Ocean

There are predators in the sea that may give you quite a scare Even in the shallows they can be As you are splashing there The ocean waves invite you in and soothe with its warm caress But if you see a dorsal fin It will cause you much distress In its realm you may become its prey And they pack a very painful bite With razor sharp teeth on display "Jaws" is sure to leave you in fright 3-24-2023 Writing Challenge - 'O' Words Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/27/2023 10:48:00 AM

- Back with a congratulations, Joseph :) - hugs

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/26/2023 5:49:00 PM

WoW! Joseph, I liked the direction you went using the ocean theme. Jaws is a scary movie, as I was reading your poem I instantly heard that music in my head. Well done. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved. Enjoy the rest of your day:-)Alexis

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 3/26/2023 1:32:00 PM

What a scary film when it was first released, eh Joseph? There are all kinds of creepy creatures in there. ;) Congratulations on your win! :)

Constance La France

Date: 3/26/2023 12:58:00 PM

Joseph, congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge 'O' Words with your wonderful poem, I remember watching that Jaws movie, very scary, blessings, Constance

Pashang Salehi

Date: 3/26/2023 9:39:00 AM

Oceans are the lungs of our planet... forget about the jaws, enjoy its beauty.

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/26/2023 6:26:00 AM

Great , creative poem Joseph. Those jelly fish can be in shallow water too and they can sting. Well done :)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/24/2023 8:46:00 PM

Predators with their 'jaws', awesome thoughts, and we better enjoy the ocean from far, nice, Joseph:)

Brandy Nicole

Date: 3/24/2023 5:39:00 PM

Watching as waves crash against the shore, is very poetic. I've always loved the feel of the ocean, but not so much anymore. It *is* scary out there. Using "Jaws" as a reference, is very smart Joseph. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Brandy

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/24/2023 3:32:00 PM

I liked this! Best wishes, Joseph!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/24/2023 2:11:00 PM

Lol now I've got the theme tune playing in my head. Good luck in the contest Joseph. Tom

Fin Chuuk

Date: 3/24/2023 12:56:00 PM

Oh I know just that kind of feeling. Growing up in the Pacific Ocean, on the small islands, our beaches when high tide, some do come in close to shore. But i think because we respect them and leave them alone, they don’t bother us.. Great write, Joseph, I like this a lot. :)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/24/2023 12:21:00 PM

I can't see a fin without thinking of that classic Jaws theme 'da -DUH - da -DUH' - I still don't go on past ankle depth~

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/24/2023 12:00:00 PM

- I think I will choose the pool ... :) - "Ocean" was my first choice in this contest ... but I had no idea ... yours is both true and humorous ... great done and good luck in the contest, Joseph :) - hugs

Margarita Lillico

Date: 3/24/2023 11:34:00 AM

Light and breezy read, an ocean flow:) Cheers!