Next, Next, Stop

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Written on July 8th, 2025 for Edward Ibeh's Pick-A-Title, Vol 53 - Poetry Contest, 3: Next, Next, Stop.
Standing on a rusted platform,
I look towards the looming, tarnished steel clock,
Ticking away my final moments of existence.
Oceanic eyes swell with liquid salinity
As a hollowing whistle booms in the close distance.
The scent of petrol mingles with midnight paranoia.
Placing a shaking hand upon my vibrating chest,
I can detect the trembling of a trepidatious heart,
Whilst the monstrous whistle is getting louder now—
Signaling the next, next stop: ruination.

Pulling up, two ghastly doors creak open,
Heralding me towards finality.
Stepping inside, all that surrounds is a blazing fog,
Like some surrealistic, dreamy haze
Engulfing my every gasping breath.
Choking on the ashes of all the sins
I have branded onto loved ones’ flesh,
I slam to the floor as the tempo of the train accelerates,
Jolting over a swinging bridge,
Taking my corrupted spirit
Over a modern-day River Styx.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025



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Date: 7/11/2025 11:29:00 AM
Hi Sara... please see my Soup mail to you.. and Edward's Blog
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Date: 7/11/2025 11:46:00 AM
Thank you and corrected
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