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My poetry garden of late has lain untended and forlorn. I succumbed to shock and dismay upon entering recently, for I observed that great disagreement had erupted and now vehemently raged among adjoining unmade weed-filled beds of subjects and verbs. Modifiers that had been dutifully arranged and carefully kept in check upon their trellises now dangled everywhere. Sentences had spilled out of their beds in fragments or running on and on while cases of subjectives and objectives shamelessly intermingled and were now easily mistaken one for another. Grammar, whose care I had entrusted to first, second and third persons, lay in shameless disarray, as if no one could tell the difference. Gerunds casually consorted with infinitives, many of which had split. I recalled with a sigh how many years it had taken me to tightly bind them. [To bind them tightly is what I meant.] Commas were everywhere, rendering those in appropriate position practically unrecognizable, which I suppose was better than what had happened to the capitals, now completely ignored. No reason for the rhyme with forms confused or misplaced altogether. My lines, unpruned, were of disparate length and hideously incompl An unfortunate mis-spell had been cast and provoked an infestation, such that many of my friends had departed without comment. The contest entry was blocked, so I bowed my head in shame, turned around and shuffled silently through the exit marked N/A. Posted July 24, 2014 'Let the Pens Flow - Narrative' Contest Jenish Somadas

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Date: 3/18/2016 9:39:00 PM
This ... is ... GENIUS! I love this style of humor ... and playing off the English language can go on endlessly. So witty is this piece (now I must look up what "gerunds" are ... as with my own poetry garden that's a plant I've forgotten to even plant!). Keep 'em coming!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/18/2016 9:39:00 PM
... oh and I almost forgot. A fave!
Date: 2/19/2016 10:10:00 AM
What a mess! So cleverly crafted!! I do so enjoy the depth and breadth of your imagination! This remind me of A Theodore Roethke tribute I wrote entitled 'FOR SALE.' Much enjoyed my friend! Keith
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Date: 4/5/2015 10:28:00 PM
Mark, Thank you for the sweet reply to my comment. Have yourself a Happy Easter Love LINDA
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Date: 11/18/2014 8:32:00 AM
With this piece I have added you to my favorite poets. I thoroughly enjoyed walking through your chaotic garden. This is a truly brilliant piece of writing. 7777777!
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Mark Peterson
Date: 11/18/2014 9:21:00 AM
Hey, Richard, thanks a bunch. You were on my list to visit today, but you beat me to it. See you soon.
Date: 10/25/2014 11:43:00 AM
Brilliant write Mark....I also have taken that exit, but sooner or later exits 1, 2. or 3 come into view...
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Mark Peterson
Date: 10/28/2014 2:31:00 AM
Yes, Joseph, I've had some hits amid the misses. I have to please myself, and, apart from that, if others enjoy my poems, that's a bonus. Thanks for your persistent interest in my work.
Date: 10/18/2014 9:12:00 PM
Beautifully penned. Love your sentences, commas, grammar, modifiers, infinitives, subjects, verbs wow what an authentic piece of fine poetry! You are very creative in what you do!
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Mark Peterson
Date: 10/28/2014 2:29:00 AM
Oh, this was just a bit of whimsy. So glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 9/25/2014 5:00:00 AM
poetry is art, creates images and thoughts in reader's mind and you mastered it.... an extraordinary write
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Mark Peterson
Date: 9/26/2014 1:59:00 AM
Malik, thanks so much for stopping in to read this little bit of whimsy. So much fun to get worthwhile comments.
Date: 9/25/2014 3:20:00 AM
I've not departed as fan nor friend. Life has simply sprung a leak and I'm wading to my knees. Your writing is truly near and dear to me. Hugs! This is fantastic! My apologies if it seemed I didn't care.
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Mark Peterson
Date: 9/26/2014 2:00:00 AM
Nothing I like more than to have you stop by to read my poetry. I hope you're able to plug the leak soon and drain the swamp. Many thanks.
Date: 9/24/2014 1:00:00 PM
ohh, a garden of fine verses... N/As are from others' point of view; you know you are really good, make.. nice to read you again.. huggs
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Mark Peterson
Date: 9/26/2014 2:01:00 AM
Thanks for your loyalty—always stopping by to see if there's something new, and you always have something praiseworthy to add. Many, many thanks dear Nette.
Date: 9/2/2014 8:36:00 AM
Thanks for the nice reply once again. Linda
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Mark Peterson
Date: 9/26/2014 2:03:00 AM
I'll get by soon to take another look. You are such a precious member of this group. My rhyme bone has a funny little ache these days, which makes for neither poetry nor reason.
Date: 9/1/2014 9:56:00 PM
What a treat! Your poetry never ceases to amaze me. Your poem has left me knowing why I explore poetry. It is because of pieces like this! I am putting this into my fav's. If you got an N/A on an entry they clearly missed your message. I get them too. I am sure we all do. Cheers
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Mark Peterson
Date: 9/2/2014 7:41:00 AM
Connie, what lovely words you have composed for me and what great honor you bestowed. Thank you so very much. I've been inactive of late but hope to re-engage soon.
Date: 8/12/2014 9:31:00 AM
You tend your garden SO VERY WELL. The weeds are all cut, the rows are straight but, green grass grows around the hut....
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Mark Peterson
Date: 8/14/2014 9:26:00 AM
Thanks for visiting Robert. Yes, gardens need constant attention.
Date: 8/9/2014 8:09:00 AM
I am faving this one! Very creative and unique. English was always my favorite subject in school and I absolutely loved to diagram sentences. Your images of the absolutes of grammar rules running amok are wonderful.
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Mark Peterson
Date: 8/9/2014 1:16:00 PM
Monterey, your comment is appreciated so very much. I find that diagramming sentences is one of the most valuable skills I ever acquired, thanks to a first-rate English teacher in junior high. Another English teacher in college finished the job with grammar, punctuation and logic. Thanks again.
Date: 7/25/2014 7:32:00 PM
hey, YES, I really like this one, Mark. It's clever and enjoyable to read as well. I sure hate those N/A exits. URGGGG. GREAT writing, my friend.
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Mark Peterson
Date: 8/9/2014 1:21:00 PM
Thanks my Utahan friend. Got a visitor coming from there at the end of the month. Anyway, always nice to hear from you although I doubt you see many N/A marks next to your entries.
Date: 7/25/2014 6:35:00 PM
Yes, you are a nice guy :) As a matter of fact, I freaked out when you stopped by my poems, yesterday or so.
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Mark Peterson
Date: 8/9/2014 1:25:00 PM
Amazing, Linda. Honestly, I freak out when people show up and actually like my stuff. Anyway, thanks again.
Date: 7/25/2014 5:46:00 PM
Okay, thank you for the comment on my comment, that was mighty nice of ya... Linda
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Mark Peterson
Date: 7/25/2014 6:32:00 PM
I'm such a nice guy.
Date: 7/25/2014 5:36:00 PM
A fine poetry garden, ramble from your pen. I hope this was not one of my contest, if it is it's on standby. Mark, I am not perfect, and have never graded on what was confused above. Thanks for expressing your words in such a way...Linda
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Mark Peterson
Date: 7/25/2014 5:44:00 PM
Linda, I haven't entered this in any contest. It's quite often difficult for me to write on command, i.e., submit a poem that's original to the contest. Poetry usually comes to me unbidden, meaning I have to sit around and wait for who knows how long. Then I sometimes look and see if it fits with a contest and enter it. Anyway, thanks for stopping by.
Date: 7/25/2014 10:28:00 AM
Extremely clever write Mark really enjoyed the humour here - comments are few and far between - so sad - I can comment on up to 50 writes and be lucky to get 7 responses - you get to know who will comment these days. Hugs Jan xxx
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2014 10:37:00 AM
:-) xxx
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Mark Peterson
Date: 7/25/2014 10:36:00 AM
Thank you, precious Jan. I think I can help and so will stop by soon.
Date: 7/25/2014 8:39:00 AM
brilliant, clever and absolutely delightful! you deserve a prize for this one (or at least a lot more comments!!!).
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Mark Peterson
Date: 7/25/2014 10:37:00 AM
Oh, Ilene, it's been far too long since my avatar shared the same page as yours. Wonderful comment, and I must visit you soon.
Date: 7/24/2014 10:51:00 PM
This just made my evening...How adorable and clever. Love especially the last bit...through the exit called N/A.. going to my favs..BG
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Mark Peterson
Date: 7/25/2014 11:11:00 AM
Oh, this delights me so. What an unexpected treat! Thanks so much, Barbara. I'll stop by your place later today.

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