Okay But What Do I Say?

The poem you wrote missed my heart
it had no words of emotional chew.

After reading the words, what could I say
you'd said them all but they added up to okay.

When I slithered over the alphabet,
I smelled no phew, grit never stuck, water didn't drip.

And then there are the times when my hands
kept tapping so fast so furious I just sat back

didn't have any more energy and to snip snap
clackety-clack was plain wiped out of my self.

But the most times I miss the comment and viewed
Susie was in love, heart broken, in a stew

the eye of the needle, the jump over the moon,
the clock ticking all sounded just good, 

but I had no newness from you
when I needed the pain sizzle of lightning,

a jigjag jangle against purple while orange daisies
danced a jig on the grave of enemy number one

boring, ordinary life in a cage with no ale biting tongue
no kisses probing into the curls under my toes.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 4/18/2013 4:15:00 PM
A kind hello and say goodbye. It's worth the effert to give it a try. An honest response is never a crime. I usually try to make mine kinda rhyme. :)
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Date: 12/2/2010 8:39:00 PM
Looking for something with Zing, it appears! that last line was quite clever analogy, Sheri! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/13/2010 5:53:00 AM
there is not enough room for my comment. you have my compiments on a job well done. you took the words right out of my mouth. now i feel comfortable giving people the truth about their poetry. but having tried that, as you well know prompted me to write my infamous apology which i'm sure you are familure with having commented on it. John H Loving III
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Date: 11/13/2010 3:53:00 AM
That last line is kinda different...Many interesting little familiar says incorporated in this one..I am glad that I stopped by and read this one..I was gladden by your presence at poem "Gracefully Bows As She Leaves"..Sara
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Date: 10/31/2010 9:43:00 PM
Sheri, you brought your view across brilliantly in this one. The last line made me ;) enjoy the week ahead ~ Wilma
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Date: 10/31/2010 8:44:00 AM
Wow, you did a great job describing poems that are filled with descriptive catch phrases that don't seem to be linked together to make a point, Sheri. Excellent work here! Best wishes for success in HG's contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/30/2010 3:01:00 PM
This is loaded...the deep things about love! Good work Sheri. -Albert
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Date: 10/30/2010 2:38:00 PM
Takes a special poem to get under the smelly toes curls... LOL The jam is like repellent to me...kryptonite!! LOL Sorry I could not resist..... You have me laughing!!
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Date: 10/30/2010 12:25:00 PM
nice use of words, love your work today..always Michael
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Date: 10/30/2010 11:57:00 AM
great expressions....sheri.
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