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OFF THE BALCONY - Anacreontic Couplets

Roses spread with lace garter; Boutonnière and charter. Green meadow eyes clung to lass. Juliet was upper class. A shepherd was he, with crook. All gentle men, she forsook. Under the willow, the wind Warmed petals with no rescind. Tempo was slow with his bride Deep smile, a groom could not hide. Underneath his ruddy beard, “Reverie,” the garden cheered. How lucky was a poor man To find a robust woman. Off the balcony she came. Her shepherd, never the same.

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Date: 1/5/2024 6:47:00 PM
Dear Kim, your couplets are "quiet a rollick" too! Love the creative, clever and sensual wordplay and imagery. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/4/2024 5:48:00 AM
BIG congrats on your top win, my friend--splendidly crafted couplets, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/4/2024 6:25:00 AM
Thank you, Vijay!
Date: 1/3/2024 9:10:00 PM
Kim, the heartiest congratulations on your placement with this peerless piece. Subtle, poignant, romantic. Thanks for your encouraging words on Rapid Urban Belt. They are much appreciated I wish you a Happy New Year and successful writing Howard
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/4/2024 6:25:00 AM
Thank you, Howard!
Date: 1/3/2024 10:12:00 AM
A romantic one. This form works so well with such a theme. Congrats
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/3/2024 2:18:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea! <3
Date: 1/1/2024 10:49:00 AM
Oh this is a sad one Kim.. Nicely done.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/1/2024 2:36:00 PM
Let me clarify, she didn’t fall off the balcony. Keep in mind the wording is sensuous :) Thank you for my placement,!
Date: 12/31/2023 9:19:00 AM
Lol, I wrote a piece about a 'crook' too. Am I the only one who wrote a single six-liner, ugh. Love your writing of it, sway teetering never toppling--beautiful, Kim. Cheers to your 2024. Aloha, William
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/31/2023 12:10:00 PM
Thank you so much! Aloha and Happy New Year 2024!
Date: 12/31/2023 6:20:00 AM
An exquisite creation, Kim. I enjoyed the conclusion that "her shepherd was never the same." Cheers to an incredible New Year!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/31/2023 12:11:00 PM
Thank you, Lasaad! A man who finds love never is and likewise one who loses his lifetime love. Happy New Year!
Date: 12/30/2023 9:10:00 PM
Wow, this is such a magical poem dear Kim, full of fantasy aura and delightful 'Reverie'.. Your poetic skills are shimmering with poetic elegance as your rhymes are so beautiful along with the wordplay here.. Absolutely stunning! Sending you best wishes for the New Year, love & light :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/31/2023 6:15:00 AM
Thank you for your sweet comment, very appreciated! Happy New Year 2024, dear one!
Date: 12/30/2023 4:52:00 PM
a lovely creation, Kim. I liked the ending, 'her shepherd never the same. Have a splendid New Year, hugs, Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/30/2023 6:56:00 PM
Thank you, Sara!
Date: 12/30/2023 4:31:00 PM
Nicely written Kim, with great language choice, much better than saying “Juliet liked a bit of rough the shepherd was very hot stuff” sorry I haven’t been around in a while, hope you’re doing well, cheers David
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/30/2023 6:57:00 PM
Thanks, David! LOL. Happy New Year!
Date: 12/30/2023 2:05:00 PM
Excellent poem to be led to today. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/30/2023 2:34:00 PM
Thank you so much!

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