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Norma-Jeane: Duo-Rhyme

When I was only seventeen, I met my darling Norma Jeane. And I, still wet behind the ears, Emboldened by too many beers, Approached her and forgot my fears, Became the envy of my peers - But knew our love would end in tears. And after many lonesome years, I saw her on the silver screen - And dreamed of how it could have been… Using Duo-Rhyme, a form by Mary Ports, for Andrea’s Duo-Rhyme contest

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Date: 8/10/2012 1:38:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Date: 8/9/2012 10:43:00 AM
A well deserved placement for you in the Duo-Rhyme contest. Congratulations Jack. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/5/2012 1:00:00 PM
Jack, your poem has made me smile today! Don't know if it's true or not, but either way, she was a true beauty and the object of desire for many young men. I agree with Debbie...not sure if she would have been a star today. I don't think it's the men who put pressure on women to be thinner. I think we as women put the pressure on ourselves and each other. Oh well, something to think about...congrats on a wonderful win. Love and Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 8/4/2012 6:29:00 AM
awww I wonder if today she would even BE a star size 16 you know? This was an age when women could be WOMEN not stick figures and men were men not Ken dolls?Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/4/2012 3:59:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie a well deserved win Jack, I like this one and would have placed it higher xx
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Date: 8/4/2012 2:15:00 AM
Jack congrats on your win, I like this one a lot....David
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Date: 8/4/2012 12:08:00 AM
Jack, the moving story you convey in this outstanding Duo-rhyme is really superb. I believed every word true or conjured. Congratulations on your wonderful win.
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Date: 8/3/2012 7:36:00 PM
Such a unique take on this contest! I love this change of pace.......(we have all had heart-breaking crushes at the age of 17!)
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Date: 8/3/2012 7:06:00 PM
How it could have been nice to be together...." Wonderful write,my friend..Congratulations on your well deserved win...
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Date: 8/3/2012 6:56:00 PM
Jack, you are such a versatile writer and one of my favorite male poets here at Soup. Thanks so much for doing the contest and writing such a well constructed example of the Duo-rhyme about Norma Jean. A well deserved third place! Congratulations.
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Date: 7/14/2012 2:13:00 PM
wow Jack.. amazing .. a winner .. u r referring to Marilyn Monroe? my friend... she is still the biggest and best well known blond bombshell in the World luvc.. quite the thrill to flirt with her.. super creative.. best wishes..
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Date: 7/12/2012 3:14:00 PM
Interesting 'structure'... Amusing/sad... & I like it! Terry
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Date: 7/10/2012 8:18:00 AM
Nicely done! What made you think of this as your topic? I really like your romantic ending :)
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Date: 7/9/2012 2:10:00 PM
‡ Norma Jeane * The Beauty Of My Dreams * Marilyn, One Day I Shall Kiss Your Beautiful Lips * Wonderful My Sweet Friend * Fortuned I Am Sure, To Have Caught This Breath & Touched Love's Heart * My Luv, Rachel ‡
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Date: 7/9/2012 1:56:00 PM
I had not heard of Duo rhyme, but this is a lovely poem. Well rhymed.
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Date: 7/9/2012 11:11:00 AM
Is this the Norma-Jeane that became Marilyn Monroe?...Good one that left me with questions...Reads like winning material..Good luck in the contest...Enjoyed reading this afternoon...Sara
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Date: 7/9/2012 10:56:00 AM
This is quite the beautiful write my friend! Jack, you sure have completed a masterful Duo-Rhyme and done so with the greatest lines! I really enjoyed this poems overall feel, very nicely done! Awesome write, Great Work!!
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Date: 7/9/2012 10:22:00 AM
Jack, excellent work, good luck..David
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Date: 7/9/2012 10:11:00 AM
Good one jack...best wishes..
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