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Neptune Day Parade

Tall tale conveyed A little like a charade Was about a mermaid Partook in a parade Long golden hair in braid Eyes brilliant of gems inlaid Seated on a throne of jade Draped in seaworthy brocade She was beautifully portrayed While her graceful horses neighed They passed by a colourful arcade Enchanted was she by a serenade Suddenly craved a wild exotic escapade Ran off with an attractive mate in mascarade Thought he’d treasure her heart soft as suede But quickly the wondrous fantasy decayed Realizing she’d been misplayed Heartbroken and betrayed She’d been remiss and overstayed With much reason to be afraid Perilously parched if further delayed She urgently made her way through the glade To the closest waterfall cascade Moral of the story aptly made When you’re a mermaid Guest in a parade Whether paid or unpaid Do not cross the barricade Submitted on October 3, 2020 for contest SECOND CHANCES NA POEMS of 2020 sponsored by CHANTELLE ANNE COOKE - RANKED 6TH and on October 2, 2020 for contest YOUR BEST UNCLAIMED POEM sponsored by JOHN HALMILTON Originally posted on February 20, 2018

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/7/2020 2:00:00 PM

Terrific string of monorhymes, Line, all cascading into the moral of your delightfully told story! Sending accolades for your parade! "Congratu-lades!"

Line Gauthier
Date: 10/7/2020 5:05:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sam ~

John Watt

Date: 10/6/2020 9:42:00 PM

Enjoyed your monorhyme, Line. Great mermaid tale with a moral, loved your rhymes. Congrats on your second chance win.

Line Gauthier
Date: 10/7/2020 7:00:00 AM

Thanks, John. Much appreciated ~

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/21/2018 4:15:00 PM

Love the intro stanza. Love the narrative. Love the moral. Love the monorhymes. Terrific write! :) Gershon

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/21/2018 6:11:00 PM

Thank you so much, Gershon. What good would it be if the story did not have a moral. LOL

Mike Gentile

Date: 2/21/2018 12:34:00 PM

Such a clever write, Line and you are right, you can't trust an attractive mate in masquerade !! xx00

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/21/2018 6:12:00 PM

Aren't they all in masquerade on some level ?! Thank you so much for your lovely visit, Mike.

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 2/20/2018 6:17:00 PM

OMG! Line! What an awesome write! I am totally floored by the talent shown here. All those rhyming words AND a solid message. Great!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 2/20/2018 9:50:00 PM

Mermaid, Maiden, Miss, Lass...it's all the same...she met a guy and he was her true downfall...lol

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 8:59:00 PM

Thank you so much, Rhoda. Yes, a strong message to all the mermaids out there. LOL

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/20/2018 5:29:00 PM

Oh, Line, you are so clever. I think you were the one who did another long monorhyme I recently read. You will have to try all the long vowels of the alphabet for your different monorhymes! CUTE ending on this.

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 5:46:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Lovely visit and comment.