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My Viva's On Visa

A pyramid tour On my bucket list Approach by camels Cross an oasis Play mahjong with sheiks In hot desert tents Where harem girls dance Through wafting incense Explore monuments With ancient secrets Engraved sarcophagi Sanskrit alphabet The airfare alone Would make some withdraw Camel rental's high The pricetag's the flaw To cross the ocean For vacation viva Need huge chunk of change From Uncle Visa * For Linda-Marie's Viva Vacation challenge

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Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 12/4/2010 5:37:00 AM

congrats again on this one. And thanks for the sojourn to other lands.......we must be related cause we have the same uncle....He is not a nice person to us nieces and nephews! Never given me a single christmas present thus far ! ...You?

John Freeman

Date: 5/25/2010 6:30:00 PM

Congratulations, my friend on your well deserved fifth place in Linda's contest. Thanks so much for your special support in the Agape ministry today. It is appreciated more than you could know. Agape, Moses

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/21/2010 5:44:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn on your win in the contest "Viva Vacation" sponsored by Linda-Marie. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson

Date: 5/6/2010 5:44:00 PM

Great poem and Congratulations on your win. My granddaughter is just home form India where a highlight was her ride on a camel. Love, Joyce

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/6/2010 5:43:00 PM

This gave me a chuckle the first time I read it....I need to make a phone call to my Uncle Visa...for vacation time is almost here!! Congratulations, Carolyn, on your placement in the contest!! Love, Carrie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/6/2010 5:17:00 PM

Congrats Carolyn on your 5th place win in my Viva Vacation contest.. an amazing write.. appreciate your support.. luv.. Linda-Marie

Travis Tapley

Date: 4/29/2010 5:59:00 PM

Yeah, you are right! I probably could not afford to rent an row boat and oar myself there! This was really fantastic. i loved every line.

James Peranteau

Date: 4/28/2010 4:06:00 AM

Excelent poetry Carolyn ! And what a vacation that would be ! have a great day ! james

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 4/26/2010 7:37:00 PM

Hi Carolyn, I love this vacation idea. It would be so wonderful to visit Egypt and ride a camel across the desert. Great vacation! Call me. Love, Dane Ann

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 4/26/2010 4:23:00 PM

Yes, Carolyn, you have it here! This is one of your best! Great job! I really liked this one! Balanced and witty to boot. or should I say..Priceless. Sorry, I couldn't resit.. Regard, Gerard.

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 4/26/2010 11:11:00 AM

Lovely I'd love to sail such vast oceans, but not so sure of by camel!lol. great visionary Carolyn, loved this one... I want to go somewhere hot! Smiles, well done and thanks for you most kindred comments on my 'Arum'!

Daver Austin

Date: 4/26/2010 7:32:00 AM

How you doin? How's Jerry? Just browsin.Love, DAve

Gert W. Knop

Date: 4/26/2010 3:25:00 AM

Yes, that is a real problem! As we are all born into our world by accident, travels should be free wherever we'd like to go! I remember th fellows renting camel for a ride in the Sinai Desert once, but only took a picture...Lovely penned Quatrain, Calolyn! I got many kind responses on posting my poems also in German...I think it is a good experience for all who still know the language. Vielen Dank für die Kommentare!!!...Love, Gert

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/25/2010 10:07:00 PM

Hey Car,My luggage is ready..let s head for the pyramids..maybe dance for the Harem too:) the belly dancing:)..I love this poem,Excellent poem indeed...Charma

Donal Mahoney

Date: 4/25/2010 1:54:00 PM

Carolyn, Words are the only thing I know. I'm no good with tools. I don't hunt and I don't fish. But I played basketball pretty well but I'm too old for that now. So I dribble words to keep my mind sharp. I want to grow old enough, as they say, to be a burden to my kids. Just kidding. I have to say that because people on this site are pretty serious and they sometimes think I mean everything I say. Most of it I make up. That's why I was an editor and not a reporter. Donal

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 4/25/2010 9:25:00 AM

very nice and funny good luck in the contest hope you are enjoying your weekend faleshia

Daver Austin

Date: 4/25/2010 8:20:00 AM

Good luck with "Uncle Visa." I understand that camels stink - saw it in an Indiana Jones flick. Camels are wonderful, not the cigarette, the animal. Greatest face ever created. Love, Dave

Katherine Stella

Date: 4/25/2010 7:49:00 AM

Dont want to go there for to darn hot and I hate it when camels spit had one do that to me at circus lol but loved this tour and imagery was nothing but perfection looks like it goign to be in winners circle thanks hun for the great comments keep up the wonderful writing

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/24/2010 7:21:00 PM

this is so delightful, I would give it a win for sure!! Luv, andrea

James Fraser

Date: 4/24/2010 4:34:00 PM

Quirky Quatrain Carolyn, Egypt would be an interesting place to visit. They are still finding Tombs. They were digging foundations for a new school, and hey presto, they found a few of them. Good luck in the contest >> James

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 4/24/2010 2:21:00 PM

Made smile...always enjoy your words my love...keep them comming ....Michael

John Loving Iii

Date: 4/24/2010 2:14:00 PM

soup mail. john

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/24/2010 11:44:00 AM

Interesting write that should do well in the contest...Keep the creative pen flowing...Good luck in the contest...Sara