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Never Forget Flowers

Written: April 23, 2024 For Hilo Poet ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ shed my skin in light subdue flakes of old self-blight~ glance whispers of night I'm born on deep moon as tide beat on the lagoon~ I erred heart signs soon. smoke flaws stall the air sign of unlit porchlight glare~ yet, raise emblem snare ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ hide gloom in my flesh. catch sheerness of your fresh self~ slight shouts of the dawn I croak forth weak rage as ebb smashed into ocean~ stood next to plush fate. truth skills clear its lack a doom of bright escape sneer~ yet, throw hatred fails

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Date: 5/1/2024 1:26:00 AM
My compliments, Lasaad, for your winning placement in the Senryu contest which was a challenging edifice that managed to handle effortlessly, my friend. Aloha, William.
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Date: 4/24/2024 9:04:00 PM
Great lines you written in Senryu poetry form Sotto. All the best… Beryl
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Date: 4/24/2024 3:24:00 PM
My dear Sotto, very profound penning, as always makes my mind working and thinking about what you said. One more time you become my Garcia-Lorca. The one I want to become.
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Date: 4/24/2024 5:28:00 AM
Your opening stanza--highly emotive start to your inspiring poem--shed my skin in light subdue flakes of old self-blight~ glance whispers of night---
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Date: 4/24/2024 5:18:00 AM
Hey Sotto.. Your poem explores the complexities of self-discovery and the courage it takes to confront one's own flaws and shortcomings. Despite the challenges and setbacks, it finds solace in the resilience of the human spirit and the possibility of redemption. A powerful and evocative exploration of the human experience.
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Date: 4/24/2024 1:32:00 AM
How beautiful and profound is this, i know rhymes comes easy for you and you did that very well, the opening three senryus and how youv made the rest flow with them is beyond brilliant and impressive! I love so many lines in this especially “ I'm born on deep moon as tide beat on the lagoon~ I erred heart signs soon.” Wow! How deep and soulfully mesmerizing is that! And love the ending! Very deeply meaningful and i found your title very inspiring! Amazing how youv written so eloquently! BOL
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Date: 4/23/2024 3:33:00 PM
Very nicely penned Sotto
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Date: 4/23/2024 3:21:00 PM
I agree with Andrea. Your title was unique; your rhyme scheme in the first 3 senyrus was perfect. I appreciate the 'layering' of this poem...one layer being flowers and the other being humans. I particularly liked these two lines: I'm born on deep moon as tide beat on the lagoon~ Best wishes with this rather unique contest. Have a pleasant evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 4/23/2024 1:11:00 PM
an interesting title for this one, Sotto. I especially liked the cool rhymes you came up with . This was a difficult challenge for me. It will be great to see his winners!
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Date: 4/23/2024 12:28:00 PM
- Woow this was deep and powerful, Las - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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