Obsessions

  in autumn’s dampness
a moth of fervent purpose
     becomes another's-
  diamond lattice glinting
  before a hunter’s moon

autumnmoontanka

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Susan Ashley

August 1, 2025 at 1:23 PM

Dear David, I adore the way you create an atmosphere of beauty and danger.. the moth becoming ensnared in the spider's web; indeed, the moth losing himself to, and becoming a possession of "another". I love the imagery of the web and the depths to which one's thoughts can go with your exceptional tanka. Congratulations for your golden trophy win in Rob's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Marc

August 1, 2025 at 10:43 AM

Profound

Rob Carmack

July 31, 2025 at 6:59 AM

Congrats and thanks for supporting my contest.

Sara Kendrick

October 5, 2016 at 4:29 PM

In less than ten lines you have created magic with this winner…Way to go poet friend..Congrats on you being in the winners’ list..Sara

Beautiful Scars

October 3, 2016 at 2:31 AM

David, love this tanka-very intriguing indeed :) congrats on your placement :)-luloo

Afzal Nusker

October 2, 2016 at 10:27 PM

Such thought provoking and beautifully written Tanka. Congrats on your win, David.

Sandra Haight

October 2, 2016 at 7:14 PM

A powerful Tanka, David. Congratulations on your podium win. Sandra

Phillip Garcia

October 2, 2016 at 6:53 PM

It's always refreshing to come across shorter forms that smack you in the face with their deep meaning and eloquent craftsmanship ship - I read these 17 words 3 times and on each read to something more out of it. Congratulations

Skat A

October 16, 2015 at 9:31 PM

David, Congratulations on your win. -SKAT-

Andrea Dietrich

October 16, 2015 at 7:45 PM

oh my. I remember this one. I adore it!!!! Congrats in the contest. Such a well deserved win.

Charlotte Puddifoot

October 16, 2015 at 1:27 PM

lovely description of a spider's web, well written tanka, this is how they should be written really - congrats on your win in the contest!

James Inman

October 15, 2015 at 8:53 AM

Nice write David.

Sandra Haight

October 15, 2015 at 8:49 AM

Stunning Tanka, David. A powerful image of the hunter and hunted in nature. Congratulations on your nice win! Sandra

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

October 15, 2015 at 2:00 AM

Congrats on superb win david with this wonderful write!

Lin Lane

October 14, 2015 at 11:10 PM

A tangled web was woven to capture this moth. Good weaving, Mr. spider and congratulations on weaving a great poem, David. ~ Lin ~

Robert Lindley

October 14, 2015 at 8:23 PM

Congrats on your win with this very deep and interesting poem.

Andrea Dietrich

April 1, 2015 at 11:05 PM

Now you are a fave poet of mine!!sorry it took me so long

Maurice Yvonne

April 1, 2015 at 7:12 PM

Good for me, I just read your comment explaining your poem to Andrea. Just the way I read it. I am giving myself a seven for being a good audience member.