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Oh yes, the clouds leave traces

The morning clouds left traces. Small drops formed from even smaller drops pulled close by airy dust. Floating at first, becoming heavy, and starting a gentle drop to earth. Moving imperceptibly faster to speeds as fast as possible. Hitting the earth's surface, making a point and an imprint, only to be pulled into the dust and disappear. Soon, the dust could hold no more, and drops escaped. First, not moving far, but soon as many drops became one, they were pushed by the pull of the downward force and stretched into threads of liquid, soon woven into a sheet of fluid, pulled over the surface. Then, led by stronger pulls, narrowed through lows, pushing the dust and separate grains aside, to deeper lows. Stopping suddenly, because the pull disappeared. Yet, soon feeling the swirling pushing, moving together of communal eddies, rushing past other phantom drops, grabbing and merging without warning until a new flow, a new path is present. And, the pushing and cutting begin again. Rushing to a new lower, unknown goal. Oh yes, the clouds leave traces.

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Date: 5/26/2019 9:21:00 PM
Beautifully captivating, Victor. I love the push and pull of your dramatic imagery and your title is a superb crown for this exceptional piece. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 10:04:00 PM
Ah, so your 'day job' explains your unique point of view that so enraptured my imagination. Victor, your talent already glows, with every poem you create your artistry will shine more brilliantly.. you don't need luck, when you have natural talent, you just need to keep writing :)
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Victor Van Beuren
Date: 5/28/2019 9:04:00 PM
Susan, thank you for your kind words. So you know, I'm a geologist (sedimentologist/stratigrapher) and have always been amazed how natural systems are connected and interact. I'm trying to describe these common interactions in ways that can capture imagination and interest. Wish me luck! (I've got a long way to go.) Victor