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Each night when darkness falls I'm plagued by terror and turmoil vexed in a crazed state of slumber tossing and turning, my life in crux chafed and chased in turbulent dreams It always begins when I close my eyes and sense a lurking shadowed presence I see the outline of the grayling's jaw, square and strong but flawed by pock marks, like deep craters from the fire pits of hell. Overbearing is the heat from flames thrown from his wicked tongue. They delve deeply to the core of me with curses that scorch and burn. They've left me scarred with jagged lines that he traces with knobby fingers. "What is this vile place of darkness?" I scream in agony, born of fear but there are no ears to hear my pleas. My cries for help are never heard but resound rapidly all around my head. Darkness conceals his face and form but his beastly shadow hovers over me as I sit, cringing against the wall. In a voice now raspy and weak, I gasp for one more breath. Clinging frantically to hope of escape, but I find no manner of breaking free. My arms and legs are bound in chains, blood flows like tears from my lips. I bit through the skin when I gave in. By morning I wake, dampened in sweat, stiff and sore with every move I make as though I had been crudely used... abused as if I were a cheap whore. Memories linger and there's no peace for my day is spent in dread of night when I'll be locked in chains once more. I search for the key to unlock my prison an illusive key that I may never find. :============: 9/19/2017 In The Dark Contest Host: Russell Sivey

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Date: 10/22/2017 4:50:00 PM
Beautifully done eerie poem. My compliments!
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Date: 9/27/2017 7:08:00 AM
Coming back with congratulations, and yeah Art and I will keep those lights on.
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Date: 9/23/2017 6:34:00 AM
Lin, Have you really experienced this boogey woogey man. I have in some way too in my poem Frankenstein. But now he no longer bothers me. I think I am some what free from this shadow
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Date: 9/23/2017 7:21:00 PM
No, Venetia... none of it's true. Glad you no longer have such dreams. Thanks for the comments.
Date: 9/23/2017 4:27:00 AM
Congratulation, Lin on your great win.
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Date: 9/23/2017 7:20:00 PM
Thank you, Subimal.
Date: 9/22/2017 10:21:00 AM
Lin, CONGRATULATIONS on your win with this outstanding and beautifully penned poem!
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Date: 9/22/2017 10:25:00 AM
I thank you most sincerely, Constance ';-)
Date: 9/22/2017 8:09:00 AM
dropping back with my congrats Lin:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/22/2017 10:24:00 AM
Thank you for a return visit and congrats, Jan.
Date: 9/22/2017 7:41:00 AM
Congrats, Lin!
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Date: 9/22/2017 7:58:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Dale.
Date: 9/22/2017 6:58:00 AM
Congrats!!! on 2'nd place my friend...nice place to vist...but don't want to live there lol...best wishes Lin...^WW^
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Date: 9/22/2017 7:10:00 AM
Thanks very much, J. I really didn't want to visit but sleep does have its way with us. Those congrats are coming back at you. I'll be over to read yours in a bit.
Date: 9/20/2017 1:50:00 AM
I know that so well.... Good luck in the contest, Lin
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Date: 9/22/2017 7:09:00 AM
You and Arthur need to keep your lights turned on, Darren. I don't like the dark. Thanks so much.
Date: 9/19/2017 5:14:00 PM
You took thew words right out of my mouth! Boy do I know these feelings! :)
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Date: 9/19/2017 7:25:00 PM
I'm truly sorry you're experiencing such emotions...Thank you for the read and keep the lights turned on.
Date: 9/19/2017 3:46:00 PM
very dark poetry, great imagery, wanted it to continue...good luck, I believe you have a winner
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Date: 9/19/2017 4:32:00 PM
Thank you very much, Frederic. I'm afraid it IS dark, so I hope she finds that key to unlock her conscience.
Date: 9/19/2017 2:57:00 PM
So Dark! :o a thrill to read xomo
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Date: 9/19/2017 4:31:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Mo xo
Date: 9/19/2017 2:28:00 PM
Wow Lin...that was intense...we are on similar wavelengths today
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Date: 9/19/2017 4:31:00 PM
We were thinking alike, Tim, but yours has a happier ending. Thanks!
Date: 9/19/2017 1:45:00 PM
Such dark deep chilling imagery Lin, I hope i can sleep after reading your terrifying poem I may have to sleep with a light on:-( hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/19/2017 1:48:00 PM
Bob will protect you. Russell asked for dark and that grayling creature lurks in shadows. lol Thanks...strange day...I transition from writing about a flower to telling a beastly tale.

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