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7/1/2024 for This or That, Vol 26 Poetry Contest, sponsored by Edward Ibeh

Nadir

Born into a landscape,
Not quite littered with landmines, 
But the occasional hole - 
Holes that seem inescapable,
Like quicksand -
When I fall, I just keep falling.  
Where is the bottom, the nadir?
It's impossible to know.
It's impossible to get out, 
Like being captured in a whirlpool,
My only direction is in and down.
Like a lost spider in a toilet bowl
When it's flushed.
A vicious cycle -
The only direction is down and in.

I live in fear of these holes.
Above ground,
I find friends and pleasures,
Challenges and detractors,
But nothing I can't handle.
Once I fall in,
And approach the vortex,
I'm hopeless.
There is no pleasure.
My friends don't understand.
There is no way out.
There is no bottom.
I can only fall - 
In and down.

Yet, I'm living proof
That one can escape.

Perhaps, I began in a kind of vicious cycle
A cycle of anger,
A cycle of hate.
Cycles upon cycles,
Round and round, 
With no escape.
Tit for tat, 
It seems such cycles
Can only deepen.
But, somehow, I got out.
It took time.
Like George Harrison said,
"All things must pass".

A few times, I fell in love.
It was like being pulled into a vortex,
Without choice.
My heart was broken.
Somehow, I got out.
It took time.
All things must pass.

Once, suddenly,
My health was dealt a blow,
Resulting in physical pain,
Sending me,
Down, down, down.
I thought I could never get out.
I still have the health problem,
But I'm out of the hole.
It took time.
All things must pass.

Once, suddenly,
I lost my girlfriend.
I lost my job.
I lost my house.
I lost my family.
The ground under me was removed,
I found myself with strangers
on Christmas day. 
Even there, I was unwelcome.
And I fell down, down, down.
But I'm out of the hole.
It took time.
All Things Must pass.

I live in fear of these holes,
And I think I'm pretty good at avoiding them,
But there is no guarantee,
And I never know
When I will fall
down, down, down.

I'm sure many people 
Have likewise fallen deep
Into seemingly hopeless
vicious cyclic whirlpools
Of despair.

I wonder,
If even whole societies,
Can suffer
Vicious cycles,
Tit for tat,
Of of hate, hopelessness, ignorance,
And despair,
And, if so, 
One day, this too,
Shall pass.
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Date: 7/28/2024 3:27:00 PM
David, congratulations on your top win with this superb, powerful write. Love it. Congratulations on your top win in my contest
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David Crandall
Date: 7/29/2024 9:21:00 PM
Thanks Edward, your contests always give something to think about!
Date: 7/28/2024 3:07:00 PM
Youv written about so many holes that so many must also have fallen and found their way out eventually. What a deeply moving and well written poem! I really love the line “ When I fall, I just keep falling. Where is the bottom, the nadir?” brilliant one and when one is going through a phase of darkness and loss it feels like everything just happens all at once and youv delivered that very well for the prompt! Soul hitting! Pleasure reading this. Congratulations on your win: well deserved
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David Crandall
Date: 7/29/2024 9:24:00 PM
Thanks so much, Ink Empress. Yep, that's how depression seems to be for everyone. It looks like there's no way out. Everything good seems impossible, but then one day, you find yourself and everything is fine.
Date: 7/28/2024 7:51:00 AM
Oh yes, a fav for me David. I hear you my friend and empathize! I've faced many such holes, in and down, seemingly no way back out! Then, as you say, it passes! I've used this refrain myself in times of trouble... all things must pass. Also, "do everything YOU CAN... then let God do everything YOU CAN'T ! That has helped me out of many holes. I love this write and I'm glad you were recognized!! Xoxo
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David Crandall
Date: 7/28/2024 12:26:00 PM
and I know that you've been through what no parent should ever experience and yet you create beauty, e.g., "Go in Peace"
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David Crandall
Date: 7/28/2024 12:19:00 PM
Thanks Crystol. You're so nice! I turn to "all things must pass", and for me, the serenity prayer,
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/28/2024 7:53:00 AM
It sound as if you've been through so much...I am sorry but I'm also glad to see how it has built the character of the man who writes some of my favorite poetry!
Date: 7/27/2024 8:56:00 PM
dear poet, congratulations. happy writing.
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