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You are a sunset, bright colors, 
and the smell after rain. 
You are a calm lake, barely a ripple to be seen. 
You are mountains, and valleys, 
and clear skies. 
You are better days. 
You are love.


I am cigarette smoke	
and a wild fire. 
I am broken blades, and crushed up pills, 
I am torn skin, scars, dried blood. 
I am blue lips, cold skin.
I am the color gray, void of any emotion 
except pain. 
I am sadness.

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Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/12/2016 8:10:00 PM

Good contrast and a highly emotive poem. Your "I's" show great pain. I especially liked "barely a ripple to be seen," as it really shows that the person is calm. Now, It may be highly metaphoric... or you have lived through a personal hell. If that is the case, I hope you find writing as healing as I have. Welcome to soup. We are a caring community.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/7/2016 12:47:00 PM

Shannon, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Skat A

Date: 9/3/2016 8:51:00 PM

Very good list, Shannon, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT