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My Thunderous Wondrous Electric Toy Train

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It was shiny and bright sitting under the tree. There were other things there, but that's all I could see: a Lionel toy train on a circular track! The caboose was maroon and the engine was black. And to top it all off on this fine Christmas day, was an engineer's cap that I donned right away. I had deadlines to make and my job couldn't shirk, so I rolled up my sleeves, and went straight to my work. Utilizing impressive construction techniques, I made Tinker Toy tunnels through newspaper peaks. With an engine, a caboose, and three railroad cars, I would ride to the moon and haul back the stars! It sputtered and sparkled and went round and around with a clickety clackety sonorous sound, and an oily ozony odoriferous tang: my thunderous wondrous electric toy train! And then Daddy and I had to go out for bread, and to pick up the big Sunday paper he read. We're just about home when there was flashing of red... and the crossbars dipped down at the railroad ahead. As the freight train slowed up, I could clearly divine the big engineer's head with a cap just like mine! We dismounted and yelled, and I signed him three yanks. He gave me three toots - and I waved back my thanks. With my engineer's cap and my blue overalls, I was dressed in a style to give anyone pause! I had grand places to go and marvels to see... but Mommy had my breakfast all ready for me. It sputtered and sparkled and went round and around with a clickety clackety sonorous sound, and an oily ozony odoriferous tang: my thunderous wondrous electric toy train!

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Date: 5/10/2017 8:35:00 AM
Roy, Loved this!! great story telling with flow and form. Very much enjoyed the read...
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Date: 8/10/2015 11:47:00 PM
Congratulations, Roy... SKAT
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Date: 8/10/2015 7:32:00 AM
"and an oily ozony odoriferous tang" perfectly described-you can taste the smell of the oily smoke from a toy train. Great write.
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:11:00 AM
Wonderful images Roy, took me down the timeline to recall my own memories, Congrats on big win!~
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Date: 8/9/2015 5:19:00 PM
Dropping by again Roy it was delightful to read this again - my congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan x
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Date: 8/9/2015 8:30:00 AM
Roy, I can still remember a train set on a christmas morning. Thanks for this wonderful memory filled write. Congrats on the win.
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Date: 8/9/2015 6:24:00 AM
Congrats Roy - a wonderful piece ;)
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Date: 12/6/2014 9:52:00 PM
Wonderful story Roy. It made me smile from start to finish and brought back beautiful memories. I love the picture. Congratulations on your first place win.
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Date: 12/6/2014 8:08:00 PM
Hi Roy, I really enjoyed your wonderful train poem. It brought back so many memories of my brother and my dad having so much fun with the Lionel trains on Christmas many years ago. Congratulations on your win! Excellent rhyme and rhythm! Sandra
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Date: 12/6/2014 5:38:00 PM
Love toy trains, loved your poem. Great title, marvelous story, excellent rhyming, nice smooth flow, Congratulations on your well deserved win!
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Date: 12/6/2014 4:09:00 PM
Great story....Congrats on your win
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Date: 12/6/2014 8:25:00 AM
Awesome poem, congrats on the win
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Date: 12/6/2014 8:08:00 AM
Fantastic, I also loved the picture. Congrats.
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Date: 12/5/2014 6:09:00 PM
Beautiful childhood memories so well recorded. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 12/5/2014 3:40:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats on your win Roy:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 4/8/2014 6:23:00 PM
Beautifully written Roy. we have a train set in the attic - cost a fortune - son lost interest and its been gathering dust for years. We do have an awesome steam railway for about 15 miles on the Island, also horse drawn trams and an electric railway up the the summit of Snaefell mountain - very much a place for the railway enthusiast to visit. hugs Jan x
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Date: 4/6/2014 11:13:00 AM
Hi Roy: I have written many poems that were personal to me only and I believe this to be a personal poem. Your love for your trains is an epitome of the beautiful wordage you used to describe the trains and their actions. Great write!
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