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No Longer On the Shelf - Used and Abused

At one time it pulsated with love 
now my broken heart is an empty can
dented through your repeated abuse

You threw me against the wall
and pierced me with your lies
then continued to kick me when I was down
treating me like a piece of worthless trash

I now lie alone in the gutter of life

Dented Cans Contest
Sponsored by John Lawless

12-24-17

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2017

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Line Gauthier Date: 4/19/2018 10:55:00 PM Awesome, Jan. I love how you approached this challenge. Beautiful work. Well crafted. Congrats. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/20/2018 3:28:00 PM Thanks so much Line:-) hugs jan xx

Ralph Sergi Date: 1/24/2018 2:08:00 PM Hi Jan: This is a far removal from your humorous poems and it was great. But please don't think I am type casting you! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/24/2018 6:45:00 PM Thanks so much for your comment Ralph:-) I write far more humourous poems than serious ones and I think I surprise sometimes with a poem like this:-) I never know where my muse will take me:-) hugs Jan x

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 1/14/2018 12:58:00 PM Holy mackeral that's a sharp potent pen! Well done Jan! mo hugs :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/14/2018 2:09:00 PM Thanks Mo: I do surprise with the occasional more serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot Date: 1/14/2018 1:05:00 AM Indeed a sad story, metaphorically kicked, (as you poetically put it), "into the gutter of life". Sadly whether it be physical, or mental abuse it is still an unwelcome common trait to the present day, whatever one's gender. A great take on 'dented cans', congrats... hugs... Mick Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/14/2018 7:58:00 AM Thanks so much for dropping by Mick I am so delighted John had my poem on the winner's page - domestic abuse is a difficult subject but we shouldn't shy away from writing about it:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 1/13/2018 12:39:00 PM A harsh poetic treatment of a problem that is all to common. Thanks for participating in the contest Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/13/2018 12:46:00 PM Thanks so so much for the win John I am delighted to be on your list:-) hugs Jan xx

Curtis Moorman Date: 12/27/2017 7:32:00 PM I was raised that only a coward, not a man, will hit a woman! I live by that and will come to the defense of any woman who is going through it. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/27/2017 10:24:00 PM You were raised well my friend, of course there is physical abuse but also mental abuse with words which can be just as damaging yet there are no outwardly visible signs of the hurt that is caused:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 12/26/2017 12:22:00 AM Whoa.....so sad that this is something that happens every day to women who deserve so much better. I hate to say it but being in the gutter would be a step up! Great writing Jan! : ) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/26/2017 6:19:00 AM oh Connie your comment especially the end sentence makes me so so sad :-( hugs jan xx

Agnes Krampe Date: 12/25/2017 5:58:00 PM Strong writing, creative take on the contest. Good luck! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/25/2017 6:09:00 PM Thanks Agnes I'm not sure what John will think but I am pleased with the poem:-) I hope you have a lovely Christmas and a happy new Year:-)Having my son home is so special its been a lovely day:-) hugs jan xx

Nathan D. Date: 12/25/2017 11:41:00 AM Very cool take on the contest. Good luck and merry xmas Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/25/2017 12:17:00 PM Hey Nathan welcome back to soup! have a wonderful time over the festive period:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley Date: 12/24/2017 10:12:00 PM A powerful and poetically beautiful write Jan. Every line shines but your first stanza is brilliant. An awesome write my friend. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 12/25/2017 11:32:00 AM Merry Christmas to you as well! Jan Allison Date: 12/25/2017 6:09:00 AM Thanks so much Susan. Merry Christmas I hope you have a wonderful time over the festive period:-) hugs jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman Date: 12/24/2017 8:19:00 PM A realistically sad thought provoking write about domestic abuse Jan! Good luck in the contest!~Che :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/25/2017 6:08:00 AM Thanks Cheryl it was a difficult poem to write but i was inspired after seeing an article on how domestic abuse increases over the festive period:-( hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort Date: 12/24/2017 6:24:00 PM Abuse is a bad thing. The way you used the can metaphor is uncanny. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/24/2017 6:26:00 PM lovely pun there Duke, sadly there is an increase in domestic abuse over the festive period:-( hugs jan xx