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Pleiades Contest 5 sponsored by Joseph May ~ 9/16/23

Overwhelmed by dire thirst Oppressed without water Over the next sand dune Offered in a vision Optical illusions Outcrops of tall date palms Oasis; a mirage

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/5/2023 3:01:00 AM

lovely Pleiades...reminds me of my days living in the desert in El Paso, Texas. I ran the sand dunes and often thought I saw an oasis on the horizon. Nicely done!

Lin Lane
Date: 10/5/2023 4:00:00 AM

Thanks, Sara. It’s a challenging form. El Paso certainly would seem like a desert. I’ve passed through on my way home to New Orleans.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/23/2023 3:23:00 AM

Creative way to go with this winner. Congratulations on your work being on the winners' list. Sara

Lin Lane
Date: 9/23/2023 1:48:00 PM

Thank you very much, Sara.

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/22/2023 2:03:00 AM

Hi Lin, You penned a good Pleiade on your chosen word. You painted such a captivating picture with words. I see congrats are in order. Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 9/22/2023 2:05:00 AM

Thank you so very much, Alexis.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/21/2023 5:07:00 AM

The sun inundates with the illusion! Congratulations!

Lin Lane
Date: 9/21/2023 5:20:00 AM

What a nice thought. Thanks, Kim.

Terry Flood

Date: 9/20/2023 4:25:00 PM

A quick fly by with congrats on your win, Lin. Well done. Terry

Lin Lane
Date: 9/20/2023 4:36:00 PM

I caught you on the down low with a high five. Lol. Thanks, Terry

Jan Allison

Date: 9/20/2023 6:32:00 AM

dropping back with many congrats Lin, sadly my piano poem hit a bum note lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 9/20/2023 1:04:00 PM

Oh, I'm so sorry, Jan. Don't give up... master the Pleiades form.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/20/2023 4:09:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win in the Pleiades 5 Poetry Contest, Lin :) -

Lin Lane
Date: 9/20/2023 1:04:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Anne-Lise.

Joseph May

Date: 9/19/2023 5:43:00 PM

Very nicely done Lin, Congrats on your win

Lin Lane
Date: 9/19/2023 11:45:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. I’m honored.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/17/2023 9:29:00 AM

Lin...many more of us need to get used to all kinds of climate change (and lack of water in some cases) due to our disruption and influence on the planet's natural systems. Nice synopsis!

Lin Lane
Date: 9/17/2023 9:34:00 AM

Thanks a bunch for your insight, Duke.

Terry Flood

Date: 9/16/2023 2:46:00 PM

Nicely done, Lin. I suspect this is for a contest (haven’t checked yet) in which case, good luck.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/17/2023 9:33:00 AM

Yes, it is, Terry. A Pleiades contest. Thanks for the kind thoughts.

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/16/2023 7:36:00 AM

Short, beautiful and very descriptive. That combination gifts it its amazing power, my good friend. A fav for me, have a wonderful day..

Robert Lindley
Date: 9/16/2023 12:14:00 PM

Yes, about the line lengths, I agree with you.. That is why I have never written in that poetry form myself. I do sometimes write haiku but that is the limit of my abbreviating my poetry. God bless you..

Lin Lane
Date: 9/16/2023 7:55:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Robert. The Pleiades form limits me to line length. Thanks for your thoughts and the fave.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/16/2023 6:27:00 AM

excellent ink Lin, you portrayed an oasis to perfection:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 9/16/2023 7:03:00 AM

Thanks for crediting this one with I hope does justice to the chosen theme. Hugs, Jan.