Mystery of the Orient

It was an unusual trip that was planned,
stranger still that my Mother-in-law was the reason.
A wonderful woman who was liked by all who knew her,
kind, gentle, hard working, and grateful for the gift 
of reaching America to see her children and dreams grow.
                 Young Chinese woman
                 Leaving family abroad
                 American dreams
She wanted to see her home just one more time...
a small village in China.
Nixon's trip had made it more accessible,
and she wondered what the old homestead had become.
With a grown daughter she had not seen in 35 years,
left with her mother because of difficulties in travel visas.
                 Aching to see home
                 A child she missed so much
                 Excited to go.
My wife, I, and young son accompanied her on this journey,
meeting a cousin in Hong Kong after the long flight.
I was surprised by the Cosmopolitan atmosphere,  but
then remembered it was still under British Rule.
We spent the next day getting all the visas and passes needed
to cross the border into "Red" China.  Some sightseeing was
done, but our train would leave next morning.
                Family affair
                Tokyo and Seoul connections
                Bureaucratic bunk.
Our three drivers were waiting after our one night in Guanzu.
Eager to prove their skill, we gave them nicknames for the
style each one drove.  "Speed Bump Racer" hit every pothole along the 
200 mile trek.  "Dead Man's Curve" would only pass on blind curves, and
"Honkin' Hank" loved the sound of his horn. Each impressed me with their
daring, especially with our lives in the balance.  We were fortunate to make
it to the village in one piece, even if the trip was a bit rough.
                 Three idiots drove
                 Putting our lives in their hands
                 How did we survive?
My Mother-in-law's home had not changed much, but the village had.
A new Civic Center was the showplace and a feast in her honor to be held.
Over 10,000 firecrackers to start a feast? This was to be her
welcoming honor; we listened to continued blasts for five minutes.
The entire village was invited to join. A whole roasted pig and other delicacies.
Her oldest daughter, now married with children, family, and friends gave her a send off only a star would have appreciated.  The trip home was anticlimactic.
                 Who could know her thoughts?
                 Deafening silence from her
                 Tears of remembrance.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 8/28/2017 8:01:00 AM
It's really fascinating to get a glimpse of various civilizations around the world in literary delight! Congrats and thank you so much Dan, for sharing this gem! ;-)
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Date: 8/26/2017 5:01:00 PM
Congrad's Dan! It seems we really can never go home & I felt I had a similar experience last week. Your verse made me feel less alone. Light & Love
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Date: 8/26/2017 2:10:00 PM
What a lovely and emotional trip this was, Dan! Definitely, a trip of a lifetime! Congratulations on your fine win. Regards // paul
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Dan Cwiak
Date: 8/27/2017 12:43:00 AM
It was lovely and emotional Paul. Not so much for me as for my mother-in-law. It was her emotions I was enamored by, and could only have written it from an emotional perspective. Thanks for your comments.
Date: 8/25/2017 4:43:00 PM
Nice Haibun, Dan, enjoyed reading your write , congratulations on your win : ) ~*
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Date: 8/27/2017 12:20:00 AM
Thanks Eve. If I ever have to take a trip like that again, I think I will just pass. Thanks for the comments.
Date: 8/25/2017 3:45:00 PM
A wonderful story! Congrats! Especially loved the verse about the drivers!
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Dan Cwiak
Date: 8/27/2017 12:18:00 AM
Thanks Kim. I could never leave them out as they were people I will always remember. Your read and comments are most appreciated.
Date: 8/9/2017 2:37:00 PM
Hello Dan, good to see your'e back.' this piece is is full of longing and emotion at its start, I appreciate the disjointed aspect running through it as you express the ambivilace of your 3 drivers and the Legal process that was the opposite of the village welcome and its "grown up state' that echoes to me the indifference of growth and brings me back to that aspect of de'ja vue hope you are well.'
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Date: 8/10/2017 4:59:00 AM
Thanks Joe. I was in a real desert for words there for a while, and felt I had lost the knack. When my last Uncle and Aunt passed away within weeks of each other, the words seem to erupt again. This one is of a trip we did take. I was fascinated with the country and people, but it was my mother-in-law's homeland and she could not go alone. I was glad I could complete it in the space allowed. Thanks for your comments.
Date: 7/31/2017 2:37:00 PM
Fabulous use of the Haibun form to tell an engaging story. I loved it. Cheers and Best Wishes
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Dan Cwiak
Date: 8/1/2017 11:45:00 PM
Thanks John. I am not familiar with the form, but reading some of Connie Marcum's work has helped me with this poem. There was a lot more, but I was restricted by the amount of characters I could write. I do thank you for stopping to read it and your words of encouragement.
Date: 7/31/2017 1:07:00 PM
Very well done Dan. You had me hooked from the opening line. I truly enjoyed this story. - Dean
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Date: 8/1/2017 11:39:00 PM
Thanks Dean. The country had me hooked as soon as we landed, and I started seeing more oriental faces. I could not believe the day we left Guangzu...I wish I had the bicycle franchise. I appreciate your comments and only wish I could do that kind of travelling again.
Date: 7/31/2017 10:59:00 AM
You are a great story-teller, dear poet. I enjoyed the poetical atmosphere, the touching feeling and exotic adventure like reading a chapter from Pierre Loti. Eternity is born in the village, as a famous poet-philosopher said. Well, people live under the same stars. Respect of life could be an ethical imperative . A world entire lives in your work, Master of Haibun.
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Date: 7/31/2017 11:18:00 AM
Thank you Ovidiu. I could have made more of this, as there was so much to see and do in only 2 weeks. I tried to pick things which were essential to the trip. I do appreciate your taking the time to read it and your comments very much.
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