Nature Leading To Magic

At times, the path that we are taking dwindles to not even a thread of trail,
but we keep trudging forward as if by instinct.
Although the old path has been overtaken by myriad weeds
and a fathomless expanse of green, we walk with determination.

Branches of tall trees that block summer's sun have made it dark.
Also, the wood is permeated by a great silence
except for the sound of our noisily treading feet
and an occasional burst of song from birds.

At one point, one of us gets our hair caught in brambles.
It slows us down, but we manage to get our sister
released from the clutches of that nasty shrub.
Onward we proceed - excitement growing!

My  heart is pounding as we emerge from the daunting vegetation.
Before us lies the beautiful secret place where sun streams like a waterfall
onto that large secluded pond we always recall from our childhood.
Sweaty and hot from our trek, we stand before it breathless.

It sparkles still pristine. Tossing off shoes, socks, shirts and shorts,
my sisters and I race each other – giggling school girls once more -
to see who will be first to feel again its cool, sweet water on our skin.
Fifty years fade away as we relive . . .  the magic.

Feb. 27, 2020  Theme #3: Nature
Contest: Writing Prompt - Ten Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Dear Heart
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Kauffman Avatar
April 7, 2020 at 11:54 PM
What a magic memory. On a vacation we found a hidden waterfall in the middle of a tropical jungle. Your wonderful, flowing narrative brought that magic moment back! Congratulations on your win my friend!
Somadas Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 3:24 AM
Thirty-five years faded away, still the sun streamed like a waterfall.. Beautiful lines.. And a little story behind the nature's delight.. Great win Andrea..
La France Avatar
March 10, 2020 at 6:03 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely poem and thank you for taking part _Constance
Watt Avatar
March 10, 2020 at 12:05 PM
Andrea, congrats on your #2 in the Ten Words contest! I knew it would do well ~ John
Watt Avatar
March 5, 2020 at 4:33 PM
Very endearing. I like the build of anticipation and wonder not knowing with whom or towards what you are hiking until the end. Sounds like a delightful trek! Good luck in the 10-word contest, you incorporated the words so seamlessly ~ John
Staton Avatar
March 5, 2020 at 8:31 AM
This is great! Would make an excellent passage in a book or short story. Keep up the good work!
Laurie Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 10:10 PM
Hello Andrea … wonderfully written again. Surely a verse like this can only come from experiencing it. The reality is truly there - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
Y. Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 9:08 AM
WoW! Andrea, I really enjoyed this nostalgic write. You drew the reader in with every word. What I saw lovely and magical. You used the 10 words very well. It looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest. Have a wonderful day and weekend:-) Alexis
Michael Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 8:56 AM
i like how you wrote this one with the 10 chosen words....Enjoyed the read...
Pandit Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 7:00 AM
Great poetry in awesome details that paint the images--enjoyed the sights and and sounds. All the best, Andrea.
Rose  Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 5:05 AM
Thank God for our past memories and the luminous past we lived. You wrote with a dear heart of remembrance Andrea, Loved it. Have a great day xo
Dietrich Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 10:13 AM
thanks for reading this!!
Dietrich Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 10:12 AM
the heart of imagination. We had the woods, but not that magical pond!!
Cunningham Avatar
February 27, 2020 at 9:22 PM
Love the imagery in your story Andrea, great use of the allocated words. Good luck. Tom
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