Next Opponent

What am I doing here 
Just going through the motions
I think everything will be ok, that I’ll be ok
Then I get sucker punched
With an emotional blow to the gut
Can’t take much more of this beating 
I’m bleeding
Feeding off others who are needing.
How can they help me if they can’t help themselves?
How can I help them if I cant help myself?
It’s a see saw effect
Up down up down up down
Now what?
Where do we go from here?
Is there even a purpose to this ride?
I just want to hide
Im empty inside 
Now that my dreams and death collide
What am I doing here
 just going through the motions
cant find the purpose in this 
I’m pissed
I put up my fists
But my opponent laughs at me 
Taunts me with the truth
That my future has kissed 
me goodbye
I wanna cry
Curl up in a ball and die
And I’ve got 10 more rounds of this abuse
So whats the use?
This fight is just an excuse 
not to try. 
At least that’s what they say.
I pray for the bell to ring to end this round 
As I lay lifeless on the ground
Your fists pound
One… two… three…ten! 
You’re out, 
The uncaring shout…
Fights over
Next opponent

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 4/9/2013 8:22:00 AM
Very powerful metophor. Fortunately God is in your corner and when required he will fight for you.
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Date: 4/4/2013 6:23:00 PM
Hello once again... reading this poem again. i like the free falling feel of this poem. who's next... good question....xox~PD
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Date: 3/22/2013 9:41:00 AM
Bernard, your ending is your new beginning...clarity will shine upon you and purpose will appear...Thanks for all of your comments..xx Holly Moore
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Date: 12/28/2012 3:53:00 PM
thanks for sharing this poem xoxo pd
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Bernard Colasurdo
Date: 12/28/2012 5:44:00 PM
Hi Poet Destroyer! Thanks for reading. I'm really new at this poem writing. In fact I just write whatever comes to me. I don't know what to call the poems I write. This was my first crack at what I believe is "free verse" Would you please read my Abberations of a flailing mind" and critique it for me. I would appreciate it. Thanks so much. Bernard
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