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Ode To a Snail

Slug or Snail Slow you trail The slimy path you leave upon bark or rail or along my pail Glue from your tail? Ah bind my mail? Be my pet not pet peeve Don't crawl up my sleeve. Go mark some leaves. Don't glue my nail! How do I guess your emotions? You never smile or wail To thy Creator I whisper, all hail

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Line Gauthier

Date: 10/15/2018 1:36:00 PM

Cute. Well done.

Al Juman

Date: 8/11/2018 7:51:00 PM

Beautiful piece to wonder of slow life and their obstacles nice write my friend

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 5/7/2018 12:35:00 PM

This is such a lovely whimsical piece that made me smile! Well done, my friend! Hugs. Pandita

Muhammad Imtiaz

Date: 3/22/2018 1:25:00 AM

Hi Syeda this is good talk with your snail. It is light but meaningful . God is Great Thanks

Mick Talbot

Date: 12/7/2017 6:42:00 AM

Haha, brilliant, Google this one Trichia hispida, found in my garden, the wonders nature eh! Or copy and paste this address, you'll be amazed :) https://farm5.staticflickr.com/4468/37640793822_9f417a95c6_b.jpg

James Tate

Date: 8/18/2017 12:01:00 PM

Cute. Reminds me of my Snail story: Answering the doorbell, but seeing no one there, the man picked up a snail from his porch and tossed it across his yard. Three weeks later, he answered the doorbell again and saw the snail on his porch. The snail asked, "What was that all about?"

Ovidiu Bocsa

Date: 4/8/2017 10:11:00 AM

Wonderful poem reminding my childhood with keeping in mind strange children folk about the snail, then a great poet from my country, then the famous Songs of Innocence and Experience. Near the holiday, I recognize you glued my feelings at your verses.

Jesse Zerlaut

Date: 4/1/2017 9:51:00 AM

lol, wonderfully inventive. Great poem!

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/30/2017 12:35:00 PM

This is a cute snail poem. Very creative :)

Mark Peterson

Date: 1/30/2017 11:38:00 PM

I love this delicate little rhyme. A mark of a good poet is the ability to enlarge ordinary things to a scale and description that can't be overlooked. I'll remember you and this poem whenever I see a slug and its sticky trail.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/30/2017 11:46:00 AM

I'd never have thought of writing a tribute poem to a snail ... they aren't my favourite creatures as they wreak havoc in my garden:-( thanks for sharing :-) hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 12/28/2016 7:16:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this fun poem! The subject was unexpected and your lines flow smoothly and rhyme so well. Nice work!

Ralph Mason

Date: 12/6/2016 8:21:00 PM

tis a tender tale warm thoughts, Ralph

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri
Date: 12/6/2016 11:47:00 PM

Aw thanx soo much. Best wishes.

Afzal Nusker

Date: 12/5/2016 12:37:00 AM

This is a very joyous, fun poem.

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 12/4/2016 11:56:00 AM

Ha Ha Love your snail story x

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/15/2016 12:48:00 PM

Interesting work..They can wreck havoc on a garden especially ripe tomatoes on the vine or squash..Enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for dropping by..Sara

Probir Gupta

Date: 11/12/2016 2:59:00 AM

Joyous snail in your pail ... it is natural that you will say. all hail ... very nice visuals ...

Christy Stover

Date: 11/11/2016 10:09:00 AM

Wonderful poem. An interesting comment on people and things in all of our lives. It has a powerful ending that makes you go back and read it again and really stop and think. Very well done.

James Tate

Date: 11/11/2016 8:37:00 AM

Okay, here's my reply to your nice poem about the lowly snail...Hail the Snail By James E. Tate Answering the door, but seeing no one there, He picked up a snail and pitched it in the air. Three weeks later he again answered the bell Again on his porch was a little snail. The snail asked with a shout, “What was that all about?”

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/11/2016 7:32:00 AM

Well done. I haven't seen one of those in quite a while. Surely don't want it up my sleeve. lol

Chris Green

Date: 11/11/2016 6:55:00 AM

This was fun to read. I have plenty of those little slimy creatures painting glistening patterns on the walks and patios around my place. They may be slow but are quite destructive. Yep, definitely don't want one of those to crawl up your sleeve.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri
Date: 11/11/2016 7:25:00 AM

Warm thanx poetess, didnt know they were destructive. I became curious as ti how destructive they can be. They are quite harmless here in the gardens though. Perhaps they differ.

Ovidiu Bocsa

Date: 11/9/2016 1:56:00 PM

A playful small snail, Whose horns you touch with a gentle colorful nail Took from dreams so much.