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Night Sky Starts Pitch Black

night sky starts pitch black the dazzling sparkling lights burst.. oohs and aahs begin

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Robert Pettit

Date: 2/8/2011 5:14:00 PM

A nicely descriptive haiku. I see this won for you in a contest as well.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/6/2010 8:28:00 AM

Congratulations Francine on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Fireworks". Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/6/2010 3:37:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week at PoetrySoup Francine. May you have many more features. Love,Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/6/2010 1:52:00 AM

hi Francine :) congrats on your win with this-- those fireworks are definitely ooh & ahh moments! --nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/5/2010 12:48:00 PM

congratulations, Francine, on both the feature of your poem AND the win from Deb (I am seeing people's comments below mine saying this, so I assume it's true) This was very descriptive! Luv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/5/2010 11:11:00 AM

Congrats Francine on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. a great choice to share with us all.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. AlohA

Adeleke Adeite

Date: 7/5/2010 10:44:00 AM

Congrats Francine, on having your poem being featured on the Poetry Soup homepage this week, you are such a great talent! keep up the great writes, and enjoy the honor. Love, Adeleke

Elaine George

Date: 7/5/2010 9:29:00 AM

Beautiful Haiku, Francine. Congratlaions on your win in Deborah's contest. Love, Lainie

Janette Fisher

Date: 7/5/2010 7:17:00 AM

Many congrats on your feature and win in Deborahs contest. Rgds Janette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/4/2010 6:38:00 PM

Congrats Francine on your HM for your Haiku in the Fireworks contest with this remarkable write and honor to enjoy as u celebrate the 4th in style.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. AlohA..

James Fraser

Date: 7/3/2010 5:01:00 PM

That's what these delightful nights give us Francine, oohs & aahs, good luck in the contest >> James

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/3/2010 4:44:00 PM

Very descriptive of the night sky when fireworks go off....Great write..Keep the creative pen flowing ..Should be in the winners' circle..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Yes, my write "Angel's Assignment" is entered in the contest..Sara

Sarah Hales

Date: 7/3/2010 4:10:00 PM

Lights burst ...love that line SARAH X thank you for commenting on my work xxx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/3/2010 3:35:00 PM

How wonderful it is to see those bursting lights and hear the "oohs and aahs," Francine. I love your haiku and hope you have a wonderful holiday weekend. Best wishes for the contest, Francine. Love, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/3/2010 3:22:00 PM

How sweet are you for not getting upset at big "but in ski" me!

Francine Roberts

Date: 7/3/2010 10:52:00 AM

Thank you so much Linda and Deborah for your advice, I am so new to this and think it is just wonderful when people who actually know what they are doing are kind enough to share, Many thanks to you both

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/3/2010 6:22:00 AM

Hi there! Thanks for working on haiku with us! Please do not capitalize. line 1 the subject is ok yet you do not need the word "start" it is inferred yes? I am not being strict about the 5/7/5 as long as you have less than 17 syllables. Line 2 (very good..verb does belong in this line) please put ... or -- at the end of line 2 to indicate the cut or juxtaposition in line 3! Hope this helps! Light & Love

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/1/2010 6:37:00 AM

What a great Haiku to describe the celebration of fireworks Francine... u need some ... after burst in your second line to show emphasis on the verb action.. according to Debbie's rules... she is a TEACHER all the way through.. so hope u don't mind my telling u.. hate to see anyone disqualified because of simple ... ... the oohs and aahs I am enjoining myself right now being on vacation in lovely Hawaii... what a treat... thankxxx for your sweet comments Francine.. aloha.. "Sweetheart"