Jan Allison Poet Than-Bauk

Oh Dear - Dad's Beer

Beer dad did pour;
placed on floor but
dad sure full glass

Sis gulped dad’s beer,
Felt so *****… sick
Oh dear, dad’s sad!

Drank dad’s home brew
Age just two, poor
Dad knew - too late!

A true poem about my sister and dad who were visiting his friend Alexis. Dad poured a glass of home brew and put it on the floor -  next thing he discovered was my sister had picked it up and drank it all!  She was pretty sick and mum was very cross!


Sponsor: Marugu Mo
Contest: Than-Bauk on Human Folly
02~16~16

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Sara Kendrick March 16, 2016 at 7:37 AM Than-Bauk written in style..Congrats on your winner..Sara Jan Allison March 17, 2016 at 3:40 PM Many thanks Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A March 15, 2016 at 5:45 PM Jan, Congrats on your win in "Marugu MO's contest." Wuv ~LINDA~ Jan Allison March 17, 2016 at 3:40 PM Many thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich March 13, 2016 at 7:04 PM BIG congrats to you here, Jan!

Anindya Mohan Tagore March 11, 2016 at 12:44 PM Hmm... nicely done, Jan. Hugs, Bobby Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:24 PM Thanks Bobby:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman March 11, 2016 at 11:54 AM Hi Jan, back to smile with you again. Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:24 PM Thanks for your continued support James:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven March 11, 2016 at 7:44 AM Hi Jan, i do like your story in this one. I found it hard on this one, it isn't the most easy form but i guess that is what makes it interesting. I really liked your work. A seven from me. Congratulations on your placement in the contest....MIKE. Jan Allison March 11, 2016 at 3:24 PM Thanks Mike I too found it a really challenging form:-)Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper February 22, 2016 at 9:13 PM Cute!! Like the poem! Good luck in the contest! Jan Allison February 24, 2016 at 2:03 PM Many thanks Eve - mum still talks about it to this day lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray February 21, 2016 at 4:40 PM You obviously know your types of poetry well Jan. and can instill humour into each and every one. Well done. Jan Allison February 22, 2016 at 12:17 PM I've never heard of let alone tried this form before Jean and I did find it a big challenge. I just hope the sponsor likes my poem:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne February 21, 2016 at 8:31 AM BTW, I really miss you and think about you all the time. Lots of love, Armand. Jan Allison February 21, 2016 at 10:21 AM Miss you too my friend its so lovely to see you back commenting:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne February 21, 2016 at 8:29 AM Great story, I know this form and you did an excellent job. A Fav. Cheers! Jan Allison February 21, 2016 at 10:22 AM I found it a real challenge - I do love the contests for bringing new forms to us.. I hope the sponsor likes my poem:-) love and hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin February 20, 2016 at 7:13 PM hmmmm never heard of this interesting form, but as usual you handle itx Exquisitely! Great poem!! Jan Allison February 21, 2016 at 10:21 AM I struggled with the form Thomas it is a real challenge to get a story told in so few words and get the rhyme scheme correct:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman February 20, 2016 at 2:29 PM Jan, was dad sad for your sister or the loss of his beer, haha? Jan Allison February 21, 2016 at 10:20 AM I think he knew the grief mum would give him lol:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso February 19, 2016 at 11:41 PM Id be cross too someone drank my beer!!!! :) Loved this! Jan Allison February 20, 2016 at 10:22 AM LOL:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus February 18, 2016 at 4:12 PM I have read a couple of these entries, Jan, but I still have to see how this form works. Apart from that, your entry has got enough serious-humour to give it a high rating. hugs ~ paul Jan Allison February 18, 2016 at 4:19 PM I don't know if I've got it correct Paul it is a very complex short form and was a real challenge to write - that is what I love about these contests:-) hugs Jan xx

David Aaron February 18, 2016 at 2:47 AM Nice and frothy...so well done! Jan Allison February 18, 2016 at 9:23 AM lol Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France February 17, 2016 at 11:13 PM Jan, this is delightful, kids will drink the oddest things and especially at two, great write for the contest, love it Jan Allison February 18, 2016 at 9:23 AM Thanks Broken Wings :-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich February 17, 2016 at 3:41 PM very well done, my friend. I messed up thinking it had six syllables so now I need to see if I can whittle mine down before I post it!! Jan Allison February 18, 2016 at 9:22 AM It is a real challenge Andrea I just hope the sponsor likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Elaine George February 17, 2016 at 12:46 PM True to form and a great true life story. Sure to op the winners list, Jan. Elaine Jan Allison February 18, 2016 at 9:22 AM Thanks Elaine:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance February 17, 2016 at 7:14 AM Wow, interesting poetic form and you made it flawless. The story too, is one that is fairly common. kids will get into anything! Nice write Jan...hugs xxx Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 7:23 AM I guess it shows that we do have to be careful what examples we set to our children as they love to copy. I will be honest I really struggled with it Cas as it is such a short form and to get the rhyme and syllable count was tricky to comply with. :-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen February 17, 2016 at 4:46 AM - O.m.g. !!!!! - A great poem - Poor sister, maybe it was the first and last beer for her :))) - Luck in contest, Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 4:59 AM She drinks soft drinks these days lol:-) I guess kids do copy their parents - when he was quite young I remember asking my son what he would like to drink and he said 'lager' lol - I guess it's proof kids do copy their parents - of course he should have answered tea because that's what I drink lol:-) hugs Jan xx

White Sage February 17, 2016 at 1:13 AM even though mr than-bauk is very strict, it didn't touch that humour in you, wow you Jan!, excellent, best of luck in the contest Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 4:20 AM It is a hard form to write with the restriction on syllables and rhyme scheme but I have given it a go - that is what I love about the contests challenging our creativity:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks February 16, 2016 at 11:08 PM I like to try new forms, but the than-bauk intimidates me. Cool that you were able to tell a real life story in a difficult form. Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 4:18 AM I like to try new forms this was very challenging indeed:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos February 16, 2016 at 10:30 PM A beer to remember....funny how little things come back over the years....Thanks I enjoyed reading this.... Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 4:18 AM Mum still talks about it lol - :-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey February 16, 2016 at 7:42 PM I agree very clever indeed Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 4:16 AM Its quite a challenge Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars February 16, 2016 at 6:37 PM Jan, very clever as always...awesome *smiles* -luloo Jan Allison February 17, 2016 at 4:16 AM Thanks Luloo it is quite a challenge but I enjoy trying new forms:-) hugs Jan xx

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