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Mysterious Deluge

Written: May 04, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Trapped b e n e a t h a n ~ u m b r e l l a o f ~ t o x i c ~ s h a m e a n d ~ d e s p o n d e n c y h i d d e n
in the seclusion of four walls... h a r b o r s a dying spirit. Infused rain clouds b u r s t i n t o a deluge of thoughts…. f l o o d i n g our imagination.

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Date: 5/8/2024 12:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! Great imagery.
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Date: 5/7/2024 5:27:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 5/6/2024 12:37:00 AM
A desperate mental state powerfully delineated in the form of a shape poem. "in the seclusion of four walls... h a r b o r s a dying spirit." When one imprisons oneself within the four walls, his spirit will be moving to a state of slow death. I am sure this is going to be placed at the top. All the Best, dear friend.
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Date: 5/5/2024 7:03:00 PM
SP, you make me wonder what the toxic shame and despondency are! Of course, these would cause a spirit to suffer. Hopefully the rain symbolizes something better to come. I like this!!!
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Date: 5/5/2024 1:08:00 PM
This is very clever, I assume it is for Brians contest.. nice shape and clever idea for a poem.. Best of luck.
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Date: 5/5/2024 6:32:00 AM
So creative, my friend. Succinct yet powerful:--a deluge of thoughts…. f l o o d i n g our imagination---
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Date: 5/5/2024 3:46:00 AM
Loved your shape. A poem that should strike deep into everyone's heart.
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Date: 5/4/2024 10:38:00 PM
I had to come and read this, or the mystery would kill me :)
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Date: 5/4/2024 4:19:00 PM
Outstanding write, dear Sotto! Loved the flood shape you created--an umbrella and a deluge of words. Well done! Your words were profound and insightful. I especially liked: In the seclusion of four walls... h a r b o r s a dying spirit. Wishing you a splendid evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 5/4/2024 3:36:00 PM
Thoughts in the brain can become crowded. I like this poem, especially the flood at the end. It all comes together in a rational perpective.
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Date: 5/4/2024 2:43:00 PM
I like this one. These are not so easy to do. It looks like an umbrella. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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