My Lacking

I laughed and the world was silent
For it seemed the joke was me
I wished to be a comfort
Yet, it was not meant to be

I stood upon the broadest shoulders
and still in the end I felt quite short
I couldn't see past lonely mountains
What goodly news could I report?

Those things I saw off in the distance
Raced towards me with a blinding speed
I dreamt of how they'd satisfy me
Yet sadly they did not meet my need

Within broken mind, I searched for justice
The lady outpaced by quite a bit
She said "If you really want to catch me,
You have to do oh so much more than sit!"

I chose to climb, the highest of mountains
Surveyed the majestic valleys below
Expected I'd be warmed by the sunshine
But Instead, I felt the fridgid winds blow

I shifted my gaze towards the heavens
Wondered deep down, why I felt all alone
As I sat cross legged I tried to listen
Felt a deep aching within tired bone

My greatest lacking was understanding
Until God's Mercy allowed me to cry
Temporary would lead to forever
The cycles of life connected to why

So my tears flowed into rivers
Down the tall mountain into the sea
It seems, I was always connected
Yes, the whole world was crying with me

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 4/28/2015 9:04:00 AM
Reading through your words gives a majestic result of creating expectations and at the same time meeting them. This is awesome considering the feat achieved in a few lines. Great write friend and please keep on letting your heart speak for us to learn and enjoy. A def 7
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Date: 4/27/2015 2:57:00 PM
Kindness personified! Beautiful!
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Date: 4/26/2015 9:57:00 AM
This poem has it all my friend. Fantastic message, smooth flow, great great rhyme and deep insight into the imperfection of man! A7 from me and a great read this fine morn!
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Date: 4/25/2015 1:53:00 PM
Richard, your poem is magic, full of deep emotion and feelings, we are all basically alone in the universe, upon that mountain seeking, so well worded and presented, A 7
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Date: 4/25/2015 11:42:00 AM
awesome poem, I give it a 9.
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Date: 4/25/2015 9:34:00 AM
Rick, you out did yourself. Beautiful poem a 7 and a fav sir. Blessings dear friend Eve
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Date: 4/25/2015 2:22:00 AM
I feel this write, Richard....SO many of the lines speak to me. Beautiful in so many ways. Sending you hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/25/2015 7:17:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, hugs back to you.
Date: 4/24/2015 11:54:00 PM
You certainly are not lacking of wisdom, nor poetic talent!!! A7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/25/2015 1:00:00 AM
You are kind and also good for my ego.
Date: 4/24/2015 8:52:00 PM
I guess everyone can relate, Richard. At one time or another, we all feel we're alone, especially after making a hard decision; having considered what is right, what is the best that the situation calls for, and what would send the message of love for everyone...and yet, many are not satisfied. Ah, but that would be another saying...haha. Sorry if I digress.... :). Anyway, you are right, as usual. Human we all are, and our tears join yours in this ocean both of sorrow and joy. HUgs! Kim :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/25/2015 1:02:00 AM
A very poetic response Kim, thanks for adding to the stream of consciences.
Date: 4/24/2015 5:02:00 PM
Wow! Awesome! A fav!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/25/2015 1:03:00 AM
Thanks Monterey. Hugs Rick.
Date: 4/24/2015 12:39:00 PM
As always an elegant write . love the subtle way you present images.L&H, Mehnaz Thank you for the honour in your contest :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/25/2015 1:06:00 AM
My pleasure Mehnaz.
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