S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Poet Ode

Ode To a Snail

Slug or Snail
Slow you trail
The slimy path you leave
upon bark or rail
or along my pail
Glue from your tail? 
Ah bind my mail? 
Be my pet not pet peeve
Don't crawl up my sleeve.
Go mark some leaves.
Don't glue my nail! 
How do I guess your emotions? 
You never smile or wail 
To thy Creator
I whisper, all hail

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Line Gauthier October 15, 2018 at 1:36 PM Cute. Well done.

Al Juman August 11, 2018 at 7:51 PM Beautiful piece to wonder of slow life and their obstacles nice write my friend

Pandita Sietesantos May 7, 2018 at 12:35 PM This is such a lovely whimsical piece that made me smile! Well done, my friend! Hugs. Pandita

Muhammad Imtiaz March 22, 2018 at 1:25 AM Hi Syeda this is good talk with your snail. It is light but meaningful . God is Great Thanks

Mick Talbot December 7, 2017 at 6:42 AM Haha, brilliant, Google this one Trichia hispida, found in my garden, the wonders nature eh! Or copy and paste this address, you'll be amazed :) https://farm5.staticflickr.com/4468/37640793822_9f417a95c6_b.jpg

James Tate August 18, 2017 at 12:01 PM Cute. Reminds me of my Snail story: Answering the doorbell, but seeing no one there, the man picked up a snail from his porch and tossed it across his yard. Three weeks later, he answered the doorbell again and saw the snail on his porch. The snail asked, "What was that all about?"

Ovidiu Bocsa April 8, 2017 at 10:11 AM Wonderful poem reminding my childhood with keeping in mind strange children folk about the snail, then a great poet from my country, then the famous Songs of Innocence and Experience. Near the holiday, I recognize you glued my feelings at your verses.

Jesse Zerlaut April 1, 2017 at 9:51 AM lol, wonderfully inventive. Great poem!

Heidi Sands March 30, 2017 at 12:35 PM This is a cute snail poem. Very creative :)

Mark Peterson January 30, 2017 at 11:38 PM I love this delicate little rhyme. A mark of a good poet is the ability to enlarge ordinary things to a scale and description that can't be overlooked. I'll remember you and this poem whenever I see a slug and its sticky trail.

Jan Allison January 30, 2017 at 11:46 AM I'd never have thought of writing a tribute poem to a snail ... they aren't my favourite creatures as they wreak havoc in my garden:-( thanks for sharing :-) hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler December 28, 2016 at 7:16 PM I enjoyed reading this fun poem! The subject was unexpected and your lines flow smoothly and rhyme so well. Nice work!

Ralph Mason December 6, 2016 at 8:21 PM tis a tender tale warm thoughts, Ralph S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri December 6, 2016 at 11:47 PM Aw thanx soo much. Best wishes.

Afzal Nusker December 5, 2016 at 12:37 AM This is a very joyous, fun poem.

Wendy Rycroft December 4, 2016 at 11:56 AM Ha Ha Love your snail story x

Sara Kendrick November 15, 2016 at 12:48 PM Interesting work..They can wreck havoc on a garden especially ripe tomatoes on the vine or squash..Enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for dropping by..Sara

Probir Gupta November 12, 2016 at 2:59 AM Joyous snail in your pail ... it is natural that you will say. all hail ... very nice visuals ...

Christy Stover November 11, 2016 at 10:09 AM Wonderful poem. An interesting comment on people and things in all of our lives. It has a powerful ending that makes you go back and read it again and really stop and think. Very well done.

James Tate November 11, 2016 at 8:37 AM Okay, here's my reply to your nice poem about the lowly snail...Hail the Snail By James E. Tate Answering the door, but seeing no one there, He picked up a snail and pitched it in the air. Three weeks later he again answered the bell Again on his porch was a little snail. The snail asked with a shout, “What was that all about?”

Heidi Sands November 11, 2016 at 7:32 AM Well done. I haven't seen one of those in quite a while. Surely don't want it up my sleeve. lol

Chris Green November 11, 2016 at 6:55 AM This was fun to read. I have plenty of those little slimy creatures painting glistening patterns on the walks and patios around my place. They may be slow but are quite destructive. Yep, definitely don't want one of those to crawl up your sleeve. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri November 11, 2016 at 7:25 AM Warm thanx poetess, didnt know they were destructive. I became curious as ti how destructive they can be. They are quite harmless here in the gardens though. Perhaps they differ.

Ovidiu Bocsa November 9, 2016 at 1:56 PM A playful small snail, Whose horns you touch with a gentle colorful nail Took from dreams so much.