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15.00 pm  June 28, 2025    

Poem written based on a true experience going in a horror house by horror train. My friend was wondering about the stinky smell, then came to realize  my shoe was on his face. I supposed to use my shoe to hit anyone who'll touch me.

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Contest : What the World Loves

Sponsor: Poet Nette Onclaud

Date Written June 28, 2025   15.00pm

screams echo in the dark rich sweat floods train turns bumpy grab each other’s tight hugs my shoe- on his face, mouth

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Date: 7/15/2025 4:14:00 PM
WHAT THE WORLD LOVES Contest Judged: 6/28/2025 12:00:00 AM Sponsored by: Nette Onclaud Place 4 (up to 6 multi-w)
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Date: 6/29/2025 1:58:00 PM
You made me giggle in your poet notes! A great job writing from experience! Congratulations!
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/5/2025 11:02:00 PM
Thank you so much for reading my poem and your congratulatory greetings my dear poet friend. God bless you always. Hugs
Date: 6/29/2025 12:26:00 PM
hey, my friend. Glad you made the winner list. Congrats
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/5/2025 11:01:00 PM
I didn't expect it my dear poet friend. Thanks for the congratulatory greetings. Congrats to you as well. Hugs
Date: 6/29/2025 10:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your fun and scary "Night At The Carnival" write with a great picture. Thanks for the note on the top. Guess you did not go back. Hugs... Have a blessed day with your win................
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Date: 6/29/2025 6:46:00 AM
I love that you explained the shoe lol! So so funny!! brings the reader back to those days of youth when a scare was activity sought out!! Smh! Xoxo congratulations Len!
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/5/2025 11:00:00 PM
Thank you so much my dear poet friend for reading my poem and your warm congratulatory greetings. Blessings to you always. Hugs
Date: 6/28/2025 7:31:00 PM
Dearest poet friend, Len, I enjoyed your dark adventure on the “ ghost train”. Wonderful imagery brings me into the fright and the fun, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/5/2025 10:59:00 PM
Belated thank you for reading my poem my dear poet friend Susan. I'm glad you enjoyed it my dearest friend. Warmest wishes too. Hugs
Date: 6/28/2025 10:22:00 AM
Very cute and creative take on this topic. I really enjoyed this. When I was young and could tolerate rides, I loved going on the scariest ones
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/28/2025 6:02:00 PM
Thanks a lot for reading and uplifting words. Usually, I removed my shoe or step-in for self-defence, to hit anyone who will touch me, but my friend grabbed and hugged me too tight. So when we went out from horror house by train, my shoe was on his face. I edited changing 3 words dear.
Date: 6/28/2025 3:22:00 AM
Creative way to go with this one. I would not want to join them in going through this haunted house. Thanks for sharing this contest entry with us. It reads like a good contender to me. Sara K
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/28/2025 5:59:00 PM
Thanks a lot for reading this poem my dear Sara. A true experience bu i replaced shoe to bag. I removed it as weapon or self defense but my friend, hugged me too tight and my shoe went to his face. I was laughing when we went out the horror house by train

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