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no joking


               a silly token 
    to try fix what’s not broken 
            in fact unspoken 
      ‘til the mirror has spoken 
      have you only just woken
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October 12, 2024 at 12:18 PM
Hi David, I'm wide awake now having just read your poem.
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October 12, 2024 at 1:45 PM
Thanks John, we need to be on our toes around here, stay frosty and all will be good, cheers David
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October 11, 2024 at 1:10 PM
Interesting one David, some try and fix it before it gets broken and end up breaking it, stare in a mirror for 15 minutes and you'll see the devil, I've not seen him yet lol Tom
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October 11, 2024 at 2:06 PM
Very well put Tom, there’s another name for that, I’ll not mention it here, I think anyone that stares in the mirror for 15 minutes probably is the devil, lol! Thanks for stopping by with wise words, Cheers David
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October 11, 2024 at 10:17 AM
https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/rotate_consciousness_1498583 This one I looked up, wow great poetry, David and so many in the community agreed! Potd. Milton, bless his soul one of the first to comment as usual. That woman too, who had us all fooled. Forgiveness works when remorse is present, obviously there isn't much of it going on. Lol hope i'm not interfering as it may leave a bad taste, but something is really broken David you're doing your best to fix it. Cheers to that! Great entry !
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October 11, 2024 at 11:19 AM
Thanks Anaya, The great man himself Milton is on many of my past comments, yes there was another person there I thought I knew, but it’s ok now I know that real person, remorse was expressed and all is good with us, no you’re not interfering and always welcome to comment on my page, a lot of people have woken up to the existential threat of AI on this site, I’ll never be able to fix it, but the soup community can choke off users of AI, see Dilly’s new blog it has a real common sense approach to dealing with the problem, cheers David
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October 10, 2024 at 10:29 AM
I'd like to offer you a small token of my appreciation on such a perceptive critique on our nature. We project on others that which we refuse to see in the mirror. We have met the enemy and he is us. BTW, heard of Mark Gober? "The End To Upside Down Cosmos" do we really occupy no special place in the cosmos, while living out random and fundamentally meaningless existences?
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October 10, 2024 at 1:24 PM
MG: We seem to exist within a multispecies, multidimensional battle between Good and Evil, and our future as a civilization is at stake. Buckle up for a wild—and paradigm-shifting—ride. (I am still researching him) ha
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October 10, 2024 at 12:43 PM
That’s the beauty of eternity Anaya anything and everything can appear true at any given time, the wannabe scientist in me believes on the face of it, relativity explains most of the universe at a local level, but then breaks down when quantum physics and infinity is applied, let alone consciousness, yes indeed no GUT stands up to scrutiny, so still a place for a God, of course, I’d never be arrogant enough to dismiss one out of hand!
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October 10, 2024 at 12:09 PM
Gober my bad, question's the “consensus” cosmological model. Are we really flying through space on a spinning ball within an expanding universe, while free-falling around the Sun—all as a consequence of a “Big Bang” that supposedly occurred 13.8 billion years ago? Do we really occupy no special place in the cosmos, while living out random and fundamentally meaningless existences? Or are there problems with this scientific worldview? He deconstructs these beliefs revealing many shocking flaws and inconsistencies. Although he doesn’t claim to provide definitive answers, sometimes arriving at what’s not true is just as valuable. (Book sleeve)
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October 10, 2024 at 11:45 AM
Very true Anaya, man’s nature is sometimes to project onto others what he sees in the mirror to take the gaze away from himself, I don’t believe I’ve heard of Grober, but I have heard this kind of reasoning many times, but then I think (why anything at all why not just nothing) I believe we’re here because we have to be here, an inevitability of an infinite cosmos, which ultimately leads to a profound postulation, if we lived once why not a trillion trillion times in the past and future, we are part of eternity after all, mad stuff! Cheers David
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October 9, 2024 at 4:34 PM
pshawww at this one, David. At least I didn't miss it. The incentive for some to fix what's not broken is that they are broken, but never see it in a mirror. If they did, they'd see what needs changing is the face looking back at them... him... whatever. I just had a comment removed from a blog. ha
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October 10, 2024 at 2:42 AM
Ah you see deeper into my Tanka Lin which is great , I’m sorry you had a comment removed on a blog, perhaps if Admin spent more time removing spam and AI lunatics from PS, it would a better place for the whole community, cheers David
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October 9, 2024 at 3:39 PM
if it aint broken then why try to fix it - looks like we have a result from admin that they will not change the current contest system. as ever blog comments have been removed but its a victory for those who enjoy the contests as it is. hugs jan xx
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October 10, 2024 at 2:34 AM
Thanks Jan, the contests are fine the way they are, once checked over properly by sponsors for AI content, hopefully this little effort will place lol! Cheers David
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October 9, 2024 at 2:57 PM
David....I had to read this a few times to understand that the small measures taken are really just window dressing. It's put in a very clever and funny way. I just saw you are in Ireland. Hopefully, nice being there. It's a beautiful place. BTW, smiles and thank-you for your kind comments!!
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October 9, 2024 at 3:29 PM
Heya Duke yes I live in Ireland, it is a beautiful place once you get outside the city, I always try to peer below the surface in my poems, sometimes I go below and off to the side and very few get me on first read, perhaps a hint of dishevelment in this one with a twist, great to meet you Duke, cheers David
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