Oblivion Contest

Oblivion Contest
Sponsor: Rob Carmack

Unconscious while the universe fights against her,
    Not aware of the hell that awaits in the next room,
        Not established in her secure mentalities,
            Now all that awaits her is the wrath of gloom.

Misunderstood by her trusted fellowship,
    Everything she longed for burned to ashes,
       She contemplates on why he has left her,
           And all night memories, the picture flashes.

As morning awakes she's still in limbo,
     Tortured mistakes as she cries of regret,
          What could she have done differently?
              And the bad times she starts is forget.

Broken and torn, confused and forlorn,
     This nightmare became her reality,
         Why she wishes he'd stay forever,
             She remembers her forgiving loyalty.

All the times he has beaten and abused her, 
     The controlling insults from carelessness,
          Leaving her lonely and solitaire,
              Her friend came is visit, hopelessness.

Oblivious to the pain she starts to walk,
     Ending up on his wicked doorstep,
        He invites her in once again,
           She forgets the agony from his forceps.

Date Written: December 6, 2015 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 12/24/2015 11:00:00 PM
Sorry that I previously missed replying to this contest being finished. Congrats on your well deserved win my friend.
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Date: 12/23/2015 3:59:00 AM
Hi Laura. Congrats for your placement in the contest! ;-)
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Date: 12/20/2015 12:30:00 AM
Laura, Congrats on your win In Rob Carmack's Oblivion contest. Love ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/19/2015 3:06:00 PM
LAURA, Congrats on your Oblivion WIN **SKAT**
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Date: 12/8/2015 2:11:00 PM
Your words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your imagination and poetic skills. A well structured poem with an emotional release launching it into our conscious mind with a subtle impact. Nice flow with the anxiety building up to the climax of a surprise ending.
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Date: 12/9/2015 11:04:00 AM
Thank you very much Emile:) -lu *smiles*
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