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Needle In the Hay

The hayride proved fun for all I must say Until I jumped up and bellowed, “Oy Vey!” Other couples’ heads poked out Just to learn what made me shout (I’d sat upon a needle in the hay.) *For Dana’Lynn’s “Needle in the Hay” contest

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/1/2012 4:59:00 PM

Congrats on your winning work..Enjoyed reading again..Sara

Ray Dillard

Date: 6/1/2012 3:32:00 PM

You had fun with this, and so did we. Nice laugh. Congratulations. RAY

David Williams

Date: 6/1/2012 1:45:00 PM

Carolyn congrats on your win.. David

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/1/2012 1:18:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in the "Needles in the Hay" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song

Date: 3/31/2012 6:14:00 PM

Amused me....here I go, Carolyn....I have my warm beverage in hand...I am spending my evening with you here...Although Yasmin said she is calling me from Saudi Arabia and if she does call I will pause briefly...(shocked)...I know. Green tea,...then expresso!....here we go....

Jack Horne

Date: 3/5/2012 3:02:00 PM

LOL, had a good chuckle here : )

Samual Ronthorpe

Date: 3/3/2012 1:03:00 AM

Carolyn, wonderful limerick. Best of luck in Dana Lynn's contest.

Kash Poet

Date: 3/3/2012 12:56:00 AM

This Limerick showcases your Brilliance!!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/2/2012 5:22:00 PM

Very cute, Carolyn. Thanks for giving me a laugh tonight. Blessings, Rhonda

Kim Merryman

Date: 3/2/2012 4:05:00 PM

Cute one, Carolyn. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Kim

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/2/2012 3:46:00 PM

Ha ha, this is a great entry into the contest Carolyn! I really love this write especially the part, "Until I jumped up and bellowed, "Oy Vey!"" what an awesome line here! I really like how you made this poem into a Limerick because I think it fits so well into the contest. She will like this Limerick I know! This is an incredible write my friend!! Excellent Work!!

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/2/2012 2:54:00 PM

Oh! you kill joy, all those other heads pop out of the hay. wonderful wicked limerick, glad i've seen this.. harry