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Not the Knight I Used To Know

You are not the knight I used to know, now, you are more like the shadow of yourself; you are down to zero… from a righteous rainbow. Your sweet storybooks suddenly left the shelf; a once loud and lovely voice that suddenly went low, oh, how did your graceful giant turn… an erring elf? The sparrows stole the saintly seeds you wanted to sow, you no more have control over your happy home; a once loud and lovely voice that suddenly went low. Your keen kids do not stop to run and roam, seeking succor from friends, families and… foes; you no more have control over your happy home. You have stepped on the Almighty God’s terrific toes, you are now an unknown Island… leaving all alone; seeking succor from friends, families and… foes. You have lost your terrific theme, thrust and tone, you are not the knight I used to know; you fell into fire and broke your blessed bone, down to zero… from a righteous rainbow. ~A Terzanelle entry for “Anything goes” contest~ Sponsor; Deborah Guzzi

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 1/9/2012 12:11:00 PM
Congrats on reaching this stage. Let the flag fly.~O.O.
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Date: 1/3/2012 7:59:00 AM
Congrats on making it through the 1st round of PoetrySoup International Contest. Wishing you the best Adeleke. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/29/2011 3:38:00 AM
A well written verse so worthy of its recognition. Congratulations for making it to the final round. Best wishes
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Date: 7/13/2010 3:34:00 AM
Congratulations Adeleke, on placing in the “Anything Goes!” contest sponsored by: Deborah Guzzi with this creative poem. Like can have pitfalls and disappointments, like falling from a righteous rainbow. Enjoy your glory! Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 7/9/2010 11:22:00 AM
Congratulations Adeleke on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Anything Goes" Love, Carol
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Date: 7/8/2010 2:47:00 AM
Terrific Terzanelle, Adeleke. Congratulations on you well deserved win. Love, Lainie
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Date: 7/7/2010 6:30:00 PM
Congrats Adeleke on your big win in the Anything Goes contest.. enjoy.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"
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Date: 7/7/2010 6:16:00 PM
Congrat's on your win Leke! I new this one would place well!~Tirzah~
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Date: 7/7/2010 4:55:00 PM
congrats Adel :D, Terzanelle very interesting form that i must try when i have the time, great poem!
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Date: 7/7/2010 4:03:00 AM
Adeleke, I am so happy to see you back here at the Soup writing after you had not posted for so long. I hope life is treating you better now. I wish you the best always and please don't let your pen dry out. Keep it buzy. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/6/2010 1:17:00 PM
Dear new friend please remember your periods especially in such a formal form. End of lines 2,3,9,10, 11 okies? Though I do not like the capitalization of the first word of every line MANY OTHERS are ok with it so leave it as you please sweet man. I perfer only the first word of a sentence & proper nouns to be capitalized. Excellent write a 7 truely!
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