Mysterious Deluge

Written: May 04, 2024

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                                        Trapped
                                       b e n e a t h
                                 a n ~ u m b r e l l a
                             o f ~ t o x i c ~ s h a m e
                            a n d ~ d e s p o n d e n c y

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in the seclusion of four walls... h a r b o r s a dying spirit. Infused rain clouds b u r s t i n t o a deluge of thoughts…. f l o o d i n g our imagination.
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Challender Avatar
May 8, 2024 at 12:21 AM
Congratulations on your win! Great imagery.
Kendrick Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 5:27 PM
Back with congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara K
George Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 12:37 AM
A desperate mental state powerfully delineated in the form of a shape poem. "in the seclusion of four walls... h a r b o r s a dying spirit." When one imprisons oneself within the four walls, his spirit will be moving to a state of slow death. I am sure this is going to be placed at the top. All the Best, dear friend.
Beaufort Avatar
May 5, 2024 at 7:03 PM
SP, you make me wonder what the toxic shame and despondency are! Of course, these would cause a spirit to suffer. Hopefully the rain symbolizes something better to come. I like this!!!
One Avatar
May 5, 2024 at 1:08 PM
This is very clever, I assume it is for Brians contest.. nice shape and clever idea for a poem.. Best of luck.
Pandit Avatar
May 5, 2024 at 6:32 AM
So creative, my friend. Succinct yet powerful:--a deluge of thoughts…. f l o o d i n g our imagination---
Buhagiar Avatar
May 5, 2024 at 3:46 AM
Loved your shape. A poem that should strike deep into everyone's heart.
Vaso Avatar
May 4, 2024 at 10:38 PM
I had to come and read this, or the mystery would kill me :)
Greenhough Avatar
May 4, 2024 at 3:36 PM
Thoughts in the brain can become crowded. I like this poem, especially the flood at the end. It all comes together in a rational perpective.
Kendrick Avatar
May 4, 2024 at 2:43 PM
I like this one. These are not so easy to do. It looks like an umbrella. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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