My Life As a Smoke Ring

With a nice cigar
I blow a perfect smoke ring,
And the ring holds briefly.  

I consider that focus of energy-- 
The snapping of my jaw.
The ring succumbs to the evening:

       Hard-edged blue smoke
       Burns off the hot stick end
       Soft volumes of gray puffed circles 
       Spew forth as the moment calls
       To live out their perfect circle lives
       Then be annihilated
       Unnoticed
       By mere confusions
       In the cool night breeze 

I consider my House
Pieces of life drawn together 
Of more dynamic forces.

Energies which held together Home
Decay
In the same way the smoke ring is gone.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 11/22/2019 4:06:00 PM
Your smoke ring metaphor has certainly attracted my attention, Dalton. An excellent reminiscent poem. Such is life! Regards // paul
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Date: 12/4/2019 12:12:00 PM
Thanks Paul! As the smoke ring said, It's nicer to not be "unnoticed." Cheers!
Date: 5/17/2019 7:53:00 PM
It is amazing how we do not see the whole picture but this is it. " Spew forth as the moment calls To live out their perfect circle lives Then be annihilated Unnoticed" yes! Great job!
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Date: 5/18/2019 1:52:00 AM
Thanks Caren. Noticed.
Date: 5/17/2019 3:20:00 PM
Great, evocative piece!
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Dalton Moss
Date: 5/18/2019 1:50:00 AM
Thank you, Maureen!
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