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Nicotine Dream

Nicotine death
                                                     devil in smoke 

                               shining in front your eyes with Harry potters
                                                 invisible cloak taking
                                                 Breath by breath with 
                                                      every smoke 
                                                       you'll choke

                                                        its no joke
                                         stop the smoke stop the smoke 

                  black
                                tar 
                  dimming 
                        a
                     inner 
                                star
                             shriveling
                                    lungs

                                          far to 
                                               young  bad tasting
                                                       tongue

struggling to 
     absorb air 

so you seek to sit down some where ,frantically stretching
to reach a near chair, with a mysterious fear, with the 
other hand wiping a single tear, and you can hear a 
loud chime and ringing ,as your swaying swinging and 
you whisper your last poem, that you never got to show EM!
 HE SAYS ......I shall never smoke again..... THE END
                  He in the arms of Gentle she.
                he watches his body from above
                              it was to late 
                Becoming smoke was his final fate....
                          ITS SAD TO SAY IT!

                              Grime in lungs
                     Grime took his time away
               with his wife and kids he couldn't stay 
                               I don't know but 
                              i am no hypocrite
                             but I decided to quit!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 6/14/2012 6:29:00 PM
Elliott, my fiance is a smoker... i wish he would quit too.... excellent poem,,pd
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Date: 6/14/2012 4:59:00 PM
As a non-smoker I do not understand what nicotine does - why people start smoking. You poem vividly portrays why someone would/should quit.
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Date: 6/14/2012 6:28:00 AM
I like how the words mimick his grasping for air - great way to empasize that. is this based on someone you know? or just a lesson for us all? a good one. glad to know you are quitting and won't become this man.
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Date: 6/13/2012 11:01:00 PM
I like this title. The way you wrote it looks like the smoke leaving a cigarette to me <3
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