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My Life As a Smoke Ring

With a nice cigar I blow a perfect smoke ring, And the ring holds briefly. I consider that focus of energy-- The snapping of my jaw. The ring succumbs to the evening: Hard-edged blue smoke Burns off the hot stick end Soft volumes of gray puffed circles Spew forth as the moment calls To live out their perfect circle lives Then be annihilated Unnoticed By mere confusions In the cool night breeze I consider my House Pieces of life drawn together Of more dynamic forces. Energies which held together Home Decay In the same way the smoke ring is gone.

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Date: 11/22/2019 4:06:00 PM
Your smoke ring metaphor has certainly attracted my attention, Dalton. An excellent reminiscent poem. Such is life! Regards // paul
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Dalton Moss
Date: 12/4/2019 12:12:00 PM
Thanks Paul! As the smoke ring said, It's nicer to not be "unnoticed." Cheers!
Date: 5/17/2019 7:53:00 PM
It is amazing how we do not see the whole picture but this is it. " Spew forth as the moment calls To live out their perfect circle lives Then be annihilated Unnoticed" yes! Great job!
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Dalton Moss
Date: 5/18/2019 1:52:00 AM
Thanks Caren. Noticed.
Date: 5/17/2019 3:20:00 PM
Great, evocative piece!
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Dalton Moss
Date: 5/18/2019 1:50:00 AM
Thank you, Maureen!

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