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New Moon Rising

NEW MOON RISING Arise the splendid evening of the ancient moon. It comes to hold a limpid crescent in it's arms. Then delicately sails within the hot night's song, and rides a wave it found in June's neglected tunes. A brilliant shard to witness two metallic orbs, that shyly flirt in symphonies of cosmic light. That Jupiter and Venus will dance a pas de deux, and the new moon rising accompanies their flight. Glimpse a cheshire grin upon the moon to smile at Earth, And to hold two planets in its withered smirk. Then to pass beneath their fated rendezvous, and expose their secret lair from hiding there . If crescent arms can hold an old moon taut and high, Then cheek to cheek let Venus waltz with god of sky. -Edlynn Nau June 18, 2015

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/16/2016 2:38:00 AM

This is really beautifully written Edlynn. I enjoy reading all different kinds of forms and PS contests encourages us to step outside our comfort zones to try new forms. My eyes can't handle too much computer light so I will pick up reading tomorrow. ; )

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/17/2016 1:42:00 PM

Thank you Connie! Gee, PS isn't informing me when someone comments anymore and you think they would have for this one since it was Poem of the Week. I'm really going to have to click on every poem I guess. Thank you so much for giving it a read! I should do more contests. You are absolutely right of course. I'm just not very competitive and run mostly on inspiration. However, just entering contests can help us write in new genre's. Thank you for reviewing this Connie! Back at ya soon!

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/17/2015 1:14:00 PM

Thanks so much Paul. I did this on a dare b/c someone asked if I could write free verse. Yes but I always feel I'm cheating. HA! It is fun to write in any genre. When I do Free Verse, I do a tiny bit of either inner or outer rhyme. I find it is more palatable to those enjoying a rhyme scheme while still really FV in not much end rhyme or syllable count. I have seen you employee the same technique. Thank you for reading! I will stop by for more of your reads. I've been sick this week.

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/17/2015 2:01:00 PM

Oh GOOD YOU GOT THE NOTE. I did turn the problem in to PS & am leaving the example on my Wall. I reported the case I was erased too. Thank you ALWAYS for your lovely visits. I'm waiting for migraine to stop pounding like a metronome before I catch up with a few visits. Soon!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 1:49:00 PM

Authors who relish rhyme and meter find it hard to completely keep away from it; yes, it happens to me too:) Hope you're feeling much better...smile:) // paul

Paul Callus

Date: 11/17/2015 11:16:00 AM

An excellent offering in free verse, Edlynn. Your use of personification is as creative as it is lovely. I'm still smiling at that "cheshire grin". I admire the way you turned this 'informative' topic into real poetry! #7 Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/17/2015 2:10:00 PM

YIKES! Do you often enter it twice & then go back later & delete the duplicate? I wonder what program they are using? Can't say if these are coding errors in the system or electronic hiccups!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2015 1:45:00 PM

No problem for me, Edlynn since I have received both replies. I know that glitches often occur, like when I am positive that I entered a contest but then it is not recorded anywhere! // paul

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/17/2015 1:21:00 PM

Odd the first sentence BELOW. . . I DID NOT TYPE. P Soup has a glitch???? Well, I didn't type it, nor try to Block you. They got something going on. One other member got me blocked & all my comments erased & he too said he did not block me. AnyWho I entered my comments above in case this IS BLOCKED. Hopefully you get them? I'm seeing the comment but it says "BLOCK POET..." At 1:14 PS Time (it is only 11:15 here...they be MT Time). This is terrible that poets are getting blocked from each other & WE ARE NOT DOING IT!

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/17/2015 1:14:00 PM

Date: 11/17/2015 1:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry Thanks so much Paul. I did this on a dare b/c someone asked if I could write free verse. Yes but I always feel I'm cheating. HA! It is fun to write in any genre. When I do Free Verse, I do a tiny bit of either inner or outer rhyme. I find it is more palatable to those enjoying a rhyme scheme while still really FV in not much end rhyme or syllable count. I have seen you employee the same technique. Thank you for reading! I will stop by for more of your reads. I've been sick this week.

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/19/2015 11:04:00 PM

This is magnificent poetry my friend. Free verse with depth and power too. Super 7 from me on this gem!!

Edlynn Nau
Date: 10/20/2015 12:40:00 AM

Awwww! Just what we all need a poet and a fan! Thank you for your encouragement. I usually do not write free verse. Ha! I am enjoying your writes too Robert.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2015 9:13:00 PM

wow, amazing personification here. I REALLY like THIS ONE!!! sEven

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/19/2015 11:09:00 PM

Glad to hear that Andrea! Everyone like the last verse...what can I do to improve the first few? Any suggestions? I want this to be a place we learn & if you can't learn from the folks that do this too...then, there will be no learning, just an awful lot of posting!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/14/2015 7:17:00 PM

Such lovely imagery Edlynn and I do like the personification:-) The notes were also excellent and I learned a great deal:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2015 3:47:00 AM

I did quite a lot of research for the homonyms poem I penned recently and I do like to google to get inspiration if a contest is set on a certain theme - most of the stuff I write simply comes from my imagination:-) hugs jan xx

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/14/2015 10:36:00 PM

Thank you soooooo much! I totally put in the RESEARCH first hoping that poetry can instruct as well as be a song of beauty and the human condition. What a great way to learn...right? Teacher, Teacher!