My Night Journey

Let me tell you a story of my night journey; After a hazardous trip from a far off state With drooping spirits and waning energy I alighted at the station to catch the night train My heart besieged by memories of my home, left behind Like a drop in the ocean I quickly merged with the buzzing crowd In the blinking light of platform lamps I saw a huge crowd- the young and the old With baggage heaped on baggage, patiently on wait Time slouched on at snail’s pace…. At last hearing a long drawn whistle from far I looked out and saw the train coming, snorting noisily And halting with a screeching sound The real ordeal begins as one lifts his suitcase And pushes his way along with all strength, Between bags and boxes and people, And the porters running after you to carry the cargo Finally I got into the train and occupied my seat among strangers My mind plagued with fears of thieves and molesters It was my first journey alone at night I don’t know when I fell into a deep slumber It was with the sound of * ‘chai…chai’ that I woke up The inviting aroma of brewed tea entered my nostrils At last I have reached my native soil! I am heading home, every step and every inch Drawing me closer and closer to my sweet haven My heart began to pump quicker I felt like a marooned mariner Suddenly cast ashore by a rescue boat! __________________________________ *‘Chai’is a local term in our language for tea ! April. 19. 2022 Form N- Narrative New Poetryy Contest Sponsor- Constance La France Topic- Journey

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Date: 5/9/2022 7:58:00 AM
Valsa, excellent and congratulations on your win in my Narrative, Let me tell you a story ... contest, wonderful storytelling, blessings ~Constance
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Date: 4/28/2022 9:14:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. "My Night Journey" is a lovely story/write. Love how it all worked out. "Suddenly cast ashore by a rescue boat!" Have a blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 4/28/2022 7:02:00 AM
It's a great story of journey. I can very well imagine it. Beautifully illustrated. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/27/2022 7:59:00 PM
Back with many congratulations on your well-deserved win, Valsa. With this magnificent poem, you have more than earned it.
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Date: 4/27/2022 3:59:00 PM
Thank you for taking us to your night journey. I have no words the way your incredible pen gave justice and created this journey into a magical experience. Congratulations dear friend.
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Date: 4/21/2022 11:42:00 AM
Your journey sounds frightening, the unknown always is, and the circumstances that confronted you, braved so well, challenging in the dark and alone. Great write Valsa. Hugs blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 4/20/2022 10:40:00 AM
You've recounted an unbelievable journey to us. When you go out of your safety zone, Valsa, there's still that gnawing sense of uneasiness about what may happen next. Wonderful metaphors and great wording.Best for a big win
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Date: 4/19/2022 1:27:00 PM
The lovely story told so well Valsa, nice imagery, and good expression too. Blessings, Gordon
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Date: 4/19/2022 7:01:00 AM
Home sweet home. Time & place are so relative ( one is mother-in-law, LOL). Thx 4 this share-scare- care write
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Date: 4/19/2022 5:11:00 AM
Your narration brings forth the scenes --your first night journey I am sure you will always remember. Well composed, as always, Valsa.
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Date: 4/19/2022 4:53:00 AM
You discribed an amazing journey Valsa, there's always that nagging fear of the unknown when you leave your comfort zone. Greetings from Turkey. Tom
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Date: 4/19/2022 4:20:00 AM
Ahhh!! So glad that the journey ended safely at the correct destination. Very creative, descriptive and expressive work. Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 4/19/2022 2:44:00 AM
Good that you ended your journey safely. Well done. Great details.
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