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I savor silence and my solitary dreams, my wanderings
and in my candlelit room, I withdraw 
to my secret place and you
I have put on our wedding dance music
and I am travelling back, back in time with a sigh
I know what comes next and I want to weep with love
my dress is a cloud of red chiffon flowing, flowing
and you my darling, are in a black suit
soft the jazz music drifting in my meditation
did I put that music on or did it just come to me
you whisper in my ear, besome mucho, and I turn the page
back, back, I turn back the pages
we swirl onto the dance floor, twirling and dipping perfectly
and the red chiffon is beauty 
kiss me my darling your whisper or is that the music
your strong arms hold me tightly, oh I remember
and we are spinning, spinning, spinning
then the music is loud like thunder, roaring
  and you are fading
      our hands slipping
          then our fingertips
              and still we are spinning
                 until you are gone and I am alone
                            yet the music goes on and on

and in my candlelit room, I take a deep breath . . . 


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February 5, 2016


Poetry/Free Verse/my solitary wandering
Copyright Protected, ID 16-752-594-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.



Submitted to July Standard Contest
sponsor, Brian Strand

Second Place
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Submitted to the contest, Solitary Moments
sponsor, Mystic Rose

First Place

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Date: 7/10/2017 2:17:00 AM
This is exquisite, my friend ... I so love your work, and this is going on my favs list! Romantic, melancholy and sublime ... all my favorite elements - your description and phrasing is marvelous! Congrats! :-)
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Date: 2/13/2016 8:34:00 AM
congratulations on your win BW, the poem is well penned
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Date: 2/13/2016 4:55:00 PM
Sage, thank you for the congratulations and the compliment !
Date: 2/11/2016 9:26:00 AM
So sweet the memories. Congrats on your well deserved win. DMB
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Date: 2/11/2016 9:43:00 AM
Dm, thanks for the sweet and the congrats, rereading this I was swirling in that red chiffon dress....
Date: 2/10/2016 11:32:00 AM
Thank you for the reply
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Date: 2/10/2016 11:19:00 AM
Great write, Congratulations!!
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Date: 2/10/2016 12:03:00 PM
Sarita, thanks for the great and the congratulations !!
Date: 2/9/2016 3:25:00 PM
You have written an amazing beauty again, Constance. I wish I had come by earlier to read this one. A7 and fave's for sure. Congratulations on your most deserved top placement in the contest. T.J
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Date: 2/9/2016 7:46:00 PM
Teppo, thanks for the congratulations, the amazing, the 7 and the fav !
Date: 2/9/2016 3:03:00 PM
BW, congrats on your top placement, very well deserved..:)-luloo
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Date: 2/9/2016 7:46:00 PM
Laura, thanks for the congrats and the compliment !
Date: 2/9/2016 1:51:00 PM
Broken, Congrats on your awesome poem. LINDA
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Date: 2/9/2016 7:47:00 PM
Linda, thanks for the awesome and the congrats !
Date: 2/9/2016 1:34:00 PM
Congrats and well done, BW...very sentimental.
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Date: 2/9/2016 7:48:00 PM
Lin, thank you for the congrats and the compliment !
Date: 2/9/2016 1:24:00 PM
Congratulations on a top notch poem, B.W. a well deserved write.
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Date: 2/9/2016 7:48:00 PM
Daniel, thanks for the congratulations, appreciate ~
Date: 2/8/2016 7:26:00 AM
A journey in solitude that takes you to a certain place. It is wonderful that you can describe your journey, and that you picked this specific one. What I find remarkable is how you can be there in this place and describe it with such precision. This takes a great deal of persistence which I know you have. What a unique and fabulous person you are.
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Date: 2/8/2016 9:42:00 AM
Duke, thanks for the visit and the compliments, this is my gift, I can live my poem, be right inside and write it as it happens, but I do meditate and have paper and pen ready after to write the journey I was on, right after, if one waits, you forget it, at least I do ...
Date: 2/7/2016 6:04:00 PM
your solitary moment's so deep...heartfelt BW, best of luck in the contest
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Date: 2/7/2016 6:06:00 PM
Sage, thanks for visiting, that's me deep and dark !
Date: 2/7/2016 5:15:00 PM
wow, this one is really good. I love the way it crescendos to the last spinning image and then that deep breath. Love it
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:39:00 PM
Andrea, thanks for the wow and the compliment, and the love !
Date: 2/7/2016 1:58:00 PM
Ilike this very much... LINDA
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:06:00 PM
Linda, thanks for visiting and for the compliment ~
Date: 2/7/2016 11:51:00 AM
Lovely write BW.
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:06:00 PM
James, thanks for the lovely ~
Date: 2/7/2016 10:44:00 AM
very poignant and well-penned poem! You have painted this scene perfectly, it comes to life and lingers on....good luck in the contest!
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:07:00 PM
Sandra, thanks for visiting my poem and the nice comment, appreciate ~
Date: 2/6/2016 11:58:00 PM
I have to take a deep breath me self at this fine poem!
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:08:00 PM
Arthur, thanks for visiting my poem and for the great comment ~
Date: 2/6/2016 2:37:00 AM
the whole picture lingers on my mind, so splendid.. a beauty, constance..huggs
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Date: 2/6/2016 1:36:00 PM
Nette, thanks for visiting and for the splendid and the beauty and the hugs !
Date: 2/5/2016 11:49:00 PM
Wow. That's quite awesome and very poignant. I really like that the lines even look like a whirlwind! That's a clever device, especially given the theme..hadn't seen that.
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Date: 2/6/2016 1:37:00 PM
Brian, thanks for visiting and for the wow and awesome, and the compliment on my writing, oh I like that word clever....