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Valentine Poem Contest
Sponsor:  Nayda Ivette Negron

Part One

breathe new life in me
   release my infringed defeat
      obsolete sorrow has left

intimacy, free
   hold me in safety, my sweet
      death to my suffering cleft

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Part Two

starry nights, just us
   love me right under our moon
      do not rush, let's take our time

shower me at dusk
   I pray you marry me soon
      my dear man, my valentine


Poetry Form Sedoka
Syllable Count 5-7-7-5-7-7
Rhyme Scheme in Part One ABC-ABC
Rhyme Scheme in Part Two ABC-ABC


Date Written: February 12, 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 2/17/2016 12:25:00 AM
A beautiful Valentine poem, Laura. Congratulations on your well deserved win in the contest. T.J
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/23/2016 9:01:00 PM
I just saw this! Thank you very much! -luloo
Date: 2/16/2016 1:50:00 AM
Wonderful write Laura n so is the win.. big congrats!
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Date: 2/23/2016 9:00:00 PM
Thank you Dr. Upma :)-luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 8:19:00 PM
Very nicely done. Congratulations on your win!
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 9:53:00 PM
Thank you Susan :)*smiles* -luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 7:20:00 PM
lovely very lovely, Laura. Congrats for your win.
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 7:23:00 PM
Thank you Andrea :)
Date: 2/14/2016 3:17:00 PM
Happy Valentines Day my dear friend :) Love your beautiful poem, congratulations on your win !!!!!!
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 4:16:00 PM
Many thanks Eve -:)-luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 2:27:00 PM
Hi Laura, congratulations on your placement in Nayda's contest. An excellent Sedoka. May your pen ever run Gold Laura....Vlad.
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Date: 2/14/2016 1:25:00 PM
A perfect SEDOKA! Superb phrasing, imagery and sentiment. BRAVO Laura! Best wishes, Keith
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 4:16:00 PM
Thank you Keith, best wishes to you also :)-luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 1:24:00 PM
Luloo, dear you have done justice to the form and gifted us two amazing Sedokas. The twists are truly great. Hugs and Happy Valentines, Bobby
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 4:15:00 PM
Thank you Bobby, and happy Valentines Day to you also :)-luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 12:40:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful LuLoo congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 1:19:00 PM
Thank you lady Jan :) -luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 12:26:00 PM
Lovely write :) and I love the picture too
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 1:18:00 PM
Thank you Ingrid :)-luloo
Date: 2/14/2016 11:45:00 AM
Congratulations on the placement of the contest Laura
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 11:52:00 AM
Thank you so much Nayda, I am honored for my placement, have a blessed day :)*Smiles* -luloo
Date: 2/13/2016 8:14:00 PM
oh wow! this is so cool :) you make poetry look so easy lulu! -KB
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/14/2016 9:52:00 PM
Thank you KB, you are very sweet, thanks for popping in so often reading my poems :)-*smiles(* -luloo
Date: 2/12/2016 7:58:00 PM
lost is where I found my breath....amazing words you wrote yourself....unique style as well as display....rarely is Beauty seen this way....as it stands, these words are strong....Love couldn't appear more Beautiful in a song....optimism is all that Love inspires....only Love is what the heart desires....Beautiful write laura....;)
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/12/2016 8:09:00 PM
Thank you Eric :) *smiles* -luloo