Darren White Poet Free verse

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Space Cadet rearranged and edited one of my older poems. I like it, and will post it here. Thanks Wesley :)

My Language - Edited By Space Cadet

The  words 
I  write  are  fluent;
my pen twitches,               my face 
with eyes closed,                    halts my tongue.
With eyes closed,                             I can see these
beautiful   little                                      poems evolve.
Turns of phrase                                   turn a smile
from my colorful                        smithereens.
They save me                    from the harsh,
reality  that                  is this body,
and clutter oasis syllables 
on barren page

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May 9, 2017
Copyright © Darren White

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Adeyemi Joshua August 4, 2017 at 1:29 PM Your style spurs you to write...Lovely!

Jeremy Smith May 11, 2017 at 2:56 AM This is an amazing piece Darren!! Very inspirational!! Darren White May 11, 2017 at 3:17 AM Thanks, Jeremy :)

Chris Green May 9, 2017 at 7:22 AM Very cool, the poem is amazing and the formatting is very creative. This poem is quite deep and expressive. Great job my friend and great job to Space Cadet as well. Darren White May 9, 2017 at 7:26 AM Thanks my friend. I love working with Space Cadet, because he challenges every word I write, and every sentence I utter :)

Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 7:04 AM Darren the formatting is amazing and my interpretation is i see an open mouth uttering your wonderful words:-) hugs Jan xx 7 Darren White May 9, 2017 at 7:25 AM You are allowed to see anything in it you linke to see, Jan :) Thank you!

Probir Gupta May 9, 2017 at 6:22 AM Wonderful format ... Beautiful sketch of a personality .. Darren White May 9, 2017 at 6:33 AM Thank you so very much Probir.

Anne-Marie Coreggia May 9, 2017 at 5:42 AM Your creative expression and poetic exploration strongly reminded me of one of my very favorite poets: Jacques Prévert. If you have time check out: 'To Paint the Portrait of a Bird' He begins with: 'first paint a cage with an open door . . .' beauty or the poetic expression is something we can only strive to possess, but to 'capture' it you have to be willing to erase all the bars of the cage, and that's what you are doing Darren, and the bird does sing for you:) Amitiés Darren White May 9, 2017 at 6:32 AM Merci, Anne-Marie, I am going to find and read that poem, it sounds beautiful. The bars of my cage are slowly disappearing :)

Lisa Ricci May 9, 2017 at 3:24 AM Good Afternoon Darren. Hi. Very expressive in words and shape. This must have taken time to execute for the shape that is. The words are strong "with my eyes clothes halts my tongue with eyes clothes beautiful little poems evolve. How beautiful is that. Very. Well done in its entirety Darren. Have a wonderful afternoon. Darren White May 9, 2017 at 5:33 AM Ha Lisa! Thank you. Wesley always cuts down the number of words I use. And sometimes it makes for wonderful poetry indeed :)

White Wolf May 9, 2017 at 2:24 AM I like these shenanigans you two get up to together! And you are right! Smithereens is a fantastic word! This is great, and I can see a diamond! Darren White May 9, 2017 at 5:32 AM We always are up to something indeed Budgie :) Thanks!

Sara Ella May 9, 2017 at 2:02 AM Your poetry is a gift, my friend. This is true about how you take words and make something beautiful <3 Darren White May 9, 2017 at 5:31 AM Heya my friend :) I hope you sleeeeeeep now. Thank you <3