/13/2020 6:24:00 PM

ohhh, this is really nice!! I like the last line how it relates to the trees!!

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 11/15/2020 6:25:00 PM

Didn't know I can put human emotions in last line. Saw Brain strands example and sort of copied it. Thanks and same to you. You said so much in so few words. Great write. Take care, Regards Rama

Silent One

Date: 11/9/2020 10:49:00 AM

Haiku doenst have to be 5,7,5. The maximum is 5,7,5. You can have less and haiku is supposed to be about nature. If not then it is a senryu

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 11/9/2020 8:36:00 PM

Thanks I knew you would respond, you are a nice and helpful person. God bless you. My haiku last line has human emotions. Is it right?

Silent One

Date: 11/9/2020 8:31:00 AM

Nice one Rama..

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 11/9/2020 9:57:00 AM

Thanks. Frankly am confused, learned Haiku here and always thought it should have 575 syllabus count and no human emotions but Brain's blog post had last line emotions like mine and Andrea's first winning Haiku had syllabus count of 255. Does that means modern Haiku's are different from traditional? It does seem like that. Am learning new things every day since I joined PS.Have a great day ahead. Regards Rama

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/9/2020 7:33:00 AM

I like this one a lot Rama. Nicely cone! Congratulations on the win! Linda

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 11/9/2020 9:45:00 AM

Thanks. I saw Brain's blog, followed it. Two lines nature, last line emotions. He said it should not tell all. I did that too. Still learning... You always take time off to congratulate me. I really appreciate that. Thanks once again friend. Have a great day ahead. Regards Rama

Constance La France

Date: 11/9/2020 3:55:00 AM

Rama, congratulations on your win in Brian's H I - K U contest with this excellent haiku _Constance

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 11/9/2020 5:28:00 AM

Thanks.I appreciate. Have a great day ahead friend. Regards Rama

Joanna Feltham

Date: 11/9/2020 1:03:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning placement. :-)

Rama Balasubramanian
Date: 11/9/2020 3:14:00 AM

Thanks Joanna. You were not in the winners list stll you came to congratulate me... This shows the goodness of your soul. You made my day. Now I will also do the same. So much happiness it gives. Thanks once again. Enjoy your day friend. Regards, Rama