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Published in: PS: It's Still Poetry - An Anthology of Contemporary Poetry from Around the World – January 1, 2022

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Sorrow is the night’s rainstorm lashing an impoverished psyche wandering lost with loss ‘neath weeping eaves in murky-minded alleyways without an umbrella. Susan Ashley July 29, 2019 ~ First Place ~ Premiere Contest: One Sentence Metaphor In Free Verse Sponsor: Jesse Rowe

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Brian Sambourne

Date: 5/7/2022 9:05:00 AM

Love the strong brevity of this insightful piece on sorrow. The imagery of being rain caught without an umbrella is so relatable. Metaphors of sorrow that pack a punch. Best wishes always. Brian

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/8/2022 8:56:00 AM

Dear Brian, I appreciate your gracious visit and treasure your valued comments. Thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 4/22/2020 8:15:00 PM

Don't know how I missed this work of art. It is Striking, intimate and like sorrow creates such a sense of loss of self. Powerful

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/24/2020 9:53:00 AM

Lonna, your precious presence here is so deeply appreciated as are your beautiful comments that nestle in my heart. Thank you for your gracious visit, dear poetess. Warmest wishes for you always.. ~Susan

Panagiota Romios

Date: 8/14/2019 12:00:00 AM

Have not seen this before! I liked the first line..that caught me! The rest followed suite, Panagiota Congrats to you.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/15/2019 10:25:00 AM

Thank you, Panagiota, for your wonderful comments and kind congrats. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem - I certainly enjoyed your visit! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/8/2019 6:27:00 PM

Susan, please check your soup mail. Thank you so much. Warm wishes, Gershon

Nick Trim

Date: 8/8/2019 8:39:00 AM

nice!! I especially like that 5th line lol congratulations Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:49:00 PM

Thank you, Nick, for the pleasure of your visit and your kind congrats. I’m glad you liked that 5th line, it’s my favorite line as well. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/5/2019 8:51:00 PM

Wow, a wise pen. This is truly deserving of first place,congratulations!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:51:00 PM

Thank you, M. L. Your wonderful comments and heartwarming congrats are a delight to receive. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Robertina B.

Date: 8/5/2019 5:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, dear Susan.. I absolutely enjoyed this beautiful gem.. So profound, as it touched me.. Such a soulful write! Your talent shines enormously, my friend.. Have a blessed day!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:55:00 PM

Robertina, your expressive comments and kind congrats are so wonderful to receive. I’m so pleased to know my poetry reached out and touched you. Thank for sharing your precious thoughts with me, my lovely friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

P.S. Awtry

Date: 8/4/2019 11:24:00 AM

you so eloquently portrayed misery here and then the hopelessness of that last line (icing on the cake) Many congratulations dear poet!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 8:29:00 PM

Thank you, P.S., for your precious comments and heartwarming congrats. Your valued words uplift and inspire me to keep reaching. I appreciate your lovely presence here, dear friend, dear poet. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 8/3/2019 6:27:00 PM

Sensually and astutely felt and written. You made me feel the utter aloneness of sorrow. Lonna

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:47:00 PM

Lonna, your expressive comments are truly appreciated. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and for your gracious visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/2/2019 9:21:00 PM

Congratulations! A heartfelt write, Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:25:00 PM

Thank you, Kim, your heartwarming comments and kind congrats are appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/2/2019 8:57:00 AM

What an awesome metaphor. Congrats on this trophy win

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:27:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea, for your uplifting comments and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Randy Steele

Date: 8/2/2019 8:16:00 AM

Congrats on your first place win. Nice job.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:28:00 PM

Thank you, Randy, for your wonderful visit and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier

Date: 8/2/2019 7:28:00 AM

Deep, Susan. Congrats on your top win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:29:00 PM

Thank you for your wonderful comment and kind congrats, Line. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

John Gondolf

Date: 8/2/2019 6:49:00 AM

Susan, back to offer congrats on your well deserved trophy win. Best wishes my friend. John

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:31:00 PM

Your return visit and heartwarming congrats are so truly appreciated, John. Thank you my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 8/2/2019 5:30:00 AM

Wow! A one sentence metaphor which is so expressive, especially where the ending is concerned. ~ I see that sorrow has turned to joy by placing first in this contest, Susan :) Congratulations!! Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 8/15/2019 7:35:00 AM

No need for apologies my friend...looks like we are both in the same waters! :) Hope all is well; take care ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 8:38:00 PM

Your uplifting comments inspire me to continue reaching higher, Paul, and your kind congrats are treasured. Please accept my apology for my late reply, family obligations have kept me very busy leaving little time for visiting with my favorite poets, like you, my dear friend. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 8/2/2019 5:12:00 AM

Oh, yay, golden sorrow! Congrats, Susan)

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:39:00 PM

Your return visit is twice as sweet, Kurt. Thank you for your gracious comments and kind congrats, my talented friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Beata Agustin

Date: 8/1/2019 11:39:00 PM

Wow! Congrats... I'm moved with "without an umbrella" especially that it's our rainy season here in the Philippines. God bless you.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:43:00 PM

Thank you for your gracious comments and kind congrats, Beata. Keep your umbrella handy :) Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Jesse Rowe

Date: 8/1/2019 11:19:00 PM

Susan, this was such a powerful and emotive depiction of sorrow. It is one of very few poems that I moved to the winner's round immediately upon reading it the first time. "... without an umbrella." so perfectly captures the topic of your poem. Congratulations on your 1st place finish!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:13:00 PM

Jesse, thank you for your kind words and for the wonderful honor of my placement in your challenging contest. It was a creative joy to write for and I relish being among such esteemed poets/poetesses on your winner’s list. Your wonderful contest helped me to grow as a poet and for that you will forever have my gratitude. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 7/31/2019 12:05:00 PM

So deep and powerful depiction of sorrow! A profound heart.. open wide is its gate.. of many a chamber.. able to absorb and fathom the gloomy side of life and render it in a captivating artistry to an ardent reader whose pleasure to read your grand poetry would never expire.. an other gem, of yours dear Susan, to cherish into my fave list. Warmest regards. Love and hugs.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 9:17:00 PM

Besma, my cherished sister, I embrace you with my appreciation, my elation and my admiring heart. Your moving words lift my spirit to soar on wings honored by the beauty of an ardent reader’s thoughts received with the greatest pleasure. My gratitude glows in the brilliant light of your generous nature and my poem shines in the radiance of your fave. Thank you, my dearest soul sister, your graceful presence is precious. Warmest wishes, love and hugs always.. ~Susan

John Gondolf

Date: 7/31/2019 6:51:00 AM

Wow, Susan, this is a wonderfully written piece for this contest, it should do well. Best of luck. John

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/31/2019 8:36:00 PM

Your wonderful kindness and lovely comments are truly a pleasure to receive, John. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 7/31/2019 6:23:00 AM

To tell the truth, I already forgot what I wrote in my previous comment. It seemed to be something about a night rainy walk in the company of such wonderful poets as Susan and Robert. I confirm my wish and I am even ready to leave my umbrella at home if the poetic situation requires it) These beautiful windy sadness and broken hearts belong together. Wishing you gold in contest. Rays of love.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:23:00 PM

Ah, dear Kurt, thank you for returning to replace your touching comments I accidentally deleted. Your new comments are equally moving and beautifully poetic... a walk in the rain with you and Robert would be wonderful. Who knows, maybe broken hearts in windy sadness would end up singing in the rain instead. You inspire me my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Caycay Jennings

Date: 7/30/2019 9:27:00 PM

Wowey wow this is great imagery! Love it. Wish I understood 'blank verse' more clearly than I do but that's of no matter when it comes to knowing this is brilliantly creative. Again - you have my wow. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/2/2019 10:17:00 PM

Thank you, CayCay, for the uplifting spirit of your wonderful comments. I’m so glad to have your ‘wow’! Your lovely presence here is truly appreciated my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Alesia Leach

Date: 7/30/2019 3:22:00 PM

This is so good, a true and perfect perception of sorrow is conveyed in this poem. A superb entry Susan! Best of Luck in the contest! Sending you warm and caring wishes! ;0)

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/31/2019 8:34:00 PM

Thank you for your warm and caring wishes, Alesia, and for your uplifting comments as well. Your kind presence here is heartwarming. Warmest wishes always, my dear friend.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/30/2019 2:01:00 PM

'without an umbrella' --- Is there any deeper sorrow?!! Let's see what Jesse thinks now. Good luck in the contest, my gifted friend. Best wishes, gw

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:36:00 PM

Your poetry is always gold, my enlightened friend.. :)

Gershon Wolf
Date: 8/6/2019 9:30:00 PM

Ha, ha. As you see, Jesse and I read it the same way.... As for mine, another N/A. So much for enlightenment! LOL. Back to the drawing board. Grrrrr…. Congratulations, Susan. Best of everything, Gershon

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/31/2019 8:31:00 PM

My dear friend, your sweet kindness and inspiring comments are a joy to receive. Let’s hope Jesse reads this the way you do. It would be truly wonderful if both our entries made the winners list, Gershon. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 7/30/2019 1:24:00 PM

So perfectly captures sorrow, both deep and rich-

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/31/2019 8:27:00 PM

Thank you, Michelle, for the kindness of your visit and your lovely comments. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan