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Pleiades Contest 5 sponsored by Joseph May ~ 9/16/23

Oasis

Overwhelmed by dire thirst
Oppressed without water
Over the next sand dune
Offered in a vision
Optical illusions
Outcrops of tall date palms
Oasis; a mirage

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Sara Kendrick

September 23, 2023 at 3:23 AM

Creative way to go with this winner. Congratulations on your work being on the winners' list. Sara

Lin Lane

September 23, 2023 at 1:48 PM

Thank you very much, Sara.

Alexis Y.

September 22, 2023 at 2:03 AM

Hi Lin, You penned a good Pleiade on your chosen word. You painted such a captivating picture with words. I see congrats are in order. Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis

Lin Lane

September 22, 2023 at 2:05 AM

Thank you so very much, Alexis.

Kim Rodrigues

September 21, 2023 at 5:07 AM

The sun inundates with the illusion! Congratulations!

Lin Lane

September 21, 2023 at 5:20 AM

What a nice thought. Thanks, Kim.

Terry Flood

September 20, 2023 at 4:25 PM

A quick fly by with congrats on your win, Lin. Well done. Terry

Lin Lane

September 20, 2023 at 4:36 PM

I caught you on the down low with a high five. Lol. Thanks, Terry

Jan Allison

September 20, 2023 at 6:32 AM

dropping back with many congrats Lin, sadly my piano poem hit a bum note lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

September 20, 2023 at 1:04 PM

Oh, I'm so sorry, Jan. Don't give up... master the Pleiades form.

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 20, 2023 at 4:09 AM

- Congratulations on your win in the Pleiades 5 Poetry Contest, Lin :) -

Lin Lane

September 20, 2023 at 1:04 PM

Thank you so very much, Anne-Lise.

Joseph May

September 19, 2023 at 5:43 PM

Very nicely done Lin, Congrats on your win

Lin Lane

September 19, 2023 at 11:45 PM

Thank you, Joseph. I’m honored.

Duke Beaufort

September 17, 2023 at 9:29 AM

Lin...many more of us need to get used to all kinds of climate change (and lack of water in some cases) due to our disruption and influence on the planet's natural systems. Nice synopsis!

Lin Lane

September 17, 2023 at 9:34 AM

Thanks a bunch for your insight, Duke.

Terry Flood

September 16, 2023 at 2:46 PM

Nicely done, Lin. I suspect this is for a contest (haven’t checked yet) in which case, good luck.

Lin Lane

September 17, 2023 at 9:33 AM

Yes, it is, Terry. A Pleiades contest. Thanks for the kind thoughts.

Robert Lindley

September 16, 2023 at 7:36 AM

Short, beautiful and very descriptive. That combination gifts it its amazing power, my good friend. A fav for me, have a wonderful day..

Robert Lindley

September 16, 2023 at 12:14 PM

Yes, about the line lengths, I agree with you.. That is why I have never written in that poetry form myself. I do sometimes write haiku but that is the limit of my abbreviating my poetry. God bless you..

Lin Lane

September 16, 2023 at 7:55 AM

Thanks ever so much, Robert. The Pleiades form limits me to line length. Thanks for your thoughts and the fave.