My Truths

                        Leaves of Lilith, fall like butterflies 
            as I slither in souls, secluded by time ~ 
where treacherous tulips still mourn the death of magnolia moon, 
hidden within scentless sepals, which couldn't be their evergreen anchor... 
                        Hear the echoes of grieving dawn, 
whose tamed scars forgot to unfurl my truths beyond memories ~ 
scripting me like misplaced intuition, surfing on those whispering waves, 
      for I've always blossomed upon heartaches, in gardens of metaphors ~ 
            hibernating as the turmeric taste of melting sun... 
                        I'm the untouched ink of sin ~ 
swirling across silver patience ebbing along the starlit peacock-golds, 
            where daffodil dryads throb in ancient dyes and I'm caramelised... 
      above sonnets soaked in skeletal promises, 
                        my reason rests within wisdom, an ageless mirage...

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/27/2024 8:31:00 AM

Back with congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing a little about yourself with us. Sara K

Constance La France

Date: 11/13/2024 11:27:00 AM

Hiya, congrats on your win in my contest, like the poem, well done, love Constance

Valsa George

Date: 11/5/2024 9:04:00 PM

"I'm the untouched ink of sin" ~ "my reason rests within wisdom, an ageless mirage... " "I have blossomed on heart aches".... Great lines! Your intricate metaphors and their meanings, I find hard to extricate. Still I know it is an in-depth depiction of your life with its portrayal of the heartaches and your resilient spirit fighting to bounce back. Your style here is inimitable, as always. All the Best dear Hiya.

Paige Hind

Date: 10/25/2024 4:41:00 PM

"hidden within scentless sepals, which couldn't be their evergreen anchor... " love that- <3

Silent One

Date: 10/24/2024 11:16:00 AM

I love how your poem is steeped in powerful and intricate imagery that blends nature with emotion. The "Leaves of Lilith, fall like butterflies" immediately sets a mystical, almost forbidden tone, referencing Lilith, a figure often associated with rebellion and mystery. The leaves falling like butterflies evoke fragility and fleeting beauty. The metaphors extend into the "treacherous tulips" and "magnolia moon," suggesting a natural world that is both beautiful and haunted by loss.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 10/24/2024 8:31:00 AM

Dear Hiya, Beautiful words that intertwine nature and emotion. I think your imagery is outstanding as it artistically explores the complexities of personal experience. Again, outstanding metaphors of blossoming amidst heartaches reflect the resilience of the human spirit. Whenever a poem prompts profound introspection, I would rate it as excellent. Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Joe Dimino

Date: 10/24/2024 7:23:00 AM

"where treacherous tulips still mourn the death of magnolia moon" -- very difficult to overcome deep tattooed hurt -- "I'm the untouched ink of sin" -- Wow! Powerful! -- "my reason rests within wisdom, an ageless mirage..." -- Hopefully someday to be realized by self and the world. Brilliant poetry! You get a FAV from me. Blessings my friend.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/22/2024 2:34:00 PM

Whoa!!" I'm caramelized." That would be a sweet or oversweet, sticky situation. Thanks for sharing it with us. Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Sara K

Jay Narain

Date: 10/22/2024 11:17:00 AM

wonderful write. A masterpiece. Teach me how to write like you.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/22/2024 7:49:00 AM

My sweetest angelic star, there you are posting again and one that is dark and resonates with me on so many deep levels, sometimes i read your words and feel like you write for me what i feel as we are so in sync! I felt this one so very much and i loved the way youv played around with words and also how youv woven metaphors! Time, has a way of revealing so much and we feel secluded often! I hear the echoes of grieving dawn, and I absolutely loved “ misplaced intuition “ and “turmeric taste of melting sun! Wow!! That line! I cant even! Hits home for me! Youv used symbolism and metaphors to depict inner truths that we often suppress unless we weave them on canvas! I also loved the lines-

Ink Empress
Date: 10/22/2024 7:51:00 AM

“ and I'm caramelised... above sonnets soaked in skeletal promises, my reason rests within wisdom, an ageless mirage... ” wow! I absolutely love this poem! Best wishes for the contest! Good to see you posting here! Hugs! Sending you light and pixie dust always