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Ode To a Snail

Slug or Snail
Slow you trail
The slimy path you leave
upon bark or rail
or along my pail
Glue from your tail? 
Ah bind my mail? 
Be my pet not pet peeve
Don't crawl up my sleeve.
Go mark some leaves.
Don't glue my nail! 
How do I guess your emotions? 
You never smile or wail 
To thy Creator
I whisper, all hail

Copyright © S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri | Year Posted 2016

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Line Gauthier Date: 10/15/2018 1:36:00 PM Cute. Well done. Login to Reply

Al Juman Date: 8/11/2018 7:51:00 PM Beautiful piece to wonder of slow life and their obstacles nice write my friend Login to Reply

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 5/7/2018 12:35:00 PM This is such a lovely whimsical piece that made me smile! Well done, my friend! Hugs. Pandita Login to Reply

Muhammad Imtiaz Date: 3/22/2018 1:25:00 AM Hi Syeda this is good talk with your snail. It is light but meaningful . God is Great Thanks Login to Reply

Mick Talbot Date: 12/7/2017 6:42:00 AM Haha, brilliant, Google this one Trichia hispida, found in my garden, the wonders nature eh! Or copy and paste this address, you'll be amazed :) https://farm5.staticflickr.com/4468/37640793822_9f417a95c6_b.jpg Login to Reply

James Tate Date: 8/18/2017 12:01:00 PM Cute. Reminds me of my Snail story: Answering the doorbell, but seeing no one there, the man picked up a snail from his porch and tossed it across his yard. Three weeks later, he answered the doorbell again and saw the snail on his porch. The snail asked, "What was that all about?" Login to Reply

Ovidiu Bocsa Date: 4/8/2017 10:11:00 AM Wonderful poem reminding my childhood with keeping in mind strange children folk about the snail, then a great poet from my country, then the famous Songs of Innocence and Experience. Near the holiday, I recognize you glued my feelings at your verses. Login to Reply

Jesse Zerlaut Date: 4/1/2017 9:51:00 AM lol, wonderfully inventive. Great poem! Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 3/30/2017 12:35:00 PM This is a cute snail poem. Very creative :) Login to Reply

Mark Peterson Date: 1/30/2017 11:38:00 PM I love this delicate little rhyme. A mark of a good poet is the ability to enlarge ordinary things to a scale and description that can't be overlooked. I'll remember you and this poem whenever I see a slug and its sticky trail. Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2017 11:46:00 AM I'd never have thought of writing a tribute poem to a snail ... they aren't my favourite creatures as they wreak havoc in my garden:-( thanks for sharing :-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Kelly Deschler Date: 12/28/2016 7:16:00 PM I enjoyed reading this fun poem! The subject was unexpected and your lines flow smoothly and rhyme so well. Nice work! Login to Reply

Ralph Mason Date: 12/6/2016 8:21:00 PM tis a tender tale warm thoughts, Ralph Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 12/6/2016 11:47:00 PM Aw thanx soo much. Best wishes.

Afzal Nusker Date: 12/5/2016 12:37:00 AM This is a very joyous, fun poem. Login to Reply

Wendy Rycroft Date: 12/4/2016 11:56:00 AM Ha Ha Love your snail story x Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 11/15/2016 12:48:00 PM Interesting work..They can wreck havoc on a garden especially ripe tomatoes on the vine or squash..Enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for dropping by..Sara Login to Reply

Probir Gupta Date: 11/12/2016 2:59:00 AM Joyous snail in your pail ... it is natural that you will say. all hail ... very nice visuals ... Login to Reply

Christy Stover Date: 11/11/2016 10:09:00 AM Wonderful poem. An interesting comment on people and things in all of our lives. It has a powerful ending that makes you go back and read it again and really stop and think. Very well done. Login to Reply

James Tate Date: 11/11/2016 8:37:00 AM Okay, here's my reply to your nice poem about the lowly snail...Hail the Snail By James E. Tate Answering the door, but seeing no one there, He picked up a snail and pitched it in the air. Three weeks later he again answered the bell Again on his porch was a little snail. The snail asked with a shout, “What was that all about?” Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 11/11/2016 7:32:00 AM Well done. I haven't seen one of those in quite a while. Surely don't want it up my sleeve. lol Login to Reply

Chris Green Date: 11/11/2016 6:55:00 AM This was fun to read. I have plenty of those little slimy creatures painting glistening patterns on the walks and patios around my place. They may be slow but are quite destructive. Yep, definitely don't want one of those to crawl up your sleeve. Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 11/11/2016 7:25:00 AM Warm thanx poetess, didnt know they were destructive. I became curious as ti how destructive they can be. They are quite harmless here in the gardens though. Perhaps they differ.

Ovidiu Bocsa Date: 11/9/2016 1:56:00 PM A playful small snail, Whose horns you touch with a gentle colorful nail Took from dreams so much. Login to Reply