Brenda Meier-Hans Poet Free verse

Near Death Experience

Lying silently on my bed, eyes open wide.
Watching as darkness moves in like a heavy fog.
My breathing seems to echo against the cold walls
And my heart beats rapidly as I’m plagued with thought.
Prayer like questions, if I should die before I wake,
I pray the Lord my soul to take, will he take me?
Instantly thoughts go to grandma, surely she’s there,
Surely her open arms will be there to greet me.
Harbouring such thoughts bring to me a peaceful smile.
I start counting all the loved ones I will soon see.
I count them as others count sheep in darkest night
They have become like soft comfort blankets to me
They make my nights less scary, should it be my time.
Soon my weary body gives way to pure darkness 
I slip into a place of total nothingness 
Time stands still and now I am neither here nor there
I am nowhere, floating helplessly forever
Then far off I see a light shining so brightly 
Now I feel once more as my aching body hurts
I moan and roll toward the window lit with sun
Realization sinks in, I’ve made it……one more night.

Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 
11.01.2014
Anthony Slausen’s Contest:
Near Death Experience
5th

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Darlene Gifford November 12, 2014 at 10:33 PM Hi, Brenda, I want to ditto what Mama Bear said, Also, you got a lot of responses to this poem, so you know you have the love and support of all of us here at the Soup. Wishes for your improved health and healing because God is the Master Surgeon and healer, so you are in the best of hands, Blessings, Darlene Brenda Meier-Hans November 12, 2014 at 10:51 PM Thanks so much Darlene. I appreciate your kind words.

Mark Trichet November 6, 2014 at 5:36 PM Loved the emotions realized in this write Brenda. Well done Brenda Meier-Hans November 8, 2014 at 9:15 PM Thank you Mark.

Carolyn Devonshire November 6, 2014 at 5:10 PM Dear Brenda, your grandmother and many other loved ones will be waiting for you. I'm certain of it as I did have a near-death experience while on an operating table. It gave me a chance to see my handsome husband one more time. Congratulations on your win, but even more for understanding the scope of human emotions so well. You are a gifted writer, my friend. Love, carolyn Brenda Meier-Hans November 8, 2014 at 9:14 PM Thanks so much Carolyn and I believe you.

Kayod5 Kayode November 6, 2014 at 7:24 AM Many more nights Brenda,congrats on the win.

Jan Allison November 6, 2014 at 6:05 AM dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Hija De La Luna November 6, 2014 at 12:06 AM Congratulations, Brenda! i love this! Brenda Meier-Hans November 8, 2014 at 9:13 PM Thank you Hija

Cherl Dunn November 5, 2014 at 8:38 PM Ok Brenda, it's posted check out Clyde, hope you enjoy cheri Brenda Meier-Hans November 5, 2014 at 10:41 PM Okay!

Pace Ink-U-Script November 5, 2014 at 9:36 AM I sooo love this....I felt as if I was there along with you...excellent write! Brenda Meier-Hans November 5, 2014 at 9:49 AM Thanks so much.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 5, 2014 at 8:33 AM :0 the ending is awesome.. :) its all beautifully done.. :) God bless you always Brenda.. :) Brenda Meier-Hans November 5, 2014 at 9:48 AM Thank you Olive.

Nette Onclaud November 5, 2014 at 4:54 AM ohh, this is so mystical, brenda... I like how you composed this with such heartfelt scenes.. hugs! Brenda Meier-Hans November 5, 2014 at 9:47 AM Thanks Nette

Mama Bear November 4, 2014 at 9:12 PM You have seen the light but it was not your turn. Thank God each day for the blessings of further life. Live it to the fullest and make God proud that you were spared Blessings and hugs. Well done Edith Mama Bear November 5, 2014 at 10:53 AM You are a really fine writer both fact and fiction Keep going girl Blessings Edith Brenda Meier-Hans November 5, 2014 at 9:46 AM Thank you Edith. I try hard.

Cherl Dunn November 4, 2014 at 9:02 AM Great flow and much thinking went into this creative write of yours I enjoyed reading it today my friend, cheri Brenda Meier-Hans November 4, 2014 at 11:09 AM Thank you Cheryl

Connie Marcum Wong November 3, 2014 at 2:52 PM This is beautifully written Brenda. My mother died for over two minutes and she described floating above watching everything and feeling very peaceful until they gave her a shot in the heart reviving her awake in pain. She said she didn't want to return it was so wonderful. This brings me comfort when my time comes. Glad you made it through! Connie Marcum Wong November 3, 2014 at 5:18 PM I saw it and then I bought the book of the little girl who is briefly in the movie who paints Jesus and speaks about her experience. I enjoyed both. Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 4:35 PM Thank you Connie. Your story reminds me of the movie Heaven is for real. Wonderful film.

Liam Mcdaid November 3, 2014 at 8:35 AM truly very beautifully penned brenda Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 8:54 AM Thank you Liam.

Maurice Yvonne November 2, 2014 at 4:41 PM I just want to hug you Brenda. What an amazing write, you spoke to my heart. I am going to fav it. Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 8:56 AM Thanks Maurice, the hug did good. Thankfully I am no longer in this place.

Debbie Guzzi November 2, 2014 at 2:29 PM It ain't easy sleeping alone, then again it ain't easy sleeping with someone either. ;) Light & Love Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 9:02 AM :-). I have never been afraid of sleeping alone Debbie. I have no fear of dark in fact I love it really dark. Just when you are told you are dying then nights are much different. I am very blessed not to have this worry anymore. Maurice Yvonne November 2, 2014 at 4:40 PM Oh thanks a lot Debbie for crushing my dreams.

Tim Smith November 2, 2014 at 8:42 AM Beautiful job Brenda....I am happy you keep making your one more nights...hugs Tim Brenda Meier-Hans November 2, 2014 at 1:00 PM I am glad that I can go to bed with the same thoughts as everyone else now. Well maybe not the same thoughts as you. ;-). But I tried to remember not to long ago when I really wasn't sure.

Cynthia Ferguson November 2, 2014 at 6:05 AM I know that feeling , you write with feelings attached , I could feel all that, :) I have realized since writing I am not alone out there, Brenda Meier-Hans November 2, 2014 at 1:01 PM Thean Cynthia. I'm glad youth could tell how real this was.

Shadow Hamilton November 2, 2014 at 5:44 AM like where you took this Brenda good pen gl in contest hugs Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 9:09 AM Thanks Shadow.

Sara Kendrick November 2, 2014 at 5:22 AM Interesting way to go with the near death experience..Sometimes as we age each night seems like a near death experience because of the pain of one sort or another..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 9:10 AM Thank you Sara

Dorian Petersen Potter November 2, 2014 at 3:09 AM You really got on this one and very nicely done Brenda. And relieved the way you wrapped up the ending with a happy another day and sunshine. GL in the contest! ;) Xxxxx D. Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 9:11 AM Thank you Dorian.

Jan Allison November 2, 2014 at 1:51 AM love the take on the theme Brenda - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 9:11 AM Thanks Jan.

Andrea Dietrich November 2, 2014 at 12:02 AM you did a loose interpretation on the theme. I was thinking of doing that as well. Hmmm, I really ought to try! But we shall see. Very well done with your entry, Brenda!! You were inspired to do an interesting poem. Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 9:14 AM These were not just my imagination running wild searching for a poem. They are exact feeling I was experiencing not long ago.