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I coil in bed as twilight swirls in dim of hours Raking this womb , pained by angst -- While I transcend earth’s noise , I am alone In gilded light of an evening so restless-- Hushing mild whiffs, bleak and intolerable : Then, led back to soiled pillows While dusk bathes a soul without sweet quiet; As floats of sobs wail for some comfort That my wails reach heaven... yet not one cares For a lone soul needing a warm embrace On this day, our tenth year of togetherness. How the chill pierces the marrow When all that this moment needs is a voice, A human link, just this time... but then, no one cares --------------------- 3/23/2017 Phillip Garcia's Tale of the Best ~ Inspiration from https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/voice_in_hiding_538339 100 words

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Date: 9/20/2017 1:25:00 PM
Personally this is your best work so far. Its fantastic. You make me wish I was there. I can sooooo identify Masterclass
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Date: 4/5/2017 12:38:00 AM
Absolutely outstanding Nette, congratulations, that imagery is so incredible. You're such a talented writer :)
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Date: 3/27/2017 10:19:00 PM
Two different locations yet the message is the same .... Well penned Nette ...best wishes
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Date: 3/25/2017 7:53:00 AM
Beautifully written words and phases Nette, but that is nothing unusual for you.
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Date: 3/24/2017 7:26:00 AM
Ah Nette. "yet not even a restless wind listened " : )
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Date: 3/23/2017 5:05:00 PM
The ocean waves wash the shore preparing the ground for your imagination. Very well penned with good use of metaphors that bring the essence of your feelings to the surface like so much drift wood scattered by the waves. Emile. #7
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Date: 3/23/2017 10:58:00 AM
Moments that feel longer as the sense of time dangles from emotions felt and clarity reveals with every passing cloud..good poem dear poet
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Date: 3/23/2017 8:46:00 AM
Hi Nette, You painted a beautiful scene with words. You expressed your thoughts very well in this well written write. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven: -) Alexis
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Date: 3/23/2017 7:10:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful Nette. This poem brings a chill as I can feel the desolation and the need. A dark tinted piece that really touched me.
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Date: 3/23/2017 6:48:00 AM
Very emotional write! Those clouds darken when no one listens!
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Date: 3/23/2017 5:26:00 AM
An exceptional poem as always dear , nette, it seems today we listened to the same muse. A 7 my dearestfriend!
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Date: 3/23/2017 4:45:00 AM
i really like this one, nette, this darker tone is a good direction for you...the line "somewhere, a cloud turned violet" is excellent, and the opening line is very good, too
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