Beautiful Scars Poet Sedoka

My Valentine Contest

Valentine Poem Contest
Sponsor:  Nayda Ivette Negron

Part One

breathe new life in me
   release my infringed defeat
      obsolete sorrow has left

intimacy, free
   hold me in safety, my sweet
      death to my suffering cleft

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Part Two

starry nights, just us
   love me right under our moon
      do not rush, let's take our time

shower me at dusk
   I pray you marry me soon
      my dear man, my valentine


Poetry Form Sedoka
Syllable Count 5-7-7-5-7-7
Rhyme Scheme in Part One ABC-ABC
Rhyme Scheme in Part Two ABC-ABC


Date Written: February 12, 2016

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 16, 2016 at 1:50 AM Wonderful write Laura n so is the win.. big congrats! Beautiful Scars February 23, 2016 at 9:00 PM Thank you Dr. Upma :)-luloo

Susan Gentry February 14, 2016 at 8:19 PM Very nicely done. Congratulations on your win! Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 9:53 PM Thank you Susan :)*smiles* -luloo

Andrea Dietrich February 14, 2016 at 7:20 PM lovely very lovely, Laura. Congrats for your win. Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 7:23 PM Thank you Andrea :)

Eve Roper February 14, 2016 at 3:17 PM Happy Valentines Day my dear friend :) Love your beautiful poem, congratulations on your win !!!!!! Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 4:16 PM Many thanks Eve -:)-luloo

Vladislav Raven February 14, 2016 at 2:27 PM Hi Laura, congratulations on your placement in Nayda's contest. An excellent Sedoka. May your pen ever run Gold Laura....Vlad.

Keith Bickerstaffe February 14, 2016 at 1:25 PM A perfect SEDOKA! Superb phrasing, imagery and sentiment. BRAVO Laura! Best wishes, Keith Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 4:16 PM Thank you Keith, best wishes to you also :)-luloo

Anindya Mohan Tagore February 14, 2016 at 1:24 PM Luloo, dear you have done justice to the form and gifted us two amazing Sedokas. The twists are truly great. Hugs and Happy Valentines, Bobby Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 4:15 PM Thank you Bobby, and happy Valentines Day to you also :)-luloo

Jan Allison February 14, 2016 at 12:40 PM Absolutely beautiful LuLoo congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 1:19 PM Thank you lady Jan :) -luloo

Ingrid Showalter Swift February 14, 2016 at 12:26 PM Lovely write :) and I love the picture too Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 1:18 PM Thank you Ingrid :)-luloo

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores February 14, 2016 at 11:45 AM Congratulations on the placement of the contest Laura Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 11:52 AM Thank you so much Nayda, I am honored for my placement, have a blessed day :)*Smiles* -luloo

Katie Bugnacki February 13, 2016 at 8:14 PM oh wow! this is so cool :) you make poetry look so easy lulu! -KB Beautiful Scars February 14, 2016 at 9:52 PM Thank you KB, you are very sweet, thanks for popping in so often reading my poems :)-*smiles(* -luloo

Eric Boddie February 12, 2016 at 7:58 PM lost is where I found my breath....amazing words you wrote yourself....unique style as well as display....rarely is Beauty seen this way....as it stands, these words are strong....Love couldn't appear more Beautiful in a song....optimism is all that Love inspires....only Love is what the heart desires....Beautiful write laura....;) Beautiful Scars February 12, 2016 at 8:09 PM Thank you Eric :) *smiles* -luloo