Night Visitor

I am inside her body, but I am invisible; she can’t put a name to me.
I dwell between her chest and the core of her body.
She does not know what I am, and it’s driving her crazy.

She is not consciously worried by anything, yet I embody the “feel” of worry.
Am I anxiety? If so, why do I go away
the minute she comes here to the keyboard and starts typing?
Even now, I am dissipating. Just a whisper of me remains.

I have kept her awake tonight despite her high dose of a sedative 
along with Sleepy-time tea! She even upped the ante with Excedrin PM,
yet I just stayed in her body - surging -the invisible entity that I am.
I sat there (or did I lie there?) for at least two hours or more.
Finally something kicked in, and she was able to let go of me.
However, I know I was probably there all along as she lay dreaming.

When she tries to put a name to me, she searches for me on the internet.
Night dread comes up, but I don’t exactly fit the description.
I used to come only in the morning. She wants to know
why I am coming to her at her bedtime now as well!
She is afraid of me because she fears not getting sleep. Am I fear?
She can’t explain me or properly define me. I can't define myself either!
At this moment, I am pretty much gone, but maybe I'll return to her soon.

Sept. 19, 2018
For Brenda Chiri's Write Me An Emotion-Act Poetry Contest

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Date: 10/9/2018 12:55:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your win. Nice personification.
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Date: 10/8/2018 1:33:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement Andrea. This piece really speaks to me from an anxiety perspective. Thank you for sharing it xxx
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Date: 9/21/2018 10:02:00 PM
I've laid away many a nights . So I guess you will win I imagine :) Thank you for reading my Ocean
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Date: 9/21/2018 10:46:00 AM
Nicely rendered my poetic sister...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 9/21/2018 6:28:00 AM
Excellent write Andrea. You've kept me on the edge of my seat throughout the entire poem. Great take and good luck in the contest...Charlie
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Date: 9/20/2018 5:10:00 PM
Eerie, somewhat unnerving and very well written. "the invisible entity"; sounds like it's taunting her, even as she sleeps. Nevertheless, if it goes away when she types, I think it's her muse's darker side...they'll do almost anything to get you typing, writing, releasing. I thoroughly enjoyed this one.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/20/2018 6:31:00 PM
thanks, I guess it did become a must just this one time.
Date: 9/20/2018 3:38:00 PM
I see that you can write scary poetry as well as pretty poetry! You are quite versatile! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/20/2018 4:01:00 PM
thanks, Matt. It's more annoying than scary to have this visitor around. i really value my sleep!!!
Date: 9/20/2018 1:39:00 PM
I call the character "Horrors" He's always around to beat a negative drum...but I've learned to love him...he just does his job...Nice write Andrea...All the best
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Date: 9/20/2018 1:39:00 PM
I get that same visitor from time to time, an unwelcomed one for sure, best wishes in the contest...
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/20/2018 6:31:00 PM
It sucks, and you know it!
Date: 9/20/2018 9:45:00 AM
Oh so many will be able to relate to this one...You have me remembering those times now... Great way to express it..
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Date: 9/20/2018 2:22:00 AM
The night demons we had as children often return as adults. Frightening stuff without doubt. Good luck. Tom
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/20/2018 4:00:00 PM
Never knew him as a child. Only the last few years he has showed up!!
Date: 9/19/2018 6:14:00 PM
oohg how creepy Andrea good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/19/2018 5:34:00 PM
Very creepy and eerie, awesome personification!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/19/2018 6:02:00 PM
It IS creepy and I wish it would go away!!! Thanks, Agnes. I wish I understood how to do it per the sponsor's guidelines, but at least I tried.
Date: 9/19/2018 4:21:00 PM
Quite an original take on the contest. Kudos Andrea for your creativity..we all get the visits from time to time..you gave it a form and meaning one can relate to.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/19/2018 5:17:00 PM
I probably did not do it the way she wanted but at least I wrote what I wanted to!
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